求综合部分提高..Writing加油!!

陈喵喵holdon

8.26综合 TPO24

写完回头一看才发现开头太长了...T  T


The professor holds a relatively skeptical attitude toward the reasons which are given in the reading passage to explain researchers' recent discovery of possible opportunities to study actual animal tissues by fossils. It is a 70-million-year old dinosaur, named Tyrannosaurus rex (T. rex), whose leg bones have been deliberately broken, which leads to these possibilities, and the doubts from the professor are illustrated as follows.

Firstly, the soft flexible organic substance in the branching channel of T rex's leg bones mentioned in the reading passage is not necessary to prove the existence of blood vessels, because as they die, bacterium inside may leave behind trace of these substances. Consequently, such substance may from something else rather than blood vessels according to the professor.

Additionally, the professor contends that researchers have found identical iron materials which are assumed to be remains of red blood cells on the basis of the reading passage in other animal fossils in same places, even animals without red blood cells originally. In this case, spheres' origin is suppose to be different ones , or only a kind of mineral instead of blood cells, as asserted by the professor.

Furthermore, the collagen evidence provided in the reading passage can never last over 100,000 years based on the professor. If it do exist in T rex's fossils, it actually contradicts to the scientific fact and is too improbable. To demonstrate this, the professor claims that the collagen may from more recent sources, such as researchers, as a result of the existence of this composition in human skin.

sherryzhangh

The professor holds a relatively skeptical attitude toward the reasons which are given in the reading passage to explain researchers' recent discovery of possible opportunities to study actual animal tissues by fossils. It is a 70-million-year old dinosaur, named Tyrannosaurus rex (T. rex), whose leg bones have been deliberately broken, which leads to these possibilities (possible explanations of the substance), and the doubts from the professor are illustrated as follows.

Firstly, the soft flexible organic substance in the branching channel of T rex's leg bones mentioned in the reading passage is not necessarily to prove the existence of blood vessels,(这好像没有因果关系吧，是说不大可能是blood vessels, 而可能是其他的生物留下来的东西) because as they die, bacterium inside may leave behind trace of these substances. Consequently, such substance may from something else rather than blood vessels according to the professor.

Additionally, the professor contends that researchers have found identical iron materials which are assumed to be remains of red blood cells on the basis of the reading passage in other animal fossils in same places, even animals without red blood cells originally. In this case, spheres' origin is suppose to be different ones , or only a kind of mineral instead of blood cells, as asserted by the professor.

Furthermore, the collagen evidence provided in the reading passage can never last over 100,000 years based on the professor. If it does exist in T rex's fossils, it actually contradicts to the scientific fact and is too improbable. To demonstrate this, the professor claims that the collagen may from more recent sources, such as researchers, as a result of the existence of this composition in human skin.

陈喵喵holdon

8.27综合TPO1


While the reading passage states that employees should have an option to work 4 or 5 days a week, which can be beneficial to companies, economic conditions and workers' lives, the professor holds an opposite opinion that none of these aspects will be positively influenced. The reasons are given as follows.

Firstly, according to the professor, once employees can choose to work 4 days a week, companies will be forced to spend a larger amount of money, as more new-employee trainings are required and medical benefits will increase. Generally, it costs almost the same for health benefits whether workers have one more day of job involvement. Moreover, the reading passage neglects the fact of the additional office space and computers costs resulted by hiring more workers. In this case, the cost will actually exceed the relatively tiny profits gained.

In addition, the overall employment rate will not grow because of other choices made by companies based on costly hiring of new workers. For example, companies may require employees to work overtime or have higher expectations of their work efficiency in order to finish a 5-day work within 4 days. In fact, no extra jobs will be created as the reading passage claimed.

Furthermore, as asserted by the professor, shorter work time may lead to less stable jobs as well as fewer chances to advance careers rather than more free time and improved personal satisfaction which are contended in the reading passage. What is worse, employees who choose to work 4 days may lose jobs more easily in downturn, or miss opportunities to be promoted, since a 5-day work period weekly is more desirable in management positions to have better continuous coverage and supervision.

陈喵喵holdon

8.27 独立  写了整整45分钟.. T T
Know a person from type of friends that he has,agree or disagree

Friendship is a kind of relationship which plays an important role in one's life, and friends generally interact with each other, share experience and especially help each other. As a result, a judgment of knowing a person from types of his friends has been made and accepted by many persons. From my point of view, I judge a person from his own perspectives and behaviors rather than his friends, and the reasons are as follows.

To begin with, it is widely believed that personal characteristics are main factors to determine a person, as different persons have quite distinctive personalities from each other, even among friends. As the saying goes, there are one thousand Hamlet within one thousand audience. That simply indicates various opinions of different persons, which is an aspect of personalities. Furthermore, friends will always share different opinions and experiences, which can reflect reasonless judgments based on only friend circles.

In addition, friends usually share ideas with each other as well as learn from others' advantages to offset own weakness. In this case, an estimation of a person from his friends will lead to a wrong one. In a public speech in Peking University given by Jack Ma, the CEO of Alibaba, the importance of learning from friends and making friends with various sorts of persons is emphasized. Therefore, it suggests that friends are not with exactly the same talent or abilities, or even opposite ones.

Last but not the least, a friend in need is a friend indeed, thus friends sometimes share common sides by assisting each other instead of being similar to each other. For instance, a research conducted in Nanjing University by Nanjing Daily, which investigated the most prominent feature among friendship, revealed that nearly 70% of participants regarded help from friends in an emergency as the most significant feature than similarities or differences with friends. In this respect, conclusions drawn from one's friends will definitely result in problems.

To conclude, friends may have distinctive characteristics respectively, learn mutually or sincerely help each other. Consequently, to simply judge a person by his friends assuming that friends are identical may be partial and have some aspects ignored.

羊咩咩yw

While the reading passage states that employees should have an option to work 4 or 5 days a week, which can be beneficial to companies, economic conditions and workers' lives, the professor holds an opposite opinion that none of these aspects will be positively influenced. The reasons are given as follows.

Firstly, according to the professor, once employees can choose to work 4 days a week, companies will be forced to spend a larger amount of money, as more new-employee trainings are required and medical benefits will increase（我觉得应该把这个分句内容补充在第一句话之前，然后得出公司会pay more money 的结论，这样逻辑更通一点，个人意见哟~~呵呵）. Generally, it costs almost the same for health benefits whether workers have one more day of job involvement. Moreover, the reading passage neglects the fact of the additional office space and computers costs resulted by hiring more workers. In this case, the cost will actually exceed the relatively tiny profits gained.

In addition, the overall employment rate will not grow because of other choices made by companies based on costly hiring of new workers. For example, companies may require employees to work overtime or have higher expectations of their work efficiency in order to finish a 5-day work within 4 days. In fact, no extra jobs will be created as the reading passage claimed.

Furthermore, as asserted by the professor, shorter work time may lead to less stable jobs as well as fewer chances to advance careers rather than more free time and improved personal satisfaction which are contended in the reading passage. What is worse, employees who choose to work 4 days may lose jobs more easily in downturn(这里的经济萧条写全会更好~~), or miss opportunities to be promoted, since a 5-day work period weekly is more desirable in management positions to have better continuous coverage and supervision.


1. 第一个点听力的句子是：Offering employees the option of a four-day workweek will probably force companies to spend more, possibly a lot more. 然后你的这句once employees can choose to work 4 days a week，听力原文中只是给出可能性，但是你的once出来以后就给人一种：一旦..就...，所以我觉得在逻辑上合原文有出入。个人意见哈~~呵呵
2. Moreover, the reading passage neglects the fact of the additional office space and computers costs resulted by hiring more workers. 我觉得直接写成，neglects the costs of the additional office space and computers, which will cut into the companies' profits. 你觉得呢？
3. 第三段的点读起来也有点点小出入，不知道是不是我太挑剔了，其实你已经写得不错了~听力里面讲的是，这种选择虽然能够给employee更多free time ，但同样也增加了风险。之后才列举了风险是什么，但你的TS有点把细节当观点了~~也是个人观点哟，如果我说得不好不要怪我吖~~呵呵

陈喵喵holdon

8.27综合TPO1


While the reading passage states that employees should have an option to work 4 or 5 days a week, which can be beneficial to companies, economic conditions and workers' lives, the professor holds an opposite opinion that none of these aspects will be positively influenced. The reasons are given as follows.

Firstly, according to the professor, once employees can choose to work 4 days a week, companies will be forced to spend a larger amount of money, as more new-employee trainings are required and medical benefits will increase（我觉得应该把这个分句内容补充在第一句话之前，然后得出公司会pay more money 的结论，这样逻辑更通一点，个人意见哟~~呵呵）. Generally, it costs almost the same for health benefits whether workers have one more day of job involvement. Moreover, the reading passage neglects the fact of the additional office space and computers costs resulted by hiring more workers. In this case, the cost will actually exceed the relatively tiny profits gained.

In addition, the overall employment rate will not grow because of other choices made by companies based on costly hiring of new workers（这个观点好像和原文不太一样，我去回顾下，在来和你讨论哈~~）. For example, companies may require employees to work overtime or have higher expectations of their work efficiency in order to finish a 5-day work within 4 days. In fact, no extra jobs will be created as the reading passage claimed.

Furthermore, as asserted by the professor, shorter work time may lead to less stable jobs as well as fewer chances to advance careers rather than more free time and improved personal satisfaction which are contended in the reading passage. What is worse, employees who choose to work 4 days may lose jobs more easily in downturn(这里的经济萧条写全会更好~~), or miss opportunities to be promoted, since a 5-day work period weekly is more desirable in management positions to have better continuous coverage and supervision.

不好意思吖~来改晚了，下次如果和我分到了一组，可以提前告诉我你想看到修改稿的时间，我会尽量在之前改完滴~~呵呵
总体结构很好，就是个别的观点可能是因为表达的原因总觉得和原文有出入呢，我还没写，我去写写，然后来和你讨论~~
plus,有些句子用得很精彩

-- by 会员 羊咩咩yw (2012/8/28 15:07:11)

没有你慢慢改，我不急哈
之前也有人说我因为表达的关系显得跟原文有出入..很苦恼因为我自己也不觉得.. 想问下能不能帮忙指出具体是哪些地方??麻烦啦~

lemonyhu

8.27 独立写了整整45分钟.. T T
Know a person from type of friends that he has,agree or disagree

Friendship is a kind of relationship which plays an important role in one's life, and friends generally interact with each other, share experience and especially help each other. As a result, a judgment of knowing a person from types of his friends has been made and accepted by many persons. From my point of view, I judge a person from his own perspectives and behaviors rather than his friends, and the reasons are as follows.

To begin with, it is widely believed that personal characteristics are main factors to determine a person, as different persons have quite distinctive personalities from each other, even among friends. As the saying goes, there are one thousand Hamlet within one thousand audience. That simply indicates various opinions of different persons, which is an aspect of personalities. Furthermore, friends will always share different opinions and experiences, which can reflect reasonless judgments based on only friend circles.

In addition, friends usually share ideas with each other as well as learn from others' advantages to offset own weakness. In this case, an estimation of a person from his friends will lead to a wrong one. In a public speech in Peking University given by Jack Ma, the CEO of Alibaba, the importance of learning from friends and making friends with various sorts of persons is emphasized. Therefore, it suggests that friends are not with exactly the same talent or abilities, or even opposite ones.（这句话说的是friends有可能share opposite personality 对吧？但是跟在前面一句后头就感觉意思正好表达反了似的）

Last but notthe least, a friend in need is a friend indeed, thus friends sometimes share common sides by assisting each other instead of being similar to each other. For instance, a research conducted in Nanjing University by Nanjing Daily, which investigated the most prominent feature among friendship, revealed that nearly 70% of participants regarded help from friends in an emergency as the most significant feature than similarities or differences with friends. In this respect（aspect？）, conclusions drawn from one's friends will definitely result in problems.

To conclude, friends may have distinctive characteristicsrespectively,（我觉得有distinctive就够了，不需要多一个respectively，反而有点累赘）learn mutually or sincerely help each other.（这句话跟前面连在一句话里有点奇怪） Consequently, to simply judge a person by his friends assuming that friends are identical may be partial and have some aspects ignored.

看完我也受启发啊！！好文！！！
错误很少，就是有些地方我觉得有点歧义~有待讨论

关于阅读的问题~~我其实就是读==练==因为一开始做的时候觉得阅读做的特烂，还没做完，结果分还行吧，26~
技巧什么的实在是没什么发言权啊
喵喵是一战？

羊咩咩yw

我已经写上了我的想法了哟~~呵呵，希望不会觉得我太挑剔，你已经很棒了~~

陈喵喵holdon

8.27 独立写了整整45分钟.. T T
Know a person from type of friends that he has,agree or disagree

Friendship is a kind of relationship which plays an important role in one's life, and friends generally interact with each other, share experience and especially help each other. As a result, a judgment of knowing a person from types of his friends has been made and accepted by many persons. From my point of view, I judge a person from his own perspectives and behaviors rather than his friends, and the reasons are as follows.

To begin with, it is widely believed that personal characteristics are main factors to determine a person, as different persons have quite distinctive personalities from each other, even among friends. As the saying goes, there are one thousand Hamlet within one thousand audience. That simply indicates various opinions of different persons, which is an aspect of personalities. Furthermore, friends will always share different opinions and experiences, which can reflect reasonless judgments based on only friend circles.

In addition, friends usually share ideas with each other as well as learn from others' advantages to offset own weakness. In this case, an estimation of a person from his friends will lead to a wrong one. In a public speech in Peking University given by Jack Ma, the CEO of Alibaba, the importance of learning from friends and making friends with various sorts of persons is emphasized. Therefore, it suggests that friends are not with exactly the same talent or abilities, or even opposite ones.（这句话说的是friends有可能share opposite personality 对吧？但是跟在前面一句后头就感觉意思正好表达反了似的）

Last but notthe least, a friend in need is a friend indeed, thus friends sometimes share common sides by assisting each other instead of being similar to each other. For instance, a research conducted in Nanjing University by Nanjing Daily, which investigated the most prominent feature among friendship, revealed that nearly 70% of participants regarded help from friends in an emergency as the most significant feature than similarities or differences with friends. In this respect（aspect？）, conclusions drawn from one's friends will definitely result in problems.

To conclude, friends may have distinctive characteristicsrespectively,（我觉得有distinctive就够了，不需要多一个respectively，反而有点累赘）learn mutually or sincerely help each other.（这句话跟前面连在一句话里有点奇怪） Consequently, to simply judge a person by his friends assuming that friends are identical may be partial and have some aspects ignored.

看完我也受启发啊！！好文！！！
错误很少，就是有些地方我觉得有点歧义~有待讨论

关于阅读的问题~~我其实就是读==练==因为一开始做的时候觉得阅读做的特烂，还没做完，结果分还行吧，26~
技巧什么的实在是没什么发言权啊
喵喵是一战？

-- by 会员 lemonyhu (2012/8/28 20:21:13)

我写作有个大缺点就是有时候为了图词汇和短语多样去用别的表达方式导致歧义或者跟原意违背！自己又不觉得！非常苦恼啊！
不是一战..阅读和听力都是问题....快要考试了真是欲哭无泪啊..
回头去读了下lemo的意见都给的很有道理啊！如果有空的话能帮我指出下具体歧义的地方吗??如果没空也没事..大家准备考试都很忙..thx啦~

陈喵喵holdon

我已经写上了我的想法了哟~~呵呵，希望不会觉得我太挑剔，你已经很棒了~~

-- by 会员 羊咩咩yw (2012/8/28 20:25:26)

啊很有启发！
第一点就是为了能用到尽量多的表达方式惹的祸！第二点自己回头读也觉得很绕！第三点太受启发了...细节不能当论点！
咩亲说的太好了~ many thx~!!!