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7.27 综合 刚出炉 现在去看护花危情了！！！大结局啊啊


In the lecture the professor is skeptical about the ways to address the decline of Torreya in the reading passage. The professor says none of the method introduced in the reading makes sense.

In the reading, the first way is restablishing Torreya in the same location where it thrived. On the contrary, the professor say that the microclimate can be easily affected by what has happened in the large region. And due to the global warmming or the disappearing of wet lands, the microclimate is becoming drier, which is not suitable for the Torreya to surivive.

On the top of that, the reading passage describes that moving Torreya to an totally different location is another option. However, the professor asserts that this practice will cause uncertain promblem in the new evironment. She takes the black tree as an example, once it is moved to the new environment, the blace tree spread rapidly, which kill off other native plants speices, some of which is even endangered plants.

Finally, the professor disproves that reading’s idea that to preserve Torreya in research centers. The professor points out that the research is not large in enough to hold the large population of Torreya to survive a disaster in long term. In addtion, the survival from the diseases of Torreya need genetic diversity which the research centre can no offer.

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In the lecture the professor is skeptical about the ways to address the decline of Torreya in the reading passage. The professor says none of the method introduced in the reading makes sense.

In the reading, the first way is restablishing（reestablishing）Torreya in the same location where it thrived. On the contrary, the professor say (says，主谓一致) that the microclimate can be easily affected by what has happened in the large region. And due to the global warmming（warming）or the disappearing of wet lands, the microclimate is becoming drier, which is not suitable for the Torreya to surivive.（survive）
PS：一般是先说professor的观点

On the top of that, （这个能做第二层意思的开头吗，老外不是把最重要的事情都放在开头咩，待求证）the reading passage describes that moving Torreya to an totally different location is another option. However, the professor asserts that this practice will cause uncertain promblem（problem）in the new evironment（environment）. She takes the black tree as an example, once it is moved to the（a）new environment; the blace（black）tree spread rapidly, which kill off other native plants speices,（species） some of which is even endangered plants.

Finally, the professor disproves that reading’s idea（无生命的所有格a of b，具体参见http://zhidao.baidu.com/question/291000636.html） that to preserve Torreya in research centers. The professor points out that the research is not large in enough to hold the large population of Torreya to survive a disaster in long term. In addtion（addition）,the survival from the diseases of Torreya need genetic diversity which the research centre can no offer.（no offer是一个固定搭配：没有供应或者暂无报价，建议改成not offered）

PS：LZ把握整体的能力具备，细节观点较为完备，在写完之后注意检查拼写错误以及对个别词语的用法

小兔爱twins

通篇拼写错误。。。。。。。。。。。。。。我想很痛苦

小兔爱twins

谢谢 alex的修改~~   好细心哦~~

小兔爱twins

7.27 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should know the events happening around the world, even if it unlikely has some influence on your daily life.

In this day and age, the rapid development of the information societies has brought the public an efficient and convenient way to get the information. According to a survey conducted by a famous international organzation, an increasing number of people care about the events happening around the world, which aroused deep concern. As far as I am concerned, it is of great significance for people to know the current events.

Firstly,a well-rounded view of the contemporary society unconditionally enhance the competitiveness in the world. By following the events happening around the world, people are able to acquaint with the social situation, which is beneficial for them to achieve their goals. For instance, entrepreneurs, familiar with current events, are more mindful of and sensitive to the enviormental needs of the market, it is very likely for them to be conscious of surprising opportunitities on business or come up with extraordinary plans. Because their focusing on current events expand their outlook, and thus they tend to analyze problems comprehensively. Therefore,chance are more often explored by them than others who do not care little about the events happened around world.

Moreover, current events, as topic of conversation, do close the distance between people. For example, my friends and I, have a regular get-together to chat with other, and through discussing our opinion about the current news we know each other better. In additon, listening to their ideas I can solve some problem encountered in my lifetime.That say, not surprisingly, people who knows the events happening around the world usually performs as brilliant, humorous conversationalists, which are beneficial for social intea

Admittedly, a minority of individuals tend to believe that knowing some news negative, such as wars, disasters, murder, will cause the public depressed. However, if we can view such a situation  from a different perspective, we can find those people oversimplified the real situations. For example, the public are likely to be misled by the negative news, some of the news source even make a false news just to attract the attention of the public.

Taking all aacount dicussed above. I am convinced we need to know the events happening around the world, even if it unlikely has some influence on your daily life.

易雨水巷

蓝色为意见或建议红色为错误高亮为精彩
7.27 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should know the events happening around the world, even if it unlikely has some influence on your daily life.

In this day and age, the rapid development of the information societies (猜测小兔应该是想要写信息时代， information age 比较合适，另外，此句后面也出现information,所以其实水巷建议直接写 the society就可以) has brought the public an efficient and convenient way to get the (the 可以去掉吧？) information. According to a survey conducted by a famous international organzation (organization) （其实托福作文里，你可以直接给这个国际组织冠上名字的，(*^__^*) 编的也可以）, an increasing number of people care about the events happening around the world, which aroused deep concern. As far as I am concerned, it is of great significance for people to know the current events.

Firstly, a well-rounded view of the contemporary society unconditionally enhance （enhances） the competitiveness in the world. By following the events happening around the world, people are able to acquaint with the social situation, which is beneficial for them to achieve their goals. For instance, entrepreneurs, familiar with current events, are more mindful of and sensitive to the enviormental (environment) needs of the market, it is very likely for them to be conscious of surprising opportunitities (opportunities) on business or come up with extraordinary plans. Because their focusing on current events （+, they? 缺主语的句子）expand their outlook, and thus they tend to analyze problems comprehensively. Therefore, chance （chances? chance可以可数也可以不可数，根据意思来吧，但小兔后面用的是are,再好好琢磨琢磨）are more often explored by them than others who do not care little（双重否定就是肯定了）about the events happened around world.

Moreover, current events, as topic of conversation, do close（close 好像太绝对了换成shrink/decrease?）the distance between people. For example, my friends and I, have a regular get-together to chat with other, and through discussing our opinion about the current news we know each other better. In additon (addition), listening to their ideas I can solve some problem (problems) encountered （雨巷觉得吧一般是encounter problems 而不是problems encounter in our life）in my lifetime. That say, not surprisingly, people who knows the events happening around the world usually performs as brilliant, humorous conversationalists, which are beneficial for social intea(这个是？) （好像提出分论点之后，要有一两句的理论叙述再写例子的。。。。就像小兔的第二段一样）

Admittedly, a minority of individuals tend to believe that knowing some news negative, such as wars, disasters, murder, will cause the public depressed. However, if we can view such a situation from a different perspective, we can find those people oversimplified the real situations. For example, the public are likely to be misled by the negative news, （+ and吧两个句子了呢）some of the news source even make a false news just to attract the attention of the public. (其实，水巷认为这段好像是跑题了。。。。。)

Taking all aacount dicussed (accounts discussed) above. I am convinced we need to know the events happening around the world, even if it unlikely has some influence on your daily life.

To 小兔：

总得来说还是不错的(*^__^*)
结构神马的没什么大问题
注意一下前后主谓一致、单复数、单词拼写问题
加油↖(^ω^)↗

ps 很抱歉水巷犯了拖延症，独立交晚了 麻烦小兔了 %>_<%

小兔爱twins

In the lecture, the professor is skeptical about the idea of the reading passage that the forest fires in Yellowstone caused by the" let it burn" policy  results in tremendous damage. The professor states some positive change after the Yellowstone fire.

First,  in the reading passage, Yellowstone fire result in the big damage to the vegetation, On the contrary, the professor says the that the fire increase the diversity of the vategation in the forest because it creats the chances for the growth of some plant which can not be develop otherwise.

On top of that, the reading passage describe that the park wildlife suffers from the fire. However, the professor asserts that the population of the animal actually increase after the fire. In addition, the fire offers a new chance for the animals to get the ideal habitats, and thus the food chain becomes stronger.

Finally, the professor disproves the idea of the reading passage that the local economy which depends on tourism suffers as a result of the fire. She points out that the fire does not happen every year, and as a matter of fact, after 1988 the forest fire never happens. There are still a number of  tourists who come to visit the Yellowstone park every year after 1988.

sherryzhangh

In the lecture, the professor is skeptical about the idea of the reading passage that the forest fires in Yellowstone caused by the" let it burn" policy results in tremendous damage. The professor states some positive changes after the Yellowstone fire.(开头段写的不错,加油!)
First,  in the reading passage, Yellowstone fire result in the big damage to the vegetation,(.) On the contrary, the professor says the that the fire increase the diversity of the vategation(vegetation 注意拼写) in the forest , because it creates the (more) chances for the growth of some plants which can not be developed otherwise.

On top of that, the reading passage describe that the park wildlife suffers from the fire. However, the professor asserts that the population of the animal actually increase after the fire. In addition, the fire offers a new chance for the animals to get the ideal habitats, and thus the food chain becomes stronger.(这段没有听清楚，说的是火烧了之后，给其他的一些动物例如兔子创造了更好的生存条件，而且以兔子为食物的其他的捕猎者也就多了更多的生存机会，这样新的食物链在森林里就形成了)

Finally, the professor disproves the idea of the reading passage that the local economy which depends on tourism suffers as a result of the fire. She points out that the fire does not happen every year, and as a matter of fact, after 1988 the forest fire never happensed(感觉应该用过去时态). There are still a number of  tourists who come to visit the Yellowstone park every year after 1988.



小兔应该注意时态和单复数的问题，我改的也不一定对，但是这个问题应该是你和我的弱项，一定要检查，不然会丢分的。

你发现没有，咱们俩同一天考试！

小兔爱twins

hahha ~~  你也是9。2哈~~ 一起~加油哈~~ 多练多该我觉得一定会提高的

小兔爱twins

The professor is skeptical about the idea in the reading passage that ethanol is not a good alternative to gasoline. The professor lists some advantanges of ethanol.

First of all, in the reading passage, that the carbon dioxide caused by increasing use of ethanol would cause global. On the contrary, the professor points out, using ethanol actually can reduce global warming. Most of the ethanol fule are made from plants such as corn which absorbs carbon dioxide as important nutrient for it growth, therefore the the carbon dioxide is removed by the plants.  

On top of that, the reading passage says the large number of ethanol would reduce the plants accessiable to animal. However, the professor asserts the ethanol is made of cellouse, the essential components of the cell wall, which is not eaten by animals, so the amount of plants the for animal.

Finally, the reading passages states the price of ethanol can not compete with the gasoline in the future. Bu the professor tells the students once the damend of the ethanol fuel increases, the production of the products will increase, which cause the drop of the price of ethanol. Moreover, a study done recently states the demand of consumers can be enlarged by three times, and thus the price of ethanol wil decrease by 40% in the future.