新issue97 学生至少花一学期在国外学习，求拍~

青怡楚楚 · 发表于 2012-5-13 22:47:13

提纲 1 肯定建议的可行性，但不能强制

2 disagreement 意群段理由 1 2 3

3 可调和的方案。

97. Colleges and universities should require heir students to spend at least one semester studying in a foreign country.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

Should all college and university students be required to spend at least one semester studying in a foreign country? It seems plausible. Study abroad could absorb with foreign culture, enrich the life experience, and increase one’s academic abilities. However, it’s unpractical for all the students. I will make further discussion on the next.

It is tempting to suggest that students spend at least one semester studying abroad, to gain more advanced knowledge as well as to access the different lifestyle. Indeed, if every student could have the opportunity to study abroad, why not to do so? Nevertheless, there are many severe problems to take the recommendation into practice. Until we solve the problems could render the recommendation become reality.

The primary problem I found is the tuition. Who should take responsibility for students’ cost studying abroad, since governments and schools unable to afford all the tuition, the nation students choose and the major they interested would influenced. In the first place, the tuition study abroad must higher than two or more semesters’ fee studying in our country,with large quantity of college and university students at present, government as well as schools cannot provide enough expenses, so the provider turns to parents. In the second place, in order to save money, students would choose the cheap fee country rather than the most look forward. Thereby, studying abroad lose its own essence.

The second problem in the statement is that the difference in education system between foreign country and our nation. If students study abroad, what they have learned is incompatible, more or less dissimilar in the curriculum, how should schools transfer their credits, meanwhile, the culture is totally different, what if students could not adapt to the new environments and face the conflict of culture. It requires all the students understand how to comprehend with each other and get along with foreign friends in a smooth relationship.

A third problem is how to guarantee the personal safety. Should the program unified by schools to organize or students themselves to apply for? Distribute students to different schools or to different countries is unwise, studying abroad in some worth-lacking schools is waste of time.

Admittedly, the recommendation is warm-hearted that schools hope students could gain more experiences and learn advanced knowledge.after all, students as well want to go abroad that attracted them for longtime. However the limited condition impede the recommendation become practical,we should come up with other methods to makeup the space.

Firstly, studying abroad is not obligation. Schools should depend on the real case and follow students willing. There is no necessary to set out a semester for students studying abroad. Secondly, school could invite all kinds of individuals, from experts, officials, educationalist to scientist, from foreign country in which they did well in their unique fields.Finally, schools could suggest students have a further vision after graduation within more income and experiences, combine with one’s interest and demand. Under the circumstance, could all students express their talents during the colleges or universities, finally walk near to success.

In sum, colleges and universities require their students to study in a foreign country are not practical, but to a certain degree, it will help students a lot. Anyhow, we still have other methods to enrich students life experiences and academic abilities.

普渡哥 · 发表于 2012-5-14 07:38:55

Study abroad could absorb with foreign culture, enrich the lifeexperience, and increase one’s academic abilities.

这句话主谓宾分析一下，非常严重的语法问题。

青怡楚楚 · 发表于 2012-5-14 08:08:16

Study abroad could absorb with foreign culture, enrich the lifeexperience, and increase one’s academic abilities.

这句话主谓宾分析一下，非常严重的语法问题。

-- by 会员普渡哥 (2012/5/14 7:38:55)

恩，

，明白了。谢谢普渡哥~

淡淡飞过 · 发表于 2012-5-14 10:16:40

我个人觉得你的文章给人的第一印象是段落很多，然而仔细看发现每段都很短，好像没有很好的展开。我觉得一篇GRE加头和尾5段足以。如果你能够好好加工一下自己的开头和结尾，让人第一印象就很舒服，你的分数非常容易提高。

另外你的句式不是非常容易让人一下子就看懂。长句子是好，但如果使用不当反倒会让人抓不住头脑。有经验的人一看就能看出你的英文水平到底在哪里，你的分数也因此会马上被定格。所以，清楚易懂的句子很重要。长短句搭配也很重要。

那里的第一句话做例子： Should all colleges and universities students be required to spend at least one semester studying in a foreign country？

我很欣赏你使用提问的方式，可以坚持下去。然而，colleges and universities 不能够修饰students. You need to change them to "college and university students". I hope it makes sense to you.

淡淡飞过 · 发表于 2012-5-14 10:23:51

另外我觉得普度哥说得很对，你接下来一句话有语法错误，这会直接把你的作文分数拉下去。如果我是评分人，我就不会再往下看了。

也许我说的有点过分，但是GRE作文的开头非常重要。

竹林中人 · 发表于 2012-5-14 10:56:15

colleges and universities students 这种情况很少见的。
at least on semester？
more advance knowledge ？
why not to do so？why not do so就好
Until we solve the problems could renderthe recommendation become reality.???
andschools unable to???
themajor they interested ?
语言表达太过随意，内容就先不说了哈

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