阿伦艾佛森的作文

阿伦艾弗森

The reading passage mainly provides us with three reasons about the courses of the decline of yellow cedar. The professor deals with the same issue; however, he thinks that none of those reasons provided by reading is adequate.



Firstly, the reading discusses that insect parasites may be a reason for the decline of cedar. In contrast, the professor claims that healthy cedar may be more pest-resistant than other trees. Their bark is contained powerful chemical thing which is poisonous for insects. The trees which insects attack are ones already die. So insects can’t be the main fundamental course for the decrease of cedar.



Secondly, the reading makes a point that brow bears become a reason for cedars’ decline. Whereas the professor demonstrates that the yellow cedars are died through a region from mainland to island. However, no bears live in island. The trees damaged in the areas where both with and without bears. So bears have no responsible for the damage of trees.



Thirdly, the reading states that climate change may effect the cedars’ roots and become a cause for death of cedars. The lecture casts doubt that if the reason provided by reading is correct, the trees would die in cold climate and high elevation. On contrary, the trees die in a warm temperature and low elevation.

chasedreamabc

The reading passage mainly provides us with three reasons about the courses of the decline of yellow cedar. The professor deals with the same issue; however, he thinks that none of those reasons provided by reading is adequate.

Firstly, the reading discusses that insect parasites may be a reason for the decline of cedar. In contrast, the professor claims that healthy cedar may be more pest-resistant than other trees（more...than...在严格的语法中讲求对称，pest-resistant ＆other trees 不能构成对称，可以+‘s）. Their bark is contained powerful chemical thing which is poisonous for insects. The trees which insects attack are ones already die.（听力表达的意思是sick，这里用die不是很恰当，侵害的是受损，不是已经跪了的） So insects can’t (cannot) be the main fundamental course for the decrease of cedar.
使用从句同位语能增加文章的层次，不过一段中过多的话，就显得单一，不是很多元化
Secondly, the reading makes a point that brow bears become a reason for cedars’ decline. Whereas the professor demonstrates that the yellow cedars are died through a region from mainland to island. However, no bears live in island（the+~，或者是those）. The trees damaged in the areas where both with and without bears. So bears have no responsible for the damage of trees.

Thirdly, the reading states that climate change may effect the cedars’ roots and become a cause for death of cedars. The lecture casts doubt that if the reason provided by reading is correct, the trees would die in cold climate and high elevation. On contrary, the trees die in a warm temperature and low elevation.

PS:总体的听力要点都有，个别的衔接的逻辑完整一下就ok

阿伦艾弗森

the reading passage mainly provides us with three findings about actual tissues of animals. the professor deals with the same issue; however, he thinks that none of those findings are reasonable.


firstly, the reading discusses that hollows in the bones may be the location of vessels once lived. in contrast, the professor claims that bacterias often live inside bones and leave behind trace of organic material.


secondly, the reading makes a point that remains of red blood cells are revealed by microscopic examinatin. wheares the professor demonstrates that fossils of primitive animals that did not have any red blood cells when they are alive.


thirdly, the reading states that dinosaur leg bones contain collagen. the lecture casts doubts that collagen cannot last for hundrend thousand of years and the presence of collagen may from another much more recent score.

birdie089123

才写完哈，哈哈，要吃饭了，就速度帮你看了下，没有回原文对应仔细看了。有问题可以给我留言

the The reading passage mainly provides us with three findings about actual tissues of animals. the professor deals with the same issue; however, he thinks that none of those findings are reasonable.


firstlyFirstly, the reading discusses that hollows in the bones may be the location of vessels once lived(lived 用词觉得有问题). in contrast, the professor claims that bacterias often live inside bones and leave behind trace of organic material.


secondly, the reading makes a point that remains of red blood cells are revealed by microscopic examination. wheares the professor demonstrates that fossils of primitive animals that did not have any red blood cells when they are alive. （最好把先听力中reddish material at the same place in other fossil 写出来，这样反驳比较对应）


thirdly, the reading states that dinosaur leg bones contain collagen. the lecture casts doubts that collagen cannot last for hundrend thousand of years and the presence of collagen may from another much more recent score.（没什么问题，score？？）
总评：
总的来说，大致要点都听到了。 但是以我的经验，尽量多写到听力中的细节点（你在这点做的不够，例如第二个red blood cell观点）。
还有首字母大写，细节也不能忽视。
最后句子可以再丰富点。

阿伦艾弗森

The lecturer claims that the new policy, which allows people to work four days a week instead of five, will have negative effects for companies as well as society. This claim is not in agreement with that of the reading passage, which suggests that such a policy will be beneficial.
According to the lecture, a company that allows employees to have fewer working hours is likely to hire more people to ensure that it meets normal levels of productivity but it will increase the training fee for new employees. The reading passage, by contrast, suggests that employees who enjoy more leisure time make fewer mistakes.

secondly, The lecturer asserts that for the sake of saving money, employers might raise their expectations of 4-day employees rather than recruit more people. in addition, the employees will finish 5-days work in 4 days which will increase their pressure to work.
Finally, the lecturer argues that under the new policy, employees will experience not only decreased quality of life , but also fewer chances to be promoted to supervisory positions. However, the reading passage contends that more free time can create opportunities to employees to have time with their families.

margrate

The lecturer claims that the new policy, which allows people to work four days a week instead of five, will have negative effects for companies as well as society. This claim is not in agreement with that of the reading passage, which suggests that such a policy will be beneficial.
According to the lecture, a company that allows employees to have fewer working hours is likely to hire more people to ensure that it meets normal levels of productivity but it will increase the training fee for new employees. （补充office和computer的那一点吧）The reading passage, by contrast, suggests that employees who enjoy more leisure time make fewer mistakes.

secondly, The lecturer asserts that for the sake of saving money, employers might raise their expectations of 4-day employees rather than recruit more people.（感觉这句话逻辑关系错误，是为了save money， expectation才提高的么？而且第一个点少了：work overtime to make difference） in addition, the employees will finish 5-days work in 4 days which will increase their pressure to work.
Finally, the lecturer argues that under the new policy, employees will experience not only decreased quality of life , but also fewer chances to be promoted to supervisory positions. However, the reading passage contends that more free time can create opportunities to employees to have time with their families.
-- by 会员 阿伦艾弗森 (2012/10/16 10:24:52)

阿伦艾弗森

the reading passage mainly provides us about three problems that may prove some of the pictures may not drawn by Rembrandt. the professor deals with the same issue; however, she thinks that examination tells us that these pictures were indeed drawn by Rembrandt.

firstly, the reading discusses that the dressing of the woman in portrait is inconsistent. In contrast, the professor claims that X-ray analysis of pigment tells us that fur collar wasn't the original painting.

secondly, the reading makes a point that the shadow and light do not fit each other. whereas the professor demonstrates that the original picture pictured light-colored cloth and it seemed really realistic.

thirdly, the reading states that the panal are made of several pieces of wood together. the professor casts doubts that the picture originally made of single piece of wood; however, other people enlarged the picture in order to make it more grand and valuable. also, some traces can tell us that Rembrandt did use pieces of wood to finish his work such as his self-portray with hat.

birdie089123

the reading passage mainly provides us about three problems that （两个may在一个句子略显重复）prove some of the pictures may not drawn by Rembrandt. The professor deals with the same issue, however, she thinks that examination tells us that(就是一幅画 Portrait of an elderly woman) were indeed drawn by Rembrandt.
！！！！首字母大写！！！！！！
firstly, the reading discusses that the dressing of the woman in portrait is inconsistent.（总结不够清楚，太简单） In contrast, the professor claims that X-ray analysis of pigment tells us that fur collar wasn't the original painting. 因为阅读部分没有说明为什么inconsistent ，所以听力的fur collar 显得突然，没有对应。

secondly, the reading makes a point that the shadow and light do not fit each other. whereas the professor demonstrates that the original picture pictured light-colored cloth and it seemed really realistic.（seemed 不合适直接was就行吧）

thirdly, the reading states that the panal are made of several pieces of wood together. the professor casts doubts that the picture originally made of single piece of wood;（我对于这个;不是很理解，还有后面的however引导的转折前后对应是什么pro 怀疑但是people enlarged pic？有待斟酌） however, other people enlarged the picture in order to make it more grand and valuable. (最好用 what’s more/in addition)also, some traces can tell us that Rembrandt did use pieces of wood to finish his work such as his self-portray with hat.（这句总结的不太好直接说清楚2幅画的wood from the same tree就可以了）



文中的点其实都已经写出来了，就是一些细节（大写，；）一定注意。

还有就是阅读部分的总结最好能够结合听力反驳点，这样能够有对应驳斥的效果。加油



对对，还有一点！虽然是AI 但是交作业要按时，希望下次早点交，呵呵！

klllun

也~米有可以修改的，虫子回家去啦。阿伦，写好了站短我哈

阿伦艾弗森

the reading passage mainly provides us three competing theories about the use of "great houses". the professor deals with the same issue; however, he thinks that none of those theories are convincing.

firstly, the reading discusses that Chaco structure might use for resenditial. in contrast the professor claims that the outside of building seemed that they used for resident but the inside of house remained serious of doubts that if people lived in Chaco structure, there might be many fire places. however, just few fire places remained there. the largest room just had a few fire places which can be used for 10 families. it couldn't give condition for such many people lived there.

secondly, the reading makes the point that storing food supplies might be another use for Chaco structures. whereas the professor demonstrates that it is sound plausible but unconvincing because there had few containers for grain maize to be contained.

thirdly, the reading states that the place might be used as religious center. the professor casts doubts that there were large numbers of building materials such as sands, stones. also, there left over pots trash which might come from the left of meal. so the place can't be use for ceremonial centers.