6.18 独立

hansxiao7

In resent years, there is a public controversy on whether it is an excellent method to distinguish one's personality by dressing. Those who agree with the opinion state that dressing plays a critical role in representing one's personality or character. However, others are not in favor of it. Contrary to the belief of the former is my heartfelt agreement that never should we commend one's personality by his or her appearance.
               To start with, one's character can be evaluated from process when we communicate with each other. The words he uses, the views of the world and even the method he treats with dilemmas all will express the epitome of his personality. What the person dress sometimes has nothing to do with his character .It provides a typical example of my roommate. His family has possessed millions of asset, but he is a thrifty person. When we have dinner together in a restaurant, he always wraps the remnant back. So, on no account can we ignore the value of communication when we assess one's character.
             In addition, we can also learn about one's personality according from one's knowledge background. There is no denying that well-trained and higher degree person always the character of perseverance and capability. When we category them by using the apparel they wear, the answer will go to the opposite of my expectation. For instance, if appearance is regarded as a means of indicating artists characters, we will definitely draw a conclusion that they are ragmen. Therefore, we cannot emphasis the importance of knowledge blackground too much.
                When we talk about the possible factors contributing to one's personality, isn't it necessary to judge a person with his dress when we are in emergency. By using their attire, we can easily make a decision whether he is a burglar when I stranger lingers outside your house. Also , the uniform dressed by the employees in the supermarket can be easily determined, which is helpful to us when we resort to them to find something.
                Considerable though the advantages that criticizing one’s character by his or her dressing enjoys are, they can not compete with the benefits that using other elements brings about to judge one’s personality, when communication and knowledge background are taken into consideration. Simultaneously, it is better to use comprehensive ways to evaluate one’s quality.写的太棒了 还没有错误 但是我感觉论点似乎有点问题 前两个是说另外的方式能说明人的性格，但似乎没有论证衣服为什么不能体现 如果能加上就更好了 膜拜下Orz

qianjun06

TPO 8
        The passage makes the point that Chevalier's memoir has distorted and invented many invents. On the contrary, the lecture demonstrates a controversy idea that their claims are not accurate and reliable source.

       To start with, contrary to the belief in the passage that Chevalier were poor, the lecturer says that borrowing money didn't mean that he was poor. Chevalier has spent money on parties and gambling. When he run out of money, he will borrow some from his friends. Thus, the first reason provided in the reading is reputed.

       In addition, the author holds the view that it is impossible for Chevalier to remember earlier memoir. In contrast, the professor contradicts it by saying that he write diary every night. And when he did some compositions, he would consort to the notes and journals, which is confirmed by the person living with him. This directly cast doubt on its counterpart in the reading.

       Last but not least, the reading material states that Chevaliers jailers were bribed to free him. On the other hand, the listening material presents a conflicting idea that this hypothesis is vanish. It was hard for him to escape from the prison. The sealing of the old prison room is repaired after his escaping, which is the evidence that he made a hole to escape. Therefore, the final reason of the reading is totally unsounded, according to the speaker.

qianjun06

7月17日
Do you agree or disagree,the most important investment for a company is to spend money to improve the work skills of its employess

               In recent years, there is a public controversy that whether improving skills is the optimum for companies' investment. Those who agree with the notion state that the purpose of the company is to exist in the market, and improving the work skills will earn more money. However, some people are not in favor of it. Contrary to the opinion of the former people is my heartfelt belief that improving work skills is not the most important investment.

               To start with, it is more important for the firms to pay attention on employees' health condition. The more energy they have, the more enthusiasm will be fully devoted to their work, which will create more profits for the stockholders. With the diversified fitting facilities, employees will keep their bodies fit, even we can do some physical exercise after a heavy day-work in order to avoid the traffic jam. It provides a typical example of my father, his company build a swimming pool for all the employees, and he swims regularly each week. Never is he absent from working since he gets a fever. On no account can we ignore the value of health to an employee.

               In addition, leisure time is also another excellent choice for the company to invest. There is no denying that the pace of our jobs is quite overwhelming, to some extent, we will feel choking and mindless in such fast rhythm. Sometimes, we should stop to have a break and communicate each other, will make us more energetic for another working span. Also, the more frequently we communicate with our collaborators, the more harmonious the relationship between us is. For instance, my mother's company regulate that all employees have 2 hours to enjoy their lunch and have a little break. She never get exhausted after 8-hour working. Therefore, we can not emphasis the importance of the leisure time and communication too much.

               When people deem it is favorable to work in a relaxing environment, isn't it necessary that they give some consideration to the merit of skill improvement. Admittedly, if a company improve the skills of the worker, more profits will be contributed and it will survive in the competing circumstance. As a result, the company will raise its fame in the same industry.

                Considerable though the advantages that furthering the labors skills enjoys are, it cannot compete with the benefits that raising the condition of the fellows brings about, when health and communication are taken into consideration.

chasedreamabc

红色错误，蓝色存疑，高亮精彩
水平有限，改正有错误的之处望指出


In recent years, there is a public controversy that whether improving skills is the (a) optimum for companies' investment. Those who agree with the notion state that the purpose of the company is to exist in the market, and improving the work skills will earn more money（前面的高亮句式蛮好就是和TS有什么关系呢，如果是我会这么写：Those who agree with the notion state that improving the work skills is beneficial to make greater profit and thus help the company achieve the final goal-- to exist in the fiercely competitive market.）. However, some people are not in favor of it. Contrary to the opinion of the former people is my heartfelt belief that improving work skills is not the most important investment.

To start with, it is more important forthe firms to pay attention on employees' health condition. (这个和skills貌似没关系，题目要求是the most important investment for a company is to spend money to improve the work skills of its employee) The more energy they have, the more enthusiasm will be fully devoted to their work, which will create more profits for the stockholders. With the diversified fitting facilities, employees will keep their bodies fit, even we can do some physical exercise after a heavy day-work in order to avoid the traffic jam. It provides a typical example of my father, his company build a swimming pool for all the employees, and he swims regularly each week. Never is he absent from working since he gets a fever. On no account can we ignore the value of health to an employee.（整个一段，个人感觉没有扣题）

In addition, leisure time is also another excellent choice for the company to invest. There is no denying that the pace of our （没有指代，有点突兀） jobs is quite overwhelming, to some extent, （逗号不连接两个句子， to some extent 作为插入，前面的there be 和下文的we will两个都是完整的句子）we will feel choking and mindless in such fast rhythm. Sometimes, we should stop to have a break and communicate each other, will make us more energetic for another working span. Also, the more frequently we communicate with our collaborators, the more harmonious the relationship between us is. For instance, my mother's company regulate that all employees have 2 hours to enjoy their lunch and have a little break. She never get exhausted after 8-hour working. Therefore, we can not emphasis the importance of the leisure time and communication too much.

When people deem it is favorable to work in a relaxing environment, isn't it necessary that they give some consideration to the merit of skill improvement. Admittedly, if a company improve the skills of the worker （workers‘ skills）, more profits will be contributed and it will survive in the competing circumstance. As a result, the company will raise its fame in the same industry.

Considerable though the advantages that furthering the labors skills enjoys are, it cannot compete with the benefits that raising the condition of the fellows brings about, when health and communication are taken into consideration.



PS：LZ的文章单纯遣词造句炉火纯青，值得学习
框架清晰了然，结构层次分明

有一个小点文章要求是work skills of its employee，就是员工的职业技能，LZ每段的TS和要求不相符合
现代文章的写法是每段顶格写，段段间隔一行

包子不包子

7.17 综合 TPO8
TPO 8
The passage makes the point that Chevalier's memoir has distorted and invented many invents event. On the contrary, the lecture demonstrates a controversy idea that their claims are not accurate and reliable source.这个地方可以多用一些听力里的句子

To start with, contrary to the belief in the passage that Chevalier were poor, the lecturer says that borrowing money didn't mean that he was poor. Chevalier has spent money on parties and gambling. When he run out of money, he will borrow some from his friends这个地方听错了啊 Thus, the first reason provided in the reading is reputed.

In addition, the author holds the view that it is impossible for Chevalier to remember earlier memoir. In contrast, the professor contradicts it by saying that he write diary every night. And when he did some compositions, he would consort to the notes and journals, which is confirmed by the person living with him. This directly cast doubt on its counterpart in the reading.

Last but not least, the reading material states that Chevaliers jailers were bribed to free him. On the other hand, the listening material presents a conflicting idea that this hypothesis is vanish. It was hard for him to escape from the prison. The sealing of the old prison room is repaired after his escaping, which is the evidence that he made a hole to escape. Therefore, the final reason of the reading is totally unsounded, according to the speaker. 少了一些信息将和他一起在监狱的人有更有利的朋友帮他们出来但是没有成功

听力少信息呢 要注意哦 其他句型词汇都蛮好的~~

qianjun06

TPO 9
The passage makes the point that fuel-cell engines have several advantages over internal-combustion engines. On the contrary, the lecture demonstrates a controversy idea that hydrogen is the solution to the problems provided in the reading.

To start with, contrary to the belief in the reading that internal-combustion engine rely on petroleum, which is a finite resource, the professor says that hydrogen is not available and it's hard to obtain it. Hydrogen must be protected in a pure liquid state. So, it is difficult for people to produce and store the liquid hydrogen. Thus, the first reason provided in the reading text is reputed.

In addition, the author holds the view that hydrogen solves the pollution problems. In contrast, the lecturer contradicts the idea by saying that hydrogen will also create pollution when it is produced. In these producing processes, coals and oil will be used to generate these new fuels. At the same time, pollution will be produced. This directly cast doubt on its counterpart in the reading text.

Last but not least, the reading material states that fuel-cell engines will exhaust less energy and save more money. On the other hand, the listening material presents a conflicting idea that it is expensive to manipulate the fuel, because the fuel-cell engines will need an expensive metal. Some scientists are discovering some other metals to take the place of it, but it is so far successful. Therefore, the last reason explained by the writer is totally unsound, according to the speaker.

qianjun06

7月18日
Do you agree or disagree,because the world is changing so quickly,people now are less happy and less satisfied than people in the past

In recent years, there is a public controversy on whether the modern life is much better than before. Those who agree with the notion demonstrate that advanced facilities are beneficial to daily issues, such as mobile phones and autos, which makes our life more convenient and magnificent. However, other people are not in favor of it. Contrary to the opinion of the former is my heartfelt agreement with the idea that people now are less happy and less satisfied than before.


To start with, there is no denying that nowadays people have less time to communicate with these families and friends. All of us are hurried in studying and working, so seldom do we have a picnic and share the feelings with our relatives. The less we communicate with our classmates or collaborators, the less harmonious the relationship between us will be. In the end, we will feel abandoned by our close friends. It provides a typical example of my own. I'm fully devoted to preparing the toefl examination. Sometimes I felt isolated from my roommates, even when they gathered for a party in a special day. Thus, on no account can we ignore the value of communication when we estate evaluate one's happiness.

In addition, mental mood is also another factor leading into unhappiness recently. When we are craving for the material world, simultaneously scantly do we pay attention to our mental world. Under these circumstances, easily can we get some odd diseases owing to having tremendous pressure and seldom releasing ourselves in a proper way. For instance, do you ever regard the house as the necessity for surviving? Renting it may be another solution. But, if you imitate your colleagues and not enough money supports you to possess one, you will be overwhelmed by this plan. Therefore, we cannot emphasis the importance of mental world.

When people deem it unfavorable to in the modern society, isn't it necessary that they should give some consideration to the advantages of it. We may enjoy the modern buildings, where we can still work in the summer day with the help of air-conditions. Also, modern medical techniques will save our lives, prolonging and improving our living quality. Otherwise, it is vulnerable for us to be infected with disease.

Considerable though the benefits that living in the modern community enjoys are, they cannot compete with the disadvantages that pursuing a diversity world nowadays brings about, when communication and mental health are taken into consideration.

hansxiao7

In recent years, there is a public controversy on whether the modern life is much better than before. Those who agree with the notion demonstrate that advanced facilities are beneficial to daily issues, such as mobile phones and autos, which makes our life more convenient and magnificent. However, other people are not in favor of it. Contrary to the opinion of the former is my heartfelt agreement with the idea that people now are less happy and less satisfied than before.


To start with, there is no denying that nowadays people have less time to communicate with these families and friends. All of us are hurried in studying and working, so seldom do we have a picnic and share the feelings with our relatives. The less we communicate with our classmates or collaborators, the less harmonious the relationship between us will be. In the end(私下里觉得这句应该放在文章末尾 这里可以改成therefore或者in addition一类的）, we will feel abandoned by our close friends. It provides a typical example of my own. I'm fully devoted to preparing the toefl examination. Sometimes I felt isolated from my roommates, even when they gathered for a party in a special day. Thus, on no account can we ignore the value of communication when we estate(?房地产？ 小生愚昧。。。如果没有用错的话麻烦给我留言说一下 哈哈）evaluate one's happiness.

In addition, mental mood is also another factor leading into unhappiness recently. When we are craving for the material world, simultaneously scantly do we pay attention to our mental world. Under these circumstances, easily can we get some odd diseases owing to having tremendous pressure and seldom releasing ourselves in a proper way. For instance, do you ever regard the house as the necessity for surviving? Renting it may be another solution. But, if you imitate your colleagues and not enough money supports you to possess one, you will be overwhelmed by this plan. Therefore, we cannot emphasis the importance of mental world.

When people deem it unfavorable to in the modern society, isn't it necessary that they should give some consideration to the advantages of it(把of it 去掉会更好）. We may enjoy the modern buildings, where we can still work in the summer day with the help of air-conditions. Also, modern medical techniques will save our lives, prolonging（感觉prolong这里用的不是很合适） and improving our living quality. Otherwise, it is vulnerable for us to be infected with disease.

Considerable though the benefits that living in the modern community enjoys are, they cannot compete with the disadvantages that pursuing a diversity world nowadays brings about, when communication and mental health are taken into consideration.结尾写的太棒了 让步段似乎感觉按正常模式应该是说人们也会对什么满意 但是这都是个人愚见。。。 写的真心不错 有的词汇大亮 加油O(∩_∩)O

包子不包子

7.18 TPO9 综合
TPO 9
The passage makes the point that fuel-cell engines have several advantages over internal-combustion engines. On the contrary, the lecture demonstrates a controversy idea that hydrogen is the solution to the problems provided in the reading.

To start with, contrary to the belief in the reading that internal-combustion engine rely on petroleum, which is a finite resource, the professor says that hydrogen is not available and it's hard to obtainit. Hydrogen must be protectedcan only be used in a pure liquid state. So, it is difficult for people to produce and store the liquid hydrogen. Thus, the first reason provided in the reading text is reputed.

In addition, the author holds the view that hydrogen solves the pollution problems. In contrast, the lecturer contradicts the idea by saying that hydrogen will also create pollution when it is produced. In these producing processes, coals and oil will be used to generate these new fuels. At the same time, pollution will be produced感觉有些重复了. This directly cast doubt on its counterpart in the reading text.

Last but not least, the reading material states that fuel-cell engines will exhaust less energy and save more money. On the other hand, the listening material presents a conflicting idea that it is expensive to manipulate the fuel, because the fuel-cell engines will need an expensive metal. Some scientists are discovering时态不大队哦 some other metals to take the place of it, but it is so far successful. Therefore, the last reason explained by the writer is totally unsound, according to the speaker.

包子好久没听原文了 可能改的不大完整哎  见谅见谅~
加油~

qianjun06

7月25日110304NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important problems in today’s world will be solved in our lifetime.

In recent years, there is a public controversy on whether we could manage to give an answer to the all the crucial problems during our life span. Those who are in favor of the issue argue that modern facilities are beneficial to our daily life, which will make the dilemmas easily resolved. However, other people disagree with them. Contrary to the opinion of the former notion is my heartfelt agreement with the idea that it is not possible to solve the most important problems in our lifetime nowadays.

To start with, communication deficiency is the result of the development of modern life, which we have no abilities to treat with it unless we cease the rapid pace of advancement. There is no denying that presently people have less to communicate with their families as well as their friends. Seldom do we have a picnic and share feelings with them under such overwhelming circumstances. Also, the less frequently we communicate with relatives, the less harmonious the relationship between us will be. It provides a typical example of my own. After long time of learning TOEFL, I feel alone and sometimes I finds there is a gap between my friends and I, because topics we talked about is irrelative. Amusements could alleviate my loneliness, but it could not solve it. So, on no account can we ignore the value of communication in our society.

In addition, some pollution problems could also not to be solved in our lifetime. Pollutions, especially environment pollutions will last so many years that our offspring will also suffer from the affects we leave. These pollutions will devastate our home and living resources. Even worse, some of the polluted lands will never be recovered and they will become the deserts. For instance, the nuclear basement leak in the Japan cause the polluted city 30 years to clean up the radioactive material-Uranium. This case is not rare, it is typical of dozens. Therefore, we could not emphasis the importance of ecology system too much.

When people deem that there still exists some issues we cannot conquer, isn't it necessary that they should give some considerations to the advancements we made nowadays. Admittedly, there are numerous cases which we have no treatment to them can be overcome by us in today's world. Modern medical service is able to prolong our lives. Transportation also makes our life more efficient and convenient. So, it is conceivable that our life has been great improved by science technologies.

Considerable though the benefits that modern society enjoys brings about, it cannot draw a conclusion that the most important problems in today’s world will be solved in our lifetime, when communication problems and pollution issues are taken into consideration.