请教本月作文JJ第26题（在教育系统中引入竞争的那个）,急！

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能把范文贴出来吗 或者列个提纲  没思路

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我觉得这道题是OG题库第99题的变体吧 ？
ISSUE99：
“If a nation is to ensure its own economic success, it must maintain a highly competitive educational system in which students compete among themselves and against students from other countries.”
有一篇范文的

我疑问的是，AI如果想不出什么好的论点论据，写的跟范文的论点一样可以的么？会不会分很低呢？
AA我看GMAT官方题库范文精讲里面有好些都只驳斥了两个逻辑错误，但是感觉大家实战都是三个以上啊，怎么会的啊？

-- by 会员 ningcrod (2011/5/8 18:09:51)

哇，太感谢了~论点一样应该不会有问题的，AA尽量找三个吧，我觉得还是很好找的

-- by 会员 xiaoxiaomi (2011/5/8 19:31:03)

不用不用谢~~
我真的是试着写了三四篇AI都是写不出观点，只分了两个观点段，而且都是些车轱辘化翻来滚去地说，更可怕的是都没什么恰当的例子。。。思维有问题啊~~~脑筋僵固啊 看来只能记着别人的论点了%>_<% 这怎么会的啊 我。。。

-- by 会员 ningcrod (2011/5/8 21:49:57)

请问 能把范文贴出来不捏？一点儿思路都没有……

sarahstany

奥巴马2月份向国会要BUDGET的时候，在电视讲话中谈的教育问题：
which country wants to be the second in the world?

Our children and our country are better-prepared than anyone else in the world when come into the economy of 21st century.

1，竞争教育是国际化竞争的重要准备；
2，需融入合作和共赢；
3，不能造成教育不平等。

ningcrod

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请问 能把范文贴出来不捏？一点儿思路都没有……

-- by 会员 418722521 (2011/5/15 20:50:16)

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不好意思 我没看到回帖哈~~这是新黄金80篇里面的【跟《GMAT官方题库范文精讲》里是同一篇】：
100. “If a nation is to ensure its own economic success, it must maintain a highly competitive educational system in which students compete among themselves and against students from other countries.”
“如果一个国家要确保它的经济成功，它必须保持有高度竞争力的教育系统，在其中学生们相互竞争，还和国外的学生进行竞争。”

1，advantage: make students better prepared for the future competition, etc.

2，disadvantages:very pressure and stressful

3，a refined educational system is preferred



View1: education play a very important part in determine a nation’s economic success.

Employees, government regulation strategies, corporate management level, technology—competitive power of products

View2: as the development of open market and global economy, education is also required to face international challenge.

Although sometimes competition might produce desired results such as efficiency and productivity, I still believe that our national economic success will be better promoted by an educational system that encourages cooperative learning among students, and with students from other countries.

being competitive fixes our focus externally, on marking and beating the progress of others with whom we compete. Such external motivation can direct our attention away from creative solutions to our problems, and away from important human values like cooperation and fair play (公平比赛, 公平条件). Indeed, a highly competitive environment can foster cheating and ruthless back-stabbing within an organization, and ill-will and mistrust among nations. In the extreme case, competition between nations becomes war.



I don’t think it is a good idea to design an educational system that focuses mainly on competition. For although a little competition might produce desired results, in the long run too much competition will be destructive. Instead, I believe that our national economic success will be better promoted by an educational system that encourages cooperative learning among students, and with students from other countries.
Granted, competitiveness is an important aspect of human nature. And, properly directed, it can motivate us to reach higher and produce more, not to mention meet deadlines. But being competitive fixes our focus externally, on marking and beating the progress of others with whom we compete. Such external motivation can direct our attention away from creative solutions to our problems, and away from important human values like cooperation and fair play (公平比赛, 公平条件). Indeed, a highly competitive environment can foster cheating and ruthless back-stabbing within an organization, and ill-will and mistrust among nations. In the extreme case, competition between nations becomes war.
On the other hand, an environment of cooperation encourages us to discover our common goals and the best ways to achieve them. At the national and international levels, our main interests are in economic wellbeing and peace. In fact, economic success means little without the security of peace. Thus, global peace becomes a powerful incentive for developing educational models of cooperative learning, and implementing exchange programs and shared research projects among universities from different countries.
Moreover, research suggests that cooperative settings foster greater creativity and productivity than competitive ones. This has been shown to be the case both in institutions of higher learning and in business organizations. If true, it seems reasonable to argue that national economic success would be similarly tied to cooperative rather than competitive effort.
In conclusion, competition can provide an effective stimulus to achievement and reward. Even so, I believe it would be unwise to make competition the centerpiece of our educational system. We stand toreap greater benefits, including economic ones, by encouraging cooperative learning.