6.18 独立

qianjun06

           The wtirer makes the point that the science of archaeology is faced with serious problems and limitations in Britain.On the contrary, the lecturer demonstrates a different idea that new guildlines has been issued to protected and make a great progress in archaeology science.
            To start with, contrary to the belief in the passage that many valuable artifacts were lost to construction projects, the lecture says that construction sites will be examined firstly by archaeologists to see whether they are interested in them or the size is value or not. After the observation, the plan will be approve of by government before the excavation to see if there are some artifacts to be prevented.
             In addition, the author said that financial support from the government for archaeology research was inadequate. However, the professor contradict the idea in the reading by arguing that archaeology research will be supported by companies instead of government. The funds will be paid before these company doing the excavation. Thus, more scientific research will be carried on.
            Last but not least, the reading material discussed the issue that it was difficult to have a career in archaelolgy.While the listening material, on the other hand , states that more paied works will be created in all stages of the archaeology process including examing, researching, as well as writing articles. So, the increasing number of jobs will be the highest than ever before.

tyyhappy

红色是修改，蓝色是建议，黄色是高亮。

In the recent years, there is a public controversy on whether parents should help their children do schoolwork. Those who criticize this phenomenon argues(argue) that assignments should be finished independently; however, some people(are) in favor of this issue. Contrary to the opinion of many people(hold by) is my heartfelt agreement with idea that helping their children do homework, to some extent, has some merits.
                   To start with, doing assignments cooperatively instead of independently is an easy way for children to accomplish them. With the help of their parents, dilemmas can be solved effectively and efficiently. Even more time will be saved to entertain or be devoted to other fields of there(their) hobbies. There is no denying that it is helping not just parents （but not parents’）doing homework that broaden their children's minds. It provides a typical instance of myself. My father is a mathematics professor. When I have some puzzles in mathematics, I always resort to him. With the helps(help) of his advices(With his advice更简洁), I can obtain new physical laws and finish my work smoothly. We can emphasize the importance of positive aspects helping their children brings about.
                  In addition, it offers an excellent opportunity for parents to communicate with their children when they are resolving a difficult. Thanks to(Due to, thanks to是多亏的意思，这里不符) the situation that parents and children spend their daily time separately, homework time (sometimes,直接说有些过于绝对)is the sole option for them to share their experience, impart knowledge, as well as exchange ideas.  Benefited from the communicating, children will be more active than before, which leads them easier to success. For instance, Abraham Lincoln lived in a single-parent family. Non-communication with his family made him feel solitary, even worse, which lead him to quit school. The story is not rare, it is typical of dozens. Thus, on no account can we ignore the value working together with their child results in.
                     when people deem it is favorable to help their children do assignments, isn't it necessary that they give some considerations to the negative points it cause? They may be become too dependent on their parents without the ability（too to结构，加上without the ability 有些多余） to think personally, which may cause them to be incompetent with peers in future career.
                     Considerable though the disadvantages that studying with parents together accounts for are, （+that少了个倒装句的that，话说这个句子太长了，读的好复杂。）they cannot compete with the benefits solving issues together with parents （+that，定语从句的that）brings about, when efficiency and communication are taken into consideration.

用词丰富，句式多样。
但是，有的时候句式过于复杂，读起来会不通畅，还有表述上不够简洁。

kchszy061ban

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

          The wtirer makes the point that the science of archaeology is faced with(faces) serious problems and limitations in Britain. On the contrary, the lecturer demonstrates a different idea that new guildlines has been issued to protected and (will) make a great progress in archaeology science.
           To start with, contrary to the belief in the passage that many valuable artifacts were lost to construction projects, the lecturer says that construction sites will be examined firstly by archaeologists to see whether they are interested in them or the size is value or not. After the observation, the plan will be approve of by government before the excavation to see if there are some artifacts to be prevented.
            In addition, the author said that financial support from the government for archaeology research was inadequate. However, the professor contradicted the idea in the reading by arguing that archaeology research will be supported by companies instead of government. The funds will be paid before these company doing the excavation. Thus, more scientific researches will be carried on.
           Last but not least, the reading material discussed the issue that it was difficult to have a career in archaelolgy. While the listening material, on the other hand , states that more paied works will be created in all stages of the archaeology process including examing, researching, as well as writing articles. So, the increasing number of jobs will be the highest than ever before.

不错不错，小地方改进下会更好了。听力的点也很全的说。

qianjun06

TOP 1

            The writer makes the point that four-day workweek will benefits the economy as well as the companies and employees. On the contrary, the speaker demonstrates that four-day workweek will affect the company and has disadvantages to employees.
             To start with, contrary to the belief in the passage that the shortened workweek would increase company profits, the lecture says that companies will spend more money on training and medical premium if they carry on the four-day workweek project. Expense of four-day workweek is the same of five-day workweek. And companies will spend more money on space and computer, which will cut the profits.
              In addition, the author makes the points that offering four-day workweek option will reduce the unemployment rates. However, the lecturer contradicts the idea in the reading by saying companies will require employees work overtime and they will raise expectation to the workers. An employee working four-day a week will do the same amount of work as five-day workweek worker will do. Thus, no additional jobs will be created.
              Finally, according to the reading material, it discusses that employees who afford a lower salary will enjoy more free time and improve the quality of their life. While the listening material states that it will reduce the quality of life and has risk to one's career. Taking four-day workweek will decrease one's competence abilities and they will lose their jobs first. Employees will also have less chances to be promoted.

qianjun06

7月11日
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement that it is good for children to have similar jobs with you。



               In recent years, there is a public controversy on whether children should inherit their parents' career. Those who criticize the phenomenon argue that children should have their own choice of their career. However, some people in favor of the issue. Contrary to the opinion of the former is my heartfelt agreement with the idea that having the similar jobs with their parents does good to their children.

          To start with, it is more convenient and efficient way for children to share experience with their parents in the same job language. There is a common phenomenon that children may be easily influenced by their parents' job during their childhood. Holding the same profession, children can share their minds, opinions as well as feelings with their parents. It provides a typical example of myself. My mother is an accountant, which leads me to get interested to calculation and thus I choose accounting as my major. When I encounter with accounting dilemma, the first person I consort to is my mother .Otherwise, it will be solved when the next accounting course is taken. Thus, we cannot emphasize importance of enjoying identical career too much.

          In addition, having the similar jobs offers their parents an excellent opportunity to communicate with their children. There is no doubt that children are not mature and have less abilities to determine which career they are suit. Under this circumstance, parents may take the chance to impart their professional knowledge to their children. For instance, my roommate ,his mother is a doctor, was active when he was a child. His mother had insights into his talents in  manipulation and then taught him how to utilize the medical apparatus. Now, he became a celebrated doctor. The story is not rare, it is typical of dozens. Therefore, on no account can we ignore the value that children have the same jobs with their parents results in.

            When people deem it is favorable to select the similar jobs of their own for their kids, isn't it necessary that they give some considerations to the negative points it may cause ? If the child take their parents advice and engage in the same field, they will lose the chance to seek which job they are competent for. Even worse, the job chosen by their parents will not accord with their own interests.

           Considerable though the disadvantages that children having equal career with their parents brings about are, it cannot compete with the benefits that sharing their parents' professional knowledge leads to, when convenience and communication are taken into consideration.

kchszy061ban

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

The writer makes the point that four-day workweek will benefits the economy as well as the companies and employees. On the contrary, the speaker demonstrates that four-day workweek will affect the company and has（brings） disadvantages to employees.
            To start with, contrary to the belief in the passage that the shortened workweek would increase company profits, the lecturer says that companies will spend more money on training and medical premium if they carry on the four-day workweek project. Expense of four-day workweek is the same of five-day workweek. And companies will spend more money on space and computer, which will cut the profits.
             In addition, the author makes the points that offering four-day workweek option will reduce the unemployment rates. However, the lecturer contradicts the idea in the reading by saying companies will require employees work overtime and they will raise expectation to the workers. An employee working four-day a week will do the same amount of work as five-day workweek worker will do. Thus, no additional jobs will be created.
             Finally, according to the reading material, it discusses that employees who afford a lower salary will enjoy more free time and improve the quality of their life. While the listening material states that it will reduce the quality of life and has risk to one's career. Taking four-day workweek will decrease one's competence abilities and they will lose their jobs first when the economical situation is not good. Employees will also have less chances to be promoted.

听力的要点都很全，就是每段后后来个总结的话，会更好了。

qianjun06

        The passage makes the point that having a team of people attack a project offers several advantages. On the contrary, the lecture demonstrates a controversy idea that team working may cause several disadvantages.

       To start with, contrary to the belief in the passage that a group of people have a wide of knowledge and can work more quickly, the lecturer says that decisions are made less quickly because it is difficult to concentrate all the suggestions.Before they reach an agreement, there will be more meetings among the group.  Therefore, the first reason provided in the reading text is refuted.

       In addition, the author holds the view that groups are more likely to make risky decision. In contrast, the lecturer contradicts the idea in the reading by saying that When the convincer think the idea is inaccessible, the team will dispose it without further discussion.On the other hand, when the convincer highly praises the creative project,others will ignore the possible risk.When the project is failed, the blame is placed for all the members. This directly casts doubt on its counterpart in the reading.

       Last but not least, the reading material states that taking part in a group process can be rewarding for individual member. However, the listening material presents a conflicting idea that  some of the members will be the free-riders. They do not contribute to the team. However, the rewards belongs to the whole team without any name of a certain person.  Thus, the last benefit of team working is totally unsounded, according to the speaker.

jasonliu119

请问你的7-10 独立写了么？我找不到哦

qianjun06

哈哈，这篇我上个月写过了，在第一页  6月20号的，我就删了，呵呵，不用改了

丰碑无语Yee

7.11 综合 TPO2
The passage makes the point that having a team of people attack a project offers several advantages. On the contrary, the lecture demonstrates a controversy idea that team working may cause several disadvantages.

To start with, contrary to the belief in the passage that a group of people have a wide of knowledge and can work more quickly, the lecturer says that decisions are made less quickly because it is difficult to concentrate all the suggestions. Before they reach an agreement, there will be more meetings among the group. Therefore, the first reason provided in the reading text is refuted.

In addition, the author holds the view that groups are more likely to make risky decision. In contrast, the lecturer contradicts the idea in the reading by saying that when the convincer (表达什么?)think the idea is inaccessible, the team will dispose it without further discussion. On the other hand, when the convincer highly praises the creative project, others will ignore the possible risk. When the project is failed, the blame is placed for all the members. This directly casts doubt on its counterpart in the reading.

Last but not least, the reading material states that taking part in a group process can be rewarding for individual member. However, the listening material presents a conflicting idea that some of the members will be the free-riders. They do not contribute to the team. However, the rewards(reward) belongs to the whole team without any name of a certain person. Thus, the last benefit of team working is totally unsounded(unsound), according to the speaker.
三点听出来了，逻辑也不错，挺好的哈