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graceguo98 · 发表于 2009-12-2 04:37:47

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1. 說是一家media公司，在之前的food-based TVprogram取得了成功，原因可能是經濟繁榮所以大家愿意花在食物上的錢多了（1.cause and effect fallacy—因为有钱没钱都要买食物，买食物于是否有钱无关）-_-!然后公司就決定明年再開多3個節目，分別是關于參觀，wine和BBQ（2.false analogy—错误地认为food-based TV program 与3个新的节目相似会增加收视率 audience rating ）。公司相信新開三個節目后一定會大大增加收視率，廣告收入和利潤（3.incomplete thought—profit =revenue –cost收入增加，也许成本会更多了，利润未必增加）（题库里没找到）(上个月JJ) 2次

FROM http://forum.chasedream.com/dispbbs.asp?BoardID=22&ID=415819

V2 一个叫CableCom的公司吧 programing 了 food-based 的 Taste Channel 去的了巨大的成功，后来分析（好像啊）说是因为根据economic啦什么人们的income 怎么怎么好了所以人们好像是愿意花钱在吃上面了，所以，这个公司plan to expand barbeque channel wine channel 什么的，也会去的成功！！（11/18回忆）

FROM http://forum.chasedream.com/GMAT_Math/thread-420141-1-1.html

2. W国的旅游业在近5年收入下降，公园不景气，这是因为环境污染，来W国旅游的人少了(1.cause and effect fallacies 可能其他原因也许别的国家的经济不好)。但是，幸运的是W国发现了矿藏，所以W国决定开发矿产（2.false analogy-把旅游业和矿藏对比/ incomplete thought,-lacks to consider the advantage and disadvantage）。这样既可以提高税收(3.incomplete though 开发矿藏急需要成本又需要考虑市场的情况及revenue)，又可以提供上百个岗位，并且可以带动经济发展（4.上百个岗位的will account a little percentage, 无法带动经济）。（没找到，还在继续找- -）1次

FROM http://forum.chasedream.com/dispbbs.asp?BoardID=22&ID=414869

V2 是說W主要經濟來源來自於旅遊業然而這個地方的國家公園因為industural pollution導致現在已經不能像以前那樣吸引很多遊者了（1.cause and effect fallacies-after this therefore because of this），所以導致W收入下降。然後有mineal在這個國家公園被發現了所以W打算要開挖所以mining company開挖的話就((incomplete thought-lacks to consider the advantage and disadvantage)可以讓之前的旅遊業的員工繼續工作( false analogy-旅游业的员工与mineal work 不一样的skill-可能会导致重大accident)，這樣一來W的收入可以不會持續下降(incomplete thought-员工继续工作，可能收入远比原来的低，那么w 的收入让会持续下降)。

FROM http://forum.chasedream.com/dispbbs.asp?BoardID=22&ID=415422

V3 W这个地方因为污染，国家公园不在吸引游客了(cause and effect fallacy—no sequitur/ after this therefore because of & concurrence)，而且公园那里发现了矿物，所以应该开矿(incomplete thought-lacks to consider the advantage and disadvantage—开矿会带来很多负面作用)以增加税收(incomplete thought,-profit=revenue -cost)。

FROM http://forum.chasedream.com/GMAT_Math/thread-417238-1-1.html

V4 原本旅游业是国家经济基础，但是由于工业破坏，国家公园的收入降低(cause and effect fallacy/ no sequitur )。然而公园里发现矿藏，认为政府如果能同意开矿就能够使矿业公司为地区原本从事旅游业的人提供很多职位(gratuitous assumption)，并且有利于弥补旅游业衰退的税收(incomplete thought---profit –revenue -cost)。所以开矿是这个地区经济发展最好的方法

FROM http://forum.chasedream.com/GMAT_Math/thread-420163-1-1.html

3. 224范文第16题

“Throughout the last two decades, those who earned graduate degrees found it very difficult to get jobs teaching their academic specialties at the college level. Those with graduate degrees from Waymarsh University(1. the changing scope fallacy—nationwide to individual全部的有困难，推出W大学的也有困难) had an especially hard time finding such jobs. But better times are coming in the next decade for all academic job seekers, including those from Waymarsh. Demographic人口统计 trends indicate that an increasing number of people will be reaching college age over the next 10 years（2.gratuitous assumption –reaching college age 的人不一定就去上学）; consequently, we can expect that the job market will improve dramatically for people seeking college-level teaching positions（3.all things remain unchanged over time—在今后的时间毕业的教师人数还会再增加） in their fields.” 3次

FROM http://forum.chasedream.com/GMAT_Math/thread-420134-1-1.html?userid=463914

4. A software design company incurs loss for 3 years, some manager analyzed that it's because their costs are too high(1. cause and effect fallacy-可能是国家政策调整了后者其他方面的原因)（2.incomplet thought—profit =revenue –cost也可能收入太低）. An auto company has successfully survived and made profits by switching part of the full-time staff to part-time staff（3. false analogy—汽车公司的员工和软件公司的员工性质不一样）. Hence the software company should switch their 25% full-time staff to part-time as part-time is cheaper in salary, no salary benefit（4. hast generalization）. 题库里未找到 1次

FROM http://forum.chasedream.com/dispbbs.asp?BoardID=22&ID=415111

V2 说有一家叫Ｊ什么的computer software 公司已经三年没有盈利了。而这个时候auto industry的很多公司通过replace full-time employees by temporary labor降低了成本，获得很好的盈利。因此Ｊ也应该效仿（1.false analogy），把full-time employees用temporary labor换掉，以达到短期其可以盈利(2.gratuitous assumption—不一定换了就盈利)，长期增加公司stability（好像是stability,不知道他们怎么想的）的效果（3. cause and effect fallacy-短期盈利就可以长期稳定吗？也可能有更大的顺时因为没有考虑到公司的long term plan）。

FROM http://forum.chasedream.com/GMAT_Math/thread-417675-1-1.html

V3 一个computer software company 连年profit 下跌，就想用temporary labor 代替现有的employee来削减开支(1. incomplete thought—lacks to consider the advantage and disadvantage---换了临时工以后可能顺势更大/ revenue 太低)。这种消减开支的策略是在auto industry 里用过的，效果很好(2.false analogy)。而且 temporary labor 工资低，不用提供福利可以减少cost（3. gratuitous assumption—无理的认为工资低没有福利就可以减少cost, 可能用更多的低工资的人-反而成本更高）。

FROM http://forum.chasedream.com/GMAT_Math/thread-420202-1-1.html

5. 224范文52题

“The construction last year of a shopping mall in downtown Oak City was a mistake（hast generalization – 以前的shopping center closed 并不能说明这个新的商场成立是错误的）. Since the mall has opened, a number of local businesses have closed（cause and effect fallacy—concurrence-只能是同时发生，并没有直接原因）, and the downtown area suffers from an acute parking shortage, and arrests for crime and vagrancy 流浪汉have increased in the nearby Oak City Park（cause and effect fallacy-no sequitur停车场短缺或许这里的人口增加了，犯罪多可能是失业的人数增加了。）. Elm City should pay attention to the example of the Oak City mall and deny the application to build a shopping mall in Elm City.”4次

FROM http://forum.chasedream.com/GMAT_Math/thread-420259-1-1.html

6. 官方题库17页第三题

“Commercial real estate prices have been rising steadily in the Sandida Heights neighborhood for several years, while the prices in the adjacent neighborhood of Palm Grove have remained the same. It seems obvious, then, that a retail space in Sandida Heights must now be much more expensive than a similar space in Palm Grove（false nanlogy—错误地类比涨价在P和S，认为P没涨价就一定比S低。也可能P地方的价格原来就比S 的高很多很多，既是S涨价了但是仍然低于P）, which was not the case several years ago. So, it appears that retail spaces in Sandida Heights are now overpriced relative to those in Palm Grove.(incomplete thought？—或许其他的地方的价格高于 S的增长，也许投资其他的地方更好) Therefore, it would be in our financial interest to purchase a retail space in Palm Grove rather than in Sandida Heights.”（all things remain unchanged over time—past condition that the real estate prices have been rising steadily in S ,so the author also predicts the price of S will keep rising.） 2次

FROM http://forum.chasedream.com/GMAT_Math/thread-420247-1-1.html

7. 官方题库15页第一题

“Eight years ago, our firm’s profits were increasing with each new employee we added. We discovered that each employee had the skills and motivation to generate more revenue for the firm than his or her salary cost us. However, for the past two years（1.all things remain unchanged—8年前随着员工的增加，利润也增加，这2年利润下降了，）, our profit margin has been falling（2. cause and effect fallacy—no sequitur--8年前认为利润增加了适应为增加员工，近2年增加员工也不能增加利润了，显然增加员工不是引起利润增加的原因）, even though we have continued to add employees. Thus, our newer employees are not generating enough revenue to justify their salaries. We must not be hiring new employees with the same level of skills and motivation as those we used to attract. Clearly, then, failures in the human resources department account for our falling profits (3.cause and effect fallacy—no sequitur, 人力资源部门的失败由于利润的下降，没有因果关系，也可能颠倒因果，恰前是利润下降才导致人力资源部的失败).” 2次

FROM http://forum.chasedream.com/GMAT_Math/thread-420241-1-1.html

8. AUTOMOBILE——6月的销售策略是陈列LUXURY MODEL,打LUXURY MODEL的广告，然后COMBINED SALES剧烈上涨。2月陈列MORE INEXPENSIVE MODEL，打INEXPENSIVE MODEL的广告，OVERALL SALES下降（false analogy-同样的方法卖两种不同的车，产生截然不同的结果，一个上涨，一个下降）。
经历的结论：应该继续6月的策略（2.all things remain unchanged over time—6月份的销售豪华车的方式应用在将来），因为只要顾客踏入AUTO LOT然后看到L MODEL就会被吸引然后购买（3.gratuitous assumption-错误地假设只要顾客看到这个车就会买—也许顾客看到了车更不会买了因为与他们想象的不一样了）。

题库里没有 FROM http://forum.chasedream.com/GMAT_Math/thread-420233-1-1.html

V2 6月份的时候公司进行了advertising on parking lots and show room of luxury automotibles. And the sales increased significantly for both luxury and inexpensive models. 这证明这种投放广告的方式是有效的, 可以同时带来高级汽车(luxury)和普通汽车(inexpensive) 的销售增加（1.cause and effect fallacy---在没有排除其他的原因情况下错误地认为luxury 和inexpensive model 车的销售好因为广告好。反驳或许政府有补贴更换车辆在6月）. However, in Feburary, 同样针对inexpensive models的广告活动,没有带来sales的增长（2. false analogy—错误地认为做luxry 车的广告引起销售增加类比为inexpensive car 的广告也会引起销售增加，）. 因此,公司应该在以后的广告活动中put the luxury models in front并center at luxury modles. 这样,现行可以maximize profits(incomplete thought-最大化利润与销售和成本有关。反驳也成本增加，既是销售增加，但是利润还是下降的).

FROM http://forum.chasedream.com/GMAT_Math/thread-420428-1-1.html

9. 224范文99题

“The Saluda Consolidated High School offers more than 200 different courses from which its students can choose. A much smaller private school down the street offers a basic curriculum of only 80 different courses（1.hast generalization –这里只说明学校的课程，并没有叙述学生的人数，也许人均供选择的课程数在small private school高于C high school）, but it consistently一向 sends a higher proportion of its graduating seniors on to college than Consolidated does. By eliminating at least half of the courses offered there and focusing on a basic curriculum（2.cause and effect fallacy—错误地认为升学率与课程有关）, we could improve student performance at Consolidated and also save many tax dollars（3.incomplete thought—lacks to consider the advantage and the disadvantage—学生没有在high school 学到的课程以后会付更多的tuition 在college 补学这些课程。）.” 3次

FROM http://forum.chasedream.com/GMAT_Math/thread-420228-1-1.html

10. 讲某个Foster healthy fitness 根据a survey of their customers indicates that people more and more trend to eating organic food，所以，the author 建议estabilish a organic .food section and expand 。。。。。 JJ回忆不清，应该是如下原文

FROM http://forum.chasedream.com/GMAT_Math/thread-420213-1-1.html

“Sales of organic food products in this country have tripled over the past five years. If Aurora(1.the changing scope fallacy-把在整个国家的情况成立，认为Aurora地方也成立) is to profit from this continuing trend（2. all things remain unchanged over time—the past five years organic food销售好，以后这个产品也销售好）, we must diversify and start selling products such as organic orange juice and organic eggs in addition to our regular product line. With the recent increase of articles in health magazines questioning the safety of milk and other food products, customers are even more likely to buy our line of organic products（3.the changing scope fallacy—different concept—质疑牛奶的安全和organic 是两种不同的概念different concept）. And to help ensure our successful expansion, we should hire the founder of a chain of health-food stores to serve as our vice president of marketing(4.gratuitous assumption—hire the founder 与supply chain 的market 成功没有关系).”

graceguo98 · 发表于 2009-12-2 10:45:08

in order to expand our market, we should get in the competition campaign to expand our sales spots national-wide even though now we are no mature in our distribution to catch up with the national-wide demand. But any delays in our production and distribution would not damage our interest, but promote our image and shows that our products are rare and sales well(1.gratuitous assumption –没有证据显示delay 会lead to the customers think that the beer is are and sales well). As long as we catch up with the national demand of the products, we would in 3 years be the national leader in the beer market due to our good taste of beer and the increased popularity(hast generalization –草率地认为3年就可以increased popularity).

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