【写作小分队】易雨水巷的作文贴~求大地震式的轰炸~thx

易雨水巷

TO 晨依 我发现我忘了把TPO7的开头贴上来==！  不过，我听力是个严重的障碍啊啊啊，马上就要考了，还是这样，怎么都感觉不出来进步T.T

TO luckstart 没关系的 改了就好 呵呵

易雨水巷

5.7
Tpo8
The listening together with the reading both talked about the accuracy of the memoir. The reading material criticizes this claim that the Chevalier lives a more exciting as well as glamorous life because of the memoir from three aspects. However, in contrast, the professor asserts that the memoir was accurate overall instead of in detail and reliable resources can support his opinion.
To start with, the first point about where the listening conflicts with the reading is about Chevalier’s loaning money. In light of the professor, loaning money does not mean Chevalier being poor. Chevalier had to sell his events first to get money and hence he must borrow money before he was waiting his money in return.
What is more, the professor casts doubt on the writer’s opinion by expressing that conversations can not be recorded accurately by memoir. For the professor’s perspective, Chevalier wrote down every sentence in the particular conversation accurately. Besides, the records in his late life confirm his consult with Voltaire.
Ultimately, the debate is something about Chevalier’s escaping from a prison. The reading asserts that there was a bribe to release him. Nevertheless, the professor declares that since the rule is so more powerful than others. Hardly could Chevalier be freed due to a bribe. Evidence can be found in old governmental documents. In addition, the ceiling was repaired.

易雨水巷

5.8 TPO9
The reading material expresses thres advantages of fuel-cell engines over internal-combustion engine. Nonetheless, in the listening, the professor holds a different view and thinks that fuel-cell engines are not solutions to problems which are caused by internal-combustion and gives evidence to support her statement in detail.

First of all, the professor contradicts the statement in the reading material that the fuel-cell engine becomes popular because it is a sort of available as well as renewable resources. She views that the reource can not be used directly. The temperature is very cold ,which is minus 253 degrees. Under this circumstance, hydrogen is not pure liquid straight.

Furthermore, another point where the listening conflicts with the reading is that the professors believes that the pollution problems would not be solved by fuel cells. In light of the listening passage, fuel cells are deprived from burning coal as well as oil and this process without question will emit a lot of pollution. Thus, fuel-cell engines lead to pollution problems as well.

Last but not the least, the writer says that the fuel-cell engines is both economical and efficient. However, on the contrary, from the professor's perspective, it is vey expensive for manufactories to manufacture fuel-cell engines. Therefore, the fuel-cell is really expensive. What is more, the experiments is so far unsuccessful.

易雨水巷

5.8
11.9.16 NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should choose the same career as their parents. Use specific examples to support your answer.

Recently, there is a heat dicussion about wether or not children should take the same vocation as their parents. People from divergent backgrounds hold different attitudes towards this issue. Some asserts that it is not good for children to pick the same job as their parents. Nonotheless, on contrast, from my perspective, I do stands up for the statement that children are supposed to have the same career as their parents. The following reasons can serve as adequate eviedence.

To begin with, parents will do a favor to children's career if both parents and children work in the same flied. After all, after having worked for many years, parents accumulates such a massive relationships who may do good to help their children to develop well. On the other hand, parents are so experienced in their career that they are capable enough to grant some positive advice to their children  who have the same career. A good example can be found in this case. My friend, Lucy, steps into law field and her father is a lawer. When she was a graduate, thanks to her father's assistance, she got a very precise opportunity to intership in LC Company, a famous law company in my country.

In addition, children will have more common topics if they have the same career. With the society developing fast, a big gap appears between children and parents. However, this problem may be solved if children choose the same flied witht their parents. Becasue, parents togther with children will coummunitcate frequently. That is to say, common topics builds a commucation bridge over the generation gap. To illustrate, my cousin, Tim, was once engaged in his own business and leave his parents alone. It seems that the familes are strangers. Nevertheless, when Tim takes his job as the same as my aunt. They began to get to know each ohter and communicate more frequently than before.

Admittedly, some people argues that children may have an distinct interest from their parents and they ought to choose to their career on their own instead of just following their parents's steps. However, in contrast, I lend a little credible on the statement because of two reaons. First of all, interests can be cultivated. I mean that children can form an interest in their vocation which is the same with their parents. What is more, parent's  company should be successed by their children. For example, John works as an ordinary worker in his mother's company and he will heritages his mother's job to be a manager one day.

To sum up, taken what I have mentioned above into consideration, I am back up the declaration that children are surpossed to share the same vocation with their parents due to the help from their parents as well as the common topics contributing to communication.

夏雨霏霏

The listening together with the reading both talked about the accuracy of the memoir. The reading material criticizes this claim that the Chevalier lives a more exciting as well as glamorous life because of the memoir from three aspects. However, in contrast, the professor asserts that the memoir was accurate overall instead of in detail and reliable resources can support his opinion.
To start with, the first point about where the listening conflicts with the reading is about Chevalier’s loaning money. In light of the professor, loaning money does not mean Chevalier being poor. Chevalier had to sell his events first to get money and hence he must borrow money before he was waiting his money in return.
What is more, the professor casts doubt on the writer’s opinion by expressing that conversations can not be recorded accurately by memoir. For the professor’s perspective, Chevalier wrote down every sentence in the particular conversation accurately. Besides, the records in his late life confirm his consult with Voltaire.
Ultimately, the debate is something about Chevalier’s escaping from a prison. The reading asserts that there was a bribe to release him. Nevertheless, the professor declares that since the rule is so more powerful than others. Hardly could Chevalier be freed due to a bribe. Evidence can be found in old governmental documents. In addition, the ceiling was repaired
语法什么的没有问题，我觉得主要是细节不够，而且第一段过长

喵喵了个咪

改5.8
11.9.16 NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should choose the same career as their parents. Use specific examples to support your answer.

Recently, there is a heat dicussion(拼写错误，没有这种说法。换成hot issue) about wether(whether) or not children should take the same vocation as their parents. People from divergent backgrounds hold different attitudes towards this issue. Some asserts that it is not good for children to pick the same job as their parents. Nonotheless(nonetheless), on contrast(重复), from my perspective, I do stands up for the statement that children are supposed to have the same career as their parents. The following reasons can serve as adequate eviedence(evidence).

To begin with, parents will do a favor to children's career if both parents and children work in the same flied(field). After all, after having worked for many years, parents accumulates such a massive relationships who(which) may do good to help their children to develop well. On the other hand, parents are so experienced in their career that they are capable enough to grant some positive advice to their children  who have the same career. A good example can be found in this case. My friend, Lucy, steps into law field and her father is a lawer. When she was a graduate, thanks to her father's assistance, she got a very precise opportunity to intership(intern) in LC Company, a famous law company in my country.

In addition, children(family menbers) will have more common topics if they have the same career. With the society developing fast, a big gap appears between children and parents. However, this problem may be solved if children choose the same flied witht(with) their parents. Becasue(Because), parents togther with children will coummunitcate(communicate) frequently. That is to say, common topics builds a commucation(communicative) bridge over the generation gap. To illustrate, my cousin, Tim, was once engaged in his own business and leave his parents alone. It seems that the familes(families) are strangers. Nevertheless, when Tim takes his job as the same as my aunt.(不是一句话，用逗号) They began to get to know each ohter(other) and communicate more frequently than before.

Admittedly, some people argues that children may have an distinct interest from their parents and they ought to choose to their career on their own instead of just following their parents's steps. However, in contrast, I lend a little credible on the statement because of two reaons(reason). First of all, interests can be cultivated. I mean that children can form an interest in their vocation which is the same with their parents. What is more, parent's  company should be successes(succeeded) by their children. For example, John works as an ordinary worker in his mother's company and he will heritages(inherit) his mother's job to be a manager one day.

To sum up, taken what I have mentioned above into consideration, I am back up the declaration that children are surpossed(surpassed) to share the same vocation with their parents due to the help from their parents as well as the common topics contributing to communication.

错别字太多了，一定要认真！改下来只对你的错别字印象比较深刻了。。。。

婷婷connie

5.8 综合 婷婷改的综合就贴在这里了~
5.8 TPO9
The reading material expresses thres(three) advantages of fuel-cell engines over internal-combustion engine. Nonetheless, in the listening, the professor holds a different view and thinks that fuel-cell engines are not solutions to problems which are caused by internal-combustion and gives evidences to support her statement in detail.（一句话里面还是不要接连出现三个动词，让人hold不住，建议水巷可以用长短句交错写eg: However, the professor holds an opposite view and he thinks that fuel-cell engines are not solutions. Then, he gives evidences as follows.）

First of all, the professor contradicts the statement in the reading material that the fuel-cell engine becomes popular because it is a sort of available as well as renewable resources. She views that the reource(resource)can not be used directly. The temperature is very cold ,which is minus 253 degrees. Under this circumstance, hydrogen is not pure liquid straight（state听错了吧）.（这里强调一下cannot be easily produced and stored.）

Furthermore, another point where the listening conflicts with the reading is that the professors believes that the pollution problems would not be solved by fuel cells. In light of the listening passage, fuel cells are deprived from(the energy of )burning coal as well as oil and this process without question will emit(这个词真好,还可以用release，婷婷当时就写了create，感觉没有突出重点) a lot of(air )pollution. Thus, fuel-cell engines lead to pollution problems as well.

Last but not the least, the writer says that the fuel-cell engines is(are)both economical and efficient. However, on the contrary, from the professor's perspective, it is vey（very） expensive for manufactories to manufacture fuel-cell engines. Therefore, the fuel-cell is really expensive. What is more, the experiments is so far unsuccessful.



Conclusion:

1.水巷这篇综合错的词不多哈，恭喜啦，这个就不会影响得分的

2.细节都到位

2.要注意单复数的书写，这点婷婷也要重点注意一下~

易雨水巷

TPO11
The reading and the listening material both talk about modern people read less literature. The reading material asserts that read less literature is a trouble, while the professor in the listening material holds a definitely opinion. Besides, the professor also gives three concrete reasons.

To begin with, in light of the professor, the statement declaraed by the writer is really wrong that literature is the best intellectual stimulation. There are many modern cultures with a high quantity which are created to situmulate people's intelligence such as science writing, history and so on.

In addition, the professor expresses that reading less culture does not mean a culture decline. Watching music as well as movies is not a waste of time on low culture. What is more, it is not being created under a low culture standard. Modern culture has changed poems, novels and so on. This is another point where the listening casts doubts on the reading.

Last but the least, the writer holds the view that good writers today lack audiences. However, the professor disagrees with this idea. From her perspective, modern culture are more direct than literature does. People should not be too critical and in fact, more modern culture are difficult to understand.  

To sum up, the professor opposes the writer from three aspects.

易雨水巷

谢谢婷婷了 么个

jasonma2046

祝水巷考出好成绩！呵呵！