小兔爱twins的作文贴 7.23开始~ 求吐槽求拍砖

hjl80959

我的8.6综合还没有改吧。。

小兔爱twins

改了哦~~ 昨天贴的。。。

小兔爱twins

In order to solve the problems of the present and the future, people should review the past.8.7

In this day and age ,increasing foucus come to be attracted on the methods of solving problems. However, viewers are holding different opinions about which is the best way to deal with the problems of the present and the future. As far as I am concerned, there is no doubt that reviewing the past makes contribution to settling the current and the future problems.

First of all, reviewing from the past offers us a pattern to follow, which is beneficial for us to deal with the problems. For example, the first year I attend the collage, I was virtually lost, because I do not know how to plan my campus life. The only choice for me was to ask my senior fellows for help. It was their experiences in the past that help me to have a general understanding of campus life. In addition, they shared some mistakes they made in past academic studying with me, which reduces the risk of going astray for me. Not surprisely I am now clear with target and plan in college study.

Moreover, reviewing from the history will help us to solve the problems sucessfully. Due to the fact of thinking about the past issues, we have been fulfilled with a wider vision to view the questions. For example, by reviewing the horrible pollution caused by Industrial factoris 10 years ago, I learn that to manitain the sustainability of the society, goverment should not only focus on the growth of the economy, but should also pay attention to the environment. As a result of the broad view of the problems, it is possible for us to successful tackel thorny problems today,

Admiitedly, a mere review in the past is far from enough. In order to handle the problem in a proper way, we are supposed to analyze the comtemprory situation as well. Only by this method can people aquire a well-rounded view about the issues. For instance, the development of technology, indeed we should make good use of the advanced technology. However, if we do not cast new elements into the invention, the whole field of techology is likely to make no progress, still less emerging technology. Thus many of the problems which rely on technology  the can not be settled effectively and efficiently, Therefore, it is a better way to deal with the problem by reviewing the past in combination with analyzing the current situation.

We, taking into account what is discussed above, can safely come to the conclusion that reviewing the history is of tremendous significance to solve the problems of the present and the future, though other methods are needed.

小兔爱twins

guoyang88

蓝色为意见或建议  高亮为精彩   绿色为总结   红色为错误


In this day and age ,increasing foucus 【focus】come to be attracted on the methods of solving problems. However, viewers are holding different opinions about which is the best way to deal with the problems of the present and the future. As far as I am concerned, there is no doubt that reviewing the past makes contribution[make contributions to 固定短语  ] to settling the current and the future problems.

First of all, reviewing from the past offers us a pattern to follow, which is beneficial for us to deal with the problems. For example, the first year I attend 【attended】the collage, I was virtually lost, because I do[did] not know how to plan my campus life. The only choice for me was to ask my senior fellows for help. It was their experiences in the past that help me to have a general understanding of campus life. In addition, they shared some mistakes they made in past academic studying with me, which reduces the risk of going astray for me. Not surprisely[surprising +ly] I am now clear with target and plan in college study.

Moreover, reviewing from the history will help us to solve the problems sucessfully. Due to the fact of thinking about the past issues, we have been fulfilled with a wider vision to view[consider] the questions. For example, by reviewing the horrible pollution caused by Industrial factoris[factories] 10 years ago, I learn that to manitain the sustainability of the society, goverment should not only focus on the growth of the economy, but should also pay attention to the environment [environmental protection]. As a result of [possessing] the broad view of the problems, it is possible for us to successful[此处用副词 修饰tackel]tackel thorny problems today,

Admiitedly[拼写], a mere review in the past is far from enough. In order to handle the problem in a proper way, we are supposed to analyze the comtemprory situation as well. Only by this method can people aquire a well-rounded view about the issues. For instance, the development of technology, indeed we should make good use of the advanced technology. However, if we do not cast new elements into the invention, the whole field of techology is likely to make no progress[这块能否否定前移。is unlikely to make any progress], still less emerging technology. Thus many of the problems which rely on technology  the can not be settled effectively and efficiently, Therefore, it is a better way to deal with the problem by reviewing the past in combination with analyzing the current situation.

We, taking into account what is discussed above, can safely come to the conclusion that reviewing the history is of tremendous significance to solve the problems of the present and the future,though other methods are needed.  [和主题无关感觉]


用的三个例子
1.校园生活
2.科技进步
3.经济发展与环境。
都是比较不错的万能例子。 可以再多吸收下好文章的东西。把例子字数和句子数扩充充实下。
下次再写时也更游刃有余。

其他就是词性问题。  加油。

fairyfinger

蓝色为意见或建议  高亮为精彩   绿色为总结 红色为错误

The professor is skeptical about the usage of the great house stated in the reading passage. He lists 3 reason to refute the idea in the reading passage.

First of all, in the reading, the Chaco strutures house hundreds of people because it looks like the apartment building today. On the contrary, the professor say that the greatly house can't hold many people to live for the lack of fire place inside the house, which can not even satisfy the daily cooking for hundres of peolpe live there.

On top of that, the reading indicates that the great house is used to store maize. However, the professor asserts that neither the maize nor the containers of the maize can be found in the great house, which is contradicts to the idea that the house is used for storatge.

Finally, the reading（用passage好点吧？？） says the Chaco strutures are used as ceremonial center. While in the lecture, the professor tells the students the excavations of the mound reveals deposits containing stone, sand and structure tools as well, which indicates the place may be a trash heap at that time. Moreover, the pots are probably for the use of regular cooking for the workers. So it can be ceremonial centers as the reading says.

hjl80959

8.8号综合。。。又不见了。。。

小兔爱twins

马上贴来。。88 综合
The professor is skeptical about the idea in the passage that online encyclopedias have some drawbacks that make them less valuable than traditional, printed encyclopedias. She lists three reasons in the lecture.


Fisrt of all, in the passage, for the lack of academic credetials, the online encyclopedias make some mistakes in many cases. However, the professor says, the information of trational encyclopedias are also wrong in some cases. In addition, if there are some inaccurate information in the online encyclopedias, people can corrects instantly, while it takes decades for traditional encyclopedias to correct the falses.


On top of that, the reading passages states that people have the opportunity to fabricate, delete, and put information in the online encyclopedias, which makes online encyclopedias unreliable. On the contrary, the professor indicates the original authors usually set the online encyclopedias as the form of read-only, and there are special people to examined the change of the online encyclopedias, therefore these practices protect the accuracy of the online encyclopedias.


Finally, the passage says the online encyclopedias can not reveal what is important and what is not, which contradicts to the idea in the lecture. The professor states the traditionla encyclopedias often lack the space to present various topics, however, the diverse topics presented in the online encyclopedias can actually satisfy the people who is doing academic research.

小兔爱twins

The professor is skeptical about the idea in the passage that online encyclopedias have some drawbacks that make them less valuable than traditional, printed encyclopedias. She lists three reasons in the lecture.

Fisrt of all, in the passage, for the lack of academic credetials, the online encyclopedias make some mistakes in many cases. However, the professor says, the information of trational encyclopedias are also wrong in some cases. In addition, if there are some inaccurate information in the online encyclopedias, people can corrects instantly, while it takes decades for traditional encyclopedias to correct the falses.

On top of that, the reading passages states that hackers have the opportunity to fabricate, delete, and put information in the online encyclopedias, which makes online encyclopedias unreliable. On the contrary, the professor indicates the original authors usually set the online encyclopedias as the form of read-only, and there are special people to examined the change of the online encyclopedias, therefore these practices protect the accuracy of the online encyclopedias.

Finally, the passage says the online encyclopedias can not reveal what is important and what is not, which contradicts to the idea in the lecture. The professor states the traditionla encyclopedias often lack the space to present various topics, however, the diverse topics presented in the online encyclopedias can actually satisfy the people who is doing  research.

hjl80959

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结或模板红色为错误

The professor is skeptical about the idea in the passage that online encyclopedias have some drawbacks that make them less valuable than traditional, printed encyclopedias. She lists three reasons in the lecture.
读了这么多天，看来模板定型了哈~

Fisrt of all, in the passage, for the lack of academic credentials, the online encyclopedias make some mistakes in many cases. However, the professor says, the information of trational encyclopedias are also wrong in some cases. In addition, if there are some inaccurate information in the online encyclopedias, people can corrects instantly, while it takes decades for traditional encyclopedias to correct the falses (这个是形容词，errors).


On top of that, the reading passages states that people have the opportunity to fabricate, delete, and put information in the online encyclopedias, which makes online encyclopedias unreliable. On the contrary, the professor indicates the original authors usually set the online encyclopedias as the form of read-only, and there are special people to examined the change of the online encyclopedias, therefore these practices protect the accuracy of the online encyclopedias.


Finally, the passage says the online encyclopedias can not reveal what is important and what is not, which contradicts to the idea in the lecture. The professor states the traditionla encyclopedias often lack the space to present various topics, however, the diverse topics presented in the online encyclopedias can actually satisfy the people who is doing academic research.

加个总结？没什么大问题了，改改错误就好，让后再谢谢模板～