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 楼主| 发表于 2012-9-20 22:14:36 | 只看该作者
占楼因为没写是综合还是独立,Alex 拒绝分组,剩两天了,自己写自己改。
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 楼主| 发表于 2012-9-20 22:15:37 | 只看该作者
没见过这样的写作小分队,大不如前了。
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发表于 2012-9-20 22:30:15 | 只看该作者
抱歉 可能之間有什麽誤會或者其他的原因 我帶嫑小分組想你道歉 今天的作文如果可以的話我幫你改吧
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 楼主| 发表于 2012-9-20 22:38:58 | 只看该作者
谢谢鹤鹤版主!!我一定努力写出好文!
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 楼主| 发表于 2012-9-20 23:52:33 | 只看该作者
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which do you choose to improve your healthkind of food you eatamount of exerciseamount of stress



Nowadays people have to struggle really hard in order to survive in this highly competitive society. While people have various ways to release their stress and choose a relatively suitable way to improve their health, I particularly tend to have a favorable attitude towards exercise as a major way to strengthen my physique. The specific points are as follows.

To begin with, exercise is the best way to make the whole body active, which is beneficial to health because of the positive motion that each body cell enjoys. Jogging, swimming, playing tennis, whatever we pick up as the way to exercise, we’ll potentially increase our lung and cardio capacity. In this way, some tough illness can even be conquered. For example, my grandmother once was troubled with her stomachache. Even no effects showed after she swallowed plenty of medicines. Surprisingly, after jogging for a month along my hometown street, her stomachache was cured. It is by no means an exceptional example, and similar cases can be heard in my surroundings.

In addition, it is of significance to improve sleeping quality. When I was in high school, I was dramatically feared of late night because of sleeplessness. However, after I had been jogging in my yard each day after school, I felt it was much easier to fall in sleep. Such is not a coincidence. After I asked my several classmates, I found out that their responses all pointed to an agreeable conclusion: exercise helps sleep. What’s more, each day I wake up, my metabolism was updated and I felt the whole body was refreshed, the feeling of which that had never happened before. In such circumstance, exercise became a particularly important part in my life. Even today, when I’m in the university, I still exercise four to five times a week in order to keep a refreshing body each day.

Besides, it is also exercise that helps release my stress, which is beneficial to my psychological health. University student as I am, can hardly spare time to rest, let alone the amusement. What is worse, the stress is from both life and academic works. My major is financial engineering, which requires both deep mathematics principles and familiarity with economic theories. So you can imagine how busy I’m everyday and how heavy burden I have to take on my shoulders. Luckily, it is exercise that helps me effectively release all of these. Each time I’m jogging in the gym, enjoying the pleasure it brings to me, I could patiently as well as seriously consider my measures to deal with problems. What’s more, I’ve some partners, who join me in the gym, and the time we spend is filled with relaxing atmosphere.

In sum, from what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that exercise plays a significant part in one’s health, because of its effects on the body, stress decrease and sleeping quality improvement.
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发表于 2012-9-21 21:06:56 | 只看该作者
主要有一個問題:文章中如果前后出现同一个意思的一句话,你一般习惯用同一种表达,这其实很不好,尽量保证每句话在文章中只出现一次~~~

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 楼主| 发表于 2012-9-21 21:27:05 | 只看该作者
谢版主!
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发表于 2012-9-21 22:41:51 | 只看该作者
好了~
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 楼主| 发表于 2012-9-22 11:13:09 | 只看该作者
谢谢鹤鹤版主~~
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 楼主| 发表于 2012-9-24 10:42:09 | 只看该作者
p.s. 开头不是模版呢。。是feifei自己写的。。。
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