Marconi’s conception of the radio was as a substitute for the telephone, a tool for private conversation; instead, it is precisely the opposite, a tool for communicating with a large, public audience.
A. Marconi’s conception of the radio was as a substitute for the telephone, a tool for private conversation; instead, it is (it 指代Marconi’s conception,illogical)_
B. Marconi conceived of the radio as a substitute for the telephone, a tool for private conversation, but which is(but 后面是从句,前面没有平行对象)
C. Marconi conceived of the radio as a tool for private conversation that could substitute for the telephone; instead, it has become(that could substitute for the telep修饰a tool for private conversation 的中心词没有歧义;it指代前面主句的宾语,也没有歧义;has become表示一个渐变的过程,优于is)
D. Marconi conceived of the radio to be a tool for private conversation, a substitute for the telephone, which has become(which引起歧义)
E. Marconi conceived of the radio to be a substitute for the telephone, a tool for private conversation, other than what it is, (a tool for private conversation明显修饰telephone,虽然意思差别不大,但是和原句还是有出入;what相当于the thing that,如果没有逗号,带进去it明显多余,而如果有逗号,这个表达ye也略显redundant)
感觉C好一些,any more comment? |