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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? High schools should allow students to study the courses that students want to study. Use specific reason s and examples to support your opinion.

When it comes to the issue weather the high school  should allow students to study the courses that students want to study. people are likely to give varying of responses. As far as I am concerned, I suggest that the high school should not allow students to study the courses they want. In this essay , I will justify my reasons as follows.

In the high school , students should study all the courses which are prepared for their higher education. The high school is the bridge to university and college and it is a very important era in our study life. When students in the high school they are still too young to establish a appropriate life style for the future. various of courses like science , mathematics, physics and arts will improve students to develop mature thoughts which will be very critical when they enter the complex society. it is obviously that high school should not just let students study the courses which they are prefer.

I believe under some circumstances, students must study some courses they do not want instead of the courses they prefer. For instance, the grammar is the basic part of all courses. Some students like mathematics and they just study the mathematics. For a long time they will get trouble . with the pool grammar they could not understand the expression in the textbooks at the same time they could not explain their opinion to others .

The school should not allow students to study the courses which they want to study does not mean that they must give us their interests. On the opposite , studying the courses they do not want give them a wide knowledge and give them a chance to have a higher education to improve their interests and achieve their goal .

In summary , as suggested by the previous reasons, I believe that the high school should not allow the students to study the courses they want to study.

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? High schools should allow students to study the courses that students want to study. Use specific reason s and examples to support your opinion.

When it comes to the issue weather(whether) the high school  should allow students to study the courses that students want to study. people are likely to give varying of(a variety of) responses. As far as I am concerned, I suggest that the high school should not allow students to study the courses they want. (不要再次重复topic，就直接写agree or disagree)I do not agree the statement. In this essay, I will justify(present)给出理由，如果证明，则是证明观点。根据你的后面，为reasons, 所以应为“提供” my reasons as follows.

In the high school, students should study all the courses which are prepared for their higher education. The high school is the bridge to university(universities) and college(colleges) and it is a very(very) important era in our study life(lives). When students (are) in the high school they are still too young to establish a(an) appropriate life style (appropriate life styles)for the future. various of(A diversity of) courses like science , mathematics, physics and arts will improve(help)因为与后面的develop在意思上重复 students to develop mature thoughts (their levels of knowledge)which will be very critical when they enter the complex society(for them to enter the complex society). it is obviously(obvious)系表结构，应当为形容词 that high school should not just let students study the courses which they are prefer(prefer).

I believe under some circumstances, students must study some courses they do not want instead of the courses they prefer.（Under some circumstances, students must study the courses they do not want.） For instance, the grammar is the basic part of all courses.(好象这个理由不好，太绝对) Some students like mathematics and they just study the mathematics. For a long time they will get trouble . with the pool grammar they could not understand the expression in the textbooks at the same time they could not explain their opinion to others （应当都重新写，最好重新想一个理由）.

The school should not allow students to study the courses which they want to study does not mean that they must give us their interests.(表达的比较乱)(However, On the opposite（In contrast） , studying the courses they do not want give them a wide knowledge and give them a chance to have a higher education to improve their interests and achieve their goal .（句子挺乱的）

In summary , （ sum）as suggested(discussed) by the previous reasons, I believe that the high school(high schools) should not allow the students to study the courses they want to study.

提点建议：1、语法一定要明确，你的句子中有很多的语法错误，包括词性，句式方面；

2、你的理由应当进行推敲，好象不太有说服性；

3、全部重新写写。

When it comes to the issue weather the I think the "the" here is not necessary high school  should allow students to study the courses that students want to study. people are likely to give varying of The "of" here is also not necessary responses. As far as I am concerned, I suggest that the high school should You used "suggest", the "should" is also not necessarynot allow students to study the courses they want. In this essay , I will justify my reasons as follows.

In the high school , students should study all the courses which are prepared for their higher education. The high school is the bridge to university and college I do not think the opinion here is appropriate. In fact, Many people do not go to college. So probably you may avoid to make the sentence to strong. Use sentences like: For many people, high school education is a bridge to university or college. and it is a very important era in our study life. When students in the high school they are still too young to establish a appropriate life style for the future. various of courses like science , mathematics, physics and arts will improve students to develop mature thoughts which will be very critical when they enter the complex society. it is obviously that high school should not just let students study the courses which they are prefer.

I believe under some circumstances, students must study some courses they do not want instead of the courses they prefer. For instance, the grammar is the basic part of all courses. Some students like mathematics and they just study the mathematics. For a long time they will get trouble . with the pool grammar they could not understand the expression in the textbooks at the same time they could not explain their opinion to others .

The school should not allow students to study the courses which they want to study does not mean that they must give us their interests. On the opposite , studying the courses they do not want give them a wide knowledge and give them a chance to have a higher education to improve their interests and achieve their goal .

In summary , as suggested by the previous reasons, I believe that the high school should not allow the students to study the courses they want to study.

In my opinion, you have made a basic structure in your article but the argument is a little bit too weak. You need more examples to illustrate it.

Try to modify your artcle repeatedly. Do not put it aside after you finished the first writing. Otherwise, it is not worth writing.