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sherryzhangh

您好， 8月23号的独立您还没有给我改。。。8月24号的综合你好像也没有写， 也没有给我改。。。

fairyfinger

您好， 8月23号的独立您还没有给我改。。。8月24号的综合你好像也没有写， 也没有给我改。。。

-- by 会员 sherryzhangh (2012/8/25 19:12:02)

独立我给你改了呀`综合那个我给忘了8.24占过座了。不好意思，马上给你改～！

fairyfinger

8.26
TPO24
In the lecture, the professor refutes the passage which says that the fossil of T.rex contains remains of the actual tissues. He ponits out that there are still many facts that cast doubts on that viewpoint.

First, bacterials can also leave remains in small branching channels. According to the passage, a soft, flexible organic substance found in the channels, where blood vessels once located, is the remains of the actual blood vessel of T.rex. Yet the professor asserts that the substance can also be left by bacterials colonies which once existed in the hollows and bones.

Second, the presence of spheres might be theremains of original minerals. The lecturer says that those spheres are also found in many primitive animals which do not have red blood cells. Therefore, the spheres are not necessarily the remains of red blood cells: it could be remains of original minerals. That directly contradicts to what the passage indicates.

Third, the collagen matrix may came from human skin. The passage suggests that the the collagen contained in the dinosaur's leg is a biomechemical material in the dinasaur's bone tissue. However, the professor points out the fact that no collegan can exist for more than 100,000 years. Thus, the collegan may came from skin of the researchers who are handling the bone, since the fossil of T.rex is already 70 million years old.  That is another part where the lecture contrasts the passage.

In a nutshell, the passage holds that the recently found 70-million-year-old dinosaur fossil contains remains of the actual tissues, yet the prfessor reputes that the idea is skeptical in three aspects and gives his own proofs.

sherryzhangh

噢， 您改错了， 您应该改23号的， 改成24号的了。。。

kchszy061ban

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

In the lecture, the professor asserts that we still do not know the real cause of yellow cedar declination. He disputes the passage in that none of the three hypothesis presented is adquate.

First, the cedar bark beetle only attack cedars that already damaged their sack. According to the lecture, healthy cedars are more resistant than many other trees to bark beetles, and those beetles attacks onlu（这个） cedars which are no longer able to grow. Therefore, cedar bark beetle is not the fundamental cause of cedar decrease. That（this） directly contrasts what the passage indicates.

Second, there's no brown bear in costal islands near northwestern North America. The professor points out that although there's no bear in（on） the islands, the cedars there was also declined as that in mainland northwestern North America. Thus, the bears are not the cause of overall decline of cedar population. That is another part where the lecture contradicts what the passage says.

Third, the passage suggests that climate change causes the change in the timing of cedar root growth, which may leads to root damage and population decrease. However, the lecturer claimes（claims） that cedars in relatively higher elevation in colder places are not declining at a speed which those in lower elevation with warmer temperature do. Thus, climate （change） is not responsible for undermining the cedar population in North America.

In sum, the passage listed three possible explainations for cedar decline in northwestern North America, yet the professor says that none of them is sufficient and gives his own proofs.

整体还是不错，小处注意下就好。

fairyfinger

噢， 您改错了， 您应该改23号的， 改成24号的了。。。

-- by 会员 sherryzhangh (2012/8/26 11:30:45)

怪不得我说题目怎么不一样= =我冏

kchszy061ban

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

TPO24
In the lecture, the professor refutes the passage which says that the fossil of T.rex contains remains of the actual tissues. He ponits out that there are still many facts that cast doubts on that viewpoint.

First, bacterials（这个？） can also leave remains in small branching channels. According to the passage, a soft, flexible organic substance found in the channels, where blood vessels once located, is the remains of the actual blood vessel of T.rex. Yet the professor asserts that the substance can also be left by bacterials colonies which once existed in the hollows and bones.

Second, the presence of spheres might be the remains of original minerals（its original source may be minerals, 应该是这个意思吧？）. The lecturer says that those spheres are also found in many primitive animals which do not have red blood cells（听力中是animals which lived in the same place?）. Therefore, the spheres are not necessarily the remains of red blood cells: it could be remains of original minerals. That directly contradicts to what the passage indicates.

Third, the collagen matrix may came from human skin. The passage suggests that the the collagen contained in the dinosaur's leg is a biomechemical material in the dinasaur's bone tissue. However, the professor points out the fact that no collegan can exist for more than 100,000 years. Thus, the collegan may came from skin of the researchers who are handling the bone, since the fossil of T.rex is already 70 million years old（我觉得把这半句提前到那个years后面比较好一点。比较好看出因果关系）.  That is another part where the lecture contrasts the passage.(这段还是不错)

In a nutshell, the passage holds that the recently found 70-million-year-old dinosaur fossil contains remains of the actual tissues, yet the prfessor reputes that the idea is skeptical in three aspects and gives his own proofs.

听力的内容大致都在，就是细节有一点少。有一点就是楼主把每段开头都是把听力的最主要的点先写，这样倒不错。

fairyfinger

Know a person from type of friends that he has,agree or disagree

What factors would you take into consideration when making friends? Usually, people love to be with someone who has similar value system, social background and interests. Thus, I believe that we can know a person from the type of friends he has. And my reasons are listed as follows.

The interests of one's friends always reflect his own interests. People naturally want to stay more with those who have the same interests with themselves. This is because same interests are the lubricate of the conversation: two friends will have many things to say on a topic which attracts them both; the mental distance of the two will be closer and that makes it easier for them to exchange more private thoughts. However, without common interest, both two will feel bored by the conversation, in which both two sides try hard to pretend interest in the other's speech. As a result, they will prefer not to further contact each other since they do not want to suffer enduring the boredness any more. Therefore, people find friends who has similar interests with themselves and their friends, in return, can show their likings.

More importantly, the friends one have are good indicators of his background. Seldom have we seen anyone who make friends with people whose social backgrounds are so different from that of himself. And the reason is self-evident: the gap between value system, economic strength and lifestyle is impeachable. Considering a child from a prestigious political family and one from a family who live on social welfare, although the two may have similar interest, it's impossible for them to agree on most points in life - one eat luxurious food while the other eat only a pie, or one always play in top grad clubs while the other only watch television in his spare time. Brought up by totally different methods, the two will surely disputes on many points, which could be easily avoided if having similar backgrounds. Thus, one's friends tell the background of him.

Admittedly, there are occasions where people cannot choose friends arbitrarily. In many cases, people are forced to be with people longer for geographical closeness, namely deskmate, roomate and team member. Whether like it or not, one have to manage to get on well with them and be good friends with them. In that way, knowing one's friends could not help understanding him.

In a nutshell, we can learn a person from the type of friends he made since friends are, despite of some undefiable arrangement, often valid refections one's interest and background.

夜游的恶鸟

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Knowa person from type of friends that he has, agree or disagree

What factors would you take into consideration when making friends? Usually,people love to be with someone who has similar value system, social backgroundand interests. Thus, I believe that we can know a person from the type offriends he has. And my reasons are listed as follows.

Theinterests of one's friends always reflect his own interests. Peoplenaturally want to stay more with those who have the same interests withthemselves. This is because same interests are the lubricate of the conversation: two friends willhave many things to say on a topic which attracts them both; the mentaldistance of the two will be closer and that makes it easier for them toexchange more private thoughts. However, without common interest, both two willfeel bored by the conversation, in which both two sides try hard to pretendinterest in the other's speech. As a result, they will prefer not to furthercontact each other since they do not want to suffer enduring the boredness（没有这个词啊boring things）anymore. Therefore, people find friends who has（have） similar interests withthemselves and their friends, inreturn, can show their likings.

More importantly, the friends one have（has） are good indicators of hisbackground. Seldom have we seenanyone who make（makes） friends with people whosesocial backgrounds are so different from that of himself. And the reason isself-evident: the gap between value system, economic strength and lifestyle is impeachable. Considering achild from a prestigious political family and one from a family who live onsocial welfare, although the two may have similar interest, it's impossible forthem to agree on most points in life - one eat luxurious food while the othereat only a pie, or one always play in top grad clubs while the other only watchtelevision in his spare time. Brought up by totally different methods, the twowill surely disputes on many points, which could be easily avoided if havingsimilar backgrounds. Thus, one's friends tell the background of him. （例子很好，可以加一下不同的背景使他们不能相互理解作为过渡，从而在很多观点上产生分歧而不能做朋友）

Admittedly, there are occasions where people cannot choose friends arbitrarily(会不会太严重用这个词). In many cases, people areforced to be with people longer for geographical closeness, namely deskmate, roomate（roommate） and team member. Whetherlike it or not, one have to manage to get on well with them and be good friendswith them. In that way, knowing one's friends could not help understanding him.

In a nutshell, we can learn a person from the type of friends he made sincefriends are, despite of some undefiable(indefinable)arrangement, often valid refections（reflections of）one's interest and background.

夜游的恶鸟

fairyfinger的作文用词都很高级啊，句法也非常丰富，连接词也有的很恰当，只是有些拼写可能因为时间原因会有一点小错误，好厉害啊！学习学习！！

只是下次还是把连接放在占座的地方啊~~每次都要找到你再过来批改啊~~