Issue 69 求狠拍

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Some people believe it is often necessary, even desirable, for political leaders to withhold information from the public. Others believe that the public has a right to be fully informed.



Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the view presented.



I concede that it is public’s right to be informed when the information concerning their own direct interests and need their advise. However, this does not necessarily mean that politic leaders should expose all the information to public, without holding the certain information which is necessary, or even obligatory to keep in secret. Since sealing off some information is a kind of politic strategies which could help facilitate the politic efficiency.



Admittedly, keeping the public informed has its own merits. First, political leaders frequently giving notice to the public actually act as an indicator that the two sizes communicating actively. Thus, it raises the public’ enthusiasm to get involved in politic and helps create a democratic atmosphere. Also, when the public get informed, they can better exercise their monitoring right. Not only helping prevent political corruption, such as embezzlement, bribery, two prevailing politic problems in all countries, but also conducing to avoid the implementation of unwise measures.



Moreover, by offering citizens necessary information in a crisis, politic leaders are more likely to get supports from the public and deal with the crisis efficiently. One apt illustration of this point involves the serious earthquake in Sichuang province, China, 2008. Immediately after the earthquake people from all over the country were informed. Actually, thanks to the highly development of mass media in modern world, they had access to the latest development of this catastrophe. Because of this, people in the disaster area were aided by people around the whole country and it really helped the politic leaders relieve this crisis.



In spite of the numerous benefits of keeping the public informed, withholding some information is also necessary, even desirable. Just like information concerning the military secret of a country, leaking it to the public means informing all its enemies the advantages and weakness of its military force, which may leave the country in a vulnerable situation and threaten its security. Because of this, during the cold war, though citizens in the two countries knew some politic leaders were preparing for the “star wars”, but few of them were informed the particulars of strategic weapons, military base, or regular exercise situation of the soldiers. Undeniably, the result of the cold war would be obvious if one of the nations leak such military secret to its public.



In addition, the difference between politic leaders and citizens are the former stand in a view to maximize the benefits of a nation, state or district in the long run, while the latter focus only the immediate and practical interests. Therefore, some political strategies aim to improve people’s potential welfare from a long-term perspective may rejected by the public for the limited recourses could be employed to address more pressing problems, which are more likely to conducing to the public in an immediate way. Thus, if such measures leak to the public in an appropriate time, it may impede these plans’ exertion and decrease the administrative efficiency. What’s worse, it may even arouse social unrest and threaten the country’s normal operation.



Finally, even if political leaders provide specific information of some issues, the population may actually show little interest in them. In this situation, they risk squandering recourses to do something meaningless.



In sum, considering the potential problems caused by keeping the public completely informed, I contend that political leaders are supposed to withhold some information. Nevertheless, in the specific cases, whether or not, or to what extent should the public be keep informed depend on the function of the news, public’s attitude, and the possible consequences caused by this divulging behavior.

guominhuhu

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谢谢你，这么用心的帮我改文章~
我会好好看看，努力进步的~~~~

guominhuhu

I concede that it is public’s right to be informed when the information concerning their own direct interests and need their advise. However, this does not necessarily mean that politic leaders should expose all the information to public, without holding the certain information which is necessary, or even obligatory to keep in secret. （说的有点抽象，举些例子比较好）Since sealing off some information is(你看看，你用了多少个 some information certain information 。。。要换一下) a kind of politic strategies which could help facilitate the politic efficiency.（很不具体，哪种？）



Admittedly, keeping the public informed has its own merits. （写上具体的有点吧，有效信息很少，只是告诉了你的观点，你的支撑点写一下）First, political leaders frequently giving notice to the public actually act as an indicator that the two sizes communicating actively. Thus, it raises the public’ enthusiasm to get involved in politic and helps create a democratic atmosphere. Also, when the public get informed, they can better exercise their monitoring right. Not only helping prevent political corruption, such as embezzlement, bribery, two prevailing politic problems in all countries, but also conducing to avoid the implementation of unwise measures. (句式过于单一，句式结构过于简单，多看看老外写的文章)

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不小心点错了，回了好多哦~

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嗯嗯，谢谢普渡哥~~~
写的时候我是这样想的，第一段让步一下，同意隐瞒一些信息，然后二三段为第一意群，写Inform的好处，四五六为第二意群，写Withhold的必要性，然后最后一段在表明立场，说具体问题具体分析~··可是刚去看各段首句， 确实有些乱，是连接词和句子的问题，还是内在的内容上的逻辑不清晰呢？望进一步赐教~~~~thank you~

雪霁花开

嗯嗯，谢谢普渡哥~~~
写的时候我是这样想的，第一段让步一下，同意隐瞒一些信息，然后二三段为第一意群，写Inform的好处，四五六为第二意群，写Withhold的必要性，然后最后一段在表明立场，说具体问题具体分析~··可是刚去看各段首句， 确实有些乱，是连接词和句子的问题，还是内在的内容上的逻辑不清晰呢？望进一步赐教~~~~thank you~

雪霁花开

嗯嗯，谢谢普渡哥~~~
写的时候我是这样想的，第一段让步一下，同意隐瞒一些信息，然后二三段为第一意群，写Inform的好处，四五六为第二意群，写Withhold的必要性，然后最后一段在表明立场，说具体问题具体分析~··可是刚去看各段首句， 确实有些乱，是连接词和句子的问题，还是内在的内容上的逻辑不清晰呢？望进一步赐教~~~~thank you~

普渡哥

段落之间的逻辑结构有点乱，作者看看各段的开头来看看逻辑关系。