小兔爱twins的作文贴 7.23开始~ 求吐槽求拍砖

sherryzhangh

The professor is skeptical about the idea in the reading passage that ethanol is not a good alternative to gasoline. The professor lists some advantages of ethanol.

First of all, in the reading passage, that the over emitting of carbon dioxide caused by result from increasing use of ethanol would cause global warming. On the contrary, the professor points out that using ethanol actually can reduce global warming. Most of the ethanol fuel are made from plants such as corn which absorbs carbon dioxide as important nutrient for it growth, therefore the carbon dioxide which Ethanol produced can be deducted is removed by the plants when it was growing.  

On top of that, the reading passage says the large number of ethanol would reduce the plants accessibility to animal. However, the professor asserts states (我觉得assert是个贬义词有武断的意思)the ethanol is made of cellouse(这个词我也不知道是什么), the essential components of the cell wall, which is not eaten by animals, so the amount of plants the for animal to eat is not reduced at all.(句子不全，加上后边的应该会更清楚。)

Finally, the reading passages states the price of ethanol can not compete with the gasoline in the future. But the professor tells the students once the demand of the ethanol fuel increases, the production of the products will increase, which causeresult in the drop of the price of ethanol. Moreover, a study done recently states if(听原文里应该是个假设) the demand of consumers can be enlarged by three times, consequently and thus the price（原文里好像是cost）of ethanol will decrease by 40% in the future.

小兔爱twins

re sherry ~~hah 又碰到你改了哈~~ 反馈一下哈
that the over emitting of carbon dioxide caused by result from 这里不能用result from 吧？？原文是 烧 ethanol 导致 co2 变多 所以我觉得还是我原来的caused by 准确。。。 increasing use of ethanol would cause global warming.

On top of that, the reading passage says the large number of ethanol would reduce the plants accessibility to animal. However, the professor asserts states （那个大多模板都用这个呵呵 所以我就照搬了）(我觉得assert是个贬义词有武断的意思)the ethanol is made of cellouse(哈我拼错了cellulose 纤维素呵呵 这个词我也不知道是什么), the essential components of the cell wall, which is not eaten by animals, so the amount of plants the for animal to eat is not reduced at all.(句子不全，加上后边的应该会更清楚。)

小兔爱twins

If you need to discuss upsetting or controversial problems with others, you will use e-mail or text messaging，OR use the telephone or voice-messaging

In this day and age, increasing focus comes to be attracted on the communication technique. However, people are holding differents opinion about the best way of communication. On one hand, some individuals perfer using e-mail or text messages. On the other hand, there is an opposition among others who insist that the telephone or voice-message is the suitable one. As far as I am concerned, to disuss upsetting or controversial problems, e-mail or text messages makes sense.

First of all, it is far beyond any reasonable doubt that  sometimes people can not control their emotion and then just outbursts. By using telephone or voice-messageing, people may feel more impulsive than by using  text, especially discussing  upsetting or controversial problems. Taking Rachel, my roommates, as an example, she used to communicate with her boyfriends via telephone. Once she felt sad and called  her boyfriend asking for comfort. However, things went from bad to worse, they ended up in quarreling. Since then she adopted my advice that discuss upsetting problems via text message. Now it seems that my suggestion do work for her. Therefore, I believe communicate with people by texts, we are more deliberate to express our    

Another equally important aspect is that using text message enable people to send the message to more than one people at one time, It helps to save time and improve the efficiency to debate the controversial issues. For example, I are going to have a dicussion about  how to assign our work with my teammates , and it would be a time-wasting work to talk with them one by one  via telephone. Quite on the contrary, text message offers us an convenient and efficient way to have the discussion.

Granted, telephone or voice-messaging is of great ad for communicate, however, if we can view such a situation from a perspective, we can discover that there increading number of people use telephone or voice-messaging instead of  e-mail or text messaging, which is contributing factor to the drop of the essential commucation skill--writing skills. Hence, using e-mail or text messaging would be a terrific choice to maintain our wrting skill.

For the reasons listed above, I firmly believe that e-mail or text messaging does a better work  to discuss upsetting or controversial problems than phone or voice-messaging does.

kaddish

In this day and age, increasing focus comes to be attracted on the communication technique. However, people are holding different opinions about the best way of communication. On one hand, some individuals perfer using e-mail or text messages. On the other hand, there is an opposition among others who insist that the telephone or voice-message is the suitable one. As far as I am concerned, to disuss upsetting or controversial problems, e-mail or text messages makes sense.

First of all, it is far beyond any reasonable doubt that  (学习了)sometimes people can not control their emotion and then just outbursts（这是名词）. By using telephone or voice-messageing, people may feel more impulsive than by using  text, especially discussing  upsetting or controversial problems. Taking Rachel, my roommates, as an example, she used to communicate with her boyfriends via telephone. Once she felt sad and called  her boyfriend asking(建议去掉) for comfort. However, things went from bad to worse, they ended up in quarreling. Since then she adopted my advice that discuss upsetting problems via text message. Now it seems that my suggestion do work for her. Therefore, I believe communicate with people by texts, we are more deliberate to express our 木有写完诶，还是怎么的，建议这里多描述下为什么打电话容易情绪失控，室友失落时和男友打电话又是怎么引起quarrel

Another equally important aspect is that using text message enable people to send the message to more than one people at one time, It helps to save time and improve the efficiency to debate the controversial issues. For example, I are going to have a dicussion about  how to assign our work with my teammates , and it would be a time-wasting work to talk with them one by one  via telephone. Quite on the contrary, text message offers us an convenient and efficient way to have the discussion.

Granted, telephone or voice-messaging is of great ad for communicate, however, if we can view such a situation from a perspective（这个用法确定对么）, we can discover that there（去掉,a） increasing number of people use telephone or voice-messaging instead of  e-mail or text messaging, which is a contributing factor to the drop of the essential commucation skill (level)--writing skills. Hence, using e-mail or text messaging would be a terrific choice to maintain our wrting skill.恩，这里没有体现在讨论复杂的情况时电话相对于写信的好处，个人意见

For the reasons listed above, I firmly believe that e-mail or text messaging does a better work  to discuss upsetting or controversial problems than phone or voice-messaging does. 结尾有点简单哈，最好总结下下

小兔爱twins

The professor is skeptical about the idea in the reading that th T.rex might still remains of blood vessels, red blood vells, and collgen, He lists three reasons in the lecture.

First of all, in the reading, the soft substance may represent the remains of the actual blood vessels of T.rex. On the contrary, the professor states, this soft substance is not necessary part of the blood vessel, which may be something else lived in the hollow after the T.rex dead, such as batiare colonies.

On top of that, the reading says, the examination of inner bone reveals the presence of the red blood cell. However, the professor asserts that  sphere is found in some primitive organisms could which  do not have red blood cell, so the spheres may be a piece of the reddish mineral.

Finally, in the reading, the scientists find collage which is the kind of biochemical metrrial associated with bone tissue. But the professor points out that collagen can not last for a much long time, therefore it can be from T.rex. And the professor tell the students the collagen probably come from the skin of researchers.

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TPO24 综合修改：
蓝色成模版，黄色是需修改的原词，红色修改，绿色总结
The professor is skeptical about the idea in the reading that th T.rex might still 【have some materials left that seem to be】 remains of blood vessels, red blood vells, and collgen, He lists three reasons in the lecture.【第一段简洁明了，只是注意下怎么概括文章中的point就可以了】

First of all, in the reading, the soft substance may represent the remains of the actual blood vessels of T.rex. On the contrary, the professor states, this soft substance is not necessary【necessarily the】 part of the blood vessel, which【but】 may be something else lived in the hollow after the T.rex dead, such as batiare【bacteria】colonies. 【结构很好，阐述得很清楚，最好能突出反驳文章中的地方。如将which 改为but】

On top of that, the reading says, the examination of inner bone reveals the presence of the red blood cell.However, the professor asserts that  【some identical】spheresis【are】 found in some 【other】 primitive organisms could【-】 which  do not have red blood cell, so the spheres may be a piece of the reddish mineral 【rather than the remains of red blood cells as the reading passage mentioned】.【我觉得最后最好能突出与reading 中的point相斥】

Finally, in the reading, the scientists find collage which is the kind of biochemical metrrial associated with bone tissue. But the professor points out that collagen can not last for a much long time, therefore it cannot be from T.rex【这里有点简略了，不过我觉得当我听不清楚的时候，可以借鉴lz的方法 (*^__^*) 】. And the professor tell the students【我觉得这里不是很好，最好是用客观的证据或者解释来驳斥文章中的观点，可以换一种表达，如“更有可能的是” 】the collagen probably come from the skin of researchers.
【总的来说，结构清楚，都是以reading 开头，不过能偶尔换换lecture开头也挺好的哈。过程来说还是看听力能听到多少了。我觉得只要楼主将每段都突出lecture中的观点驳斥reading的观点就很好了】

hjl80959

这个8.6号的在哪？ 貌似修改日期都很前面啊？

小兔爱twins

The professor is skeptical about the idea in the reading passage that the dinosaurs are endotherms. She listed three reasons in the lecture.

Firs of at, the reading passage indicates, the dinosaur fossils found in Polar regins can prove the dinosaurs are endotherms, because only animals that can maintain a temperture above that of environment could survive. However, the professor asserts that the temperture in the past when the dinsaurs lived are much warmer than in the modern time, which warm enough for dinosaurs to survive. In addition, if  it is so cold, dinosaurs will migrant to other places.

On tpo of that,in the reading, the legs of dinosaurs under the body which allows sustained acititivity ,such as running, is another evidence to show dinosaurs are endotherms. But the professor points out that the legs are underneath the body, which is to support the weight of the large size body of the dinosaur. It not necessarily prove dinosaurs are endotherms.

Finally, the reading says that the bone structure call haversian canals of endotherms allow dinosaurs to grow up quickly. On the contrary, the professor states that though the haversian canals exist in dinosaurs' body,  in cold period the growth of dinosaurs slow down. And the growth of dinosaurs follows the growth pattern of the reptiles, however, much of the wndotherms still grow rapidly in the cold period. So this phenomenon suggests dinosaurs are not endotherms.

hjl80959

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

The professor is skeptical about the idea in the reading passage that the dinosaurs are endotherms. She listed three reasons in the lecture.(时态要一致前面和后面怎么回事不同的时态)
temperature
Firs of at, the reading passage indicates, the dinosaur fossils found in Polar regins can prove the dinosaurs are endotherms, because only animals that can maintain a temperture above that of environment could survive. However, the professor asserts that the temperture in the past when the dinsaurs lived are (时态) much warmer than in the modern time, which（was） warm enough for dinosaurs to survive. In addition, if it is so cold, dinosaurs will migrant to other places.（既然写迁徙了那冬眠hibernate因为他俩在一块的）

On tpo of that,in the reading, the legs of dinosaurs under the body which allows sustained acititivity ,such as running, is another evidence to show dinosaurs are endotherms. But the professor points out that the legs are underneath the body（多余了）, which is to support the weight of the large size body of the dinosaur. It（does） not necessarily prove dinosaurs are endotherms.（和前面的重复-show dinosaurs are endotherms 可以换种表达 it contradicts to (rebuts) the that ）

Finally, the reading says that the bone structure call (called) haversian canals of endotherms allow dinosaurs to grow up quickly. On the contrary, the professor states that though the haversian canals exist in dinosaurs' body,  in cold period the growth of dinosaurs slow down. And the growth of dinosaurs follows the growth pattern of the reptiles (既然是follow 怎么会出现后面的however), however, much of the wndotherms still grow rapidly in the cold period. So this phenomenon suggests dinosaurs are not endotherms.

这个理由貌似不是太对，我记得是有一个grow ring



文章的结构是对的，但是这个时态是一个大问题，一句话前面后面时态在表达同一件事情的时候不可能两个时态，同时拼写的错误比较多。要注意。

听写的内容还可以，应该还有一小些东西漏掉了，加油吧～

小兔爱twins

The professor is skeptical about the usage of the great house stated in the reading passage. He lists 3 reason to refute the idea in the reading passage.

First of all, in the reading, the Chaco strutures house hundreds of people because it looks like the apartment building today. On the contrary, the professor say that the greatly house can't hold many people to live for the lack of fire place inside the house, which can not even satisfy the daily cooking for hundres of peolpe live there.
87 综合~~
On top of that, the reading indicates that the great house is used to store maize. However, the professor asserts that neither the maize nor the containers of the maize can be found in the great house, which is contradicts to the idea that the house is used for storatge.

Finally, the reading says the Chaco strutures are used as ceremonial center. While in the lecture, the professor tells the students the excavations of the mound reveals deposits containing stone, sand and structure tools as well, which indicates the place may be a trash heap at that time. Moreover, the pots are probably for the use of regular cooking for the workers. So it can be ceremonial centers as the reading says.