Alex达不到29就是无。节。操。。。

chasedreamabc

4.6综合

In the reading material, the author states that a group of people work more efficiently and effectively than a single person. In the listening section, however, the lecture says that team strategy have three defections as follows.

First, some people get a free-ride in the six months process, which means that they did not contribute to the project at all. Moreover, recognitions for the job are less than the reading material stated. The real contributors feel dissatisfied.

Second, the reading section says that a group can come up with highly creative solutions and work more quickly. In contrast, it takes a long time to reach consensus about how to deal with some problems. Once some influential people make bad comments of an idea, it would be dropped even though it is a good one. On the other hand, if influential people convince an idea is good even though other people warned that it may constitute detrimental elements to the whole project, the warn is ignored.

Finally, if the project is failed, the blame will be placed on all the members of the group, which is contrary to the reading material that taking part in a group process can be rewarding for members of the team.

In conclusion, the lecturer in the listening part clearly indentified the weakness in the reading passage that group process is rewarding and contributed to the whole team.

stones4

In the reading material, the author states that a group of people work more efficiently and effectively than a single person.我觉得这里最好不要用single person表示，用individual更合适 In the listening section, however, the lecture says that team strategy have has three defections as follows.

First, some people get a free-ride in the six months process, which means that they did not contribute to the project at all. Moreover, recognitions for the job are less than the reading material stated. The real contributors feel dissatisfied.这里听力的细节比较多，可以在补充说明一下。这里只提到其中一点，团队的性质就是不会在每个人身上贴标签之类的。其一段略显孱弱了

Second, the reading section says that a group can come up with highly creative solutions and work more quickly. In contrast, it takes a long time to reach consensus abouton how to deal with some problems. Once some influential people make bad comments of an idea, it would be dropped even though it is a good one. On the other hand, if influential people convince an idea is good even though other people warned that it may constitute detrimental elements to the whole project, the warn is ignored.

Finally, if the project is failed, the blame will be placed on all the members of the group, which is contrary to the reading material that taking part in a group process can be rewarding for members of the team.

In conclusion, the lecturer in the listening part clearly indentifiedidentified the weakness in the reading passage that group process is rewarding and contributed to the whole team.



我这里就不每段总结了，因为我也是前天才接触综合写作，实在没有什么资格提太多建议。

我就以听力和独立写作的角度来看这篇文章吧

听力的细节有些描写的很详细，有些没有提及，在段落分配的时候感觉很不平衡，有些段落，短短一个对比就结束了。要注意衔接的问题。

最后一段感觉有点多余。

总体来看，语法错误很少，句子也很流畅，这里我可以向你学习很多，

chasedreamabc

4.9 综合

The author of the reading passage points out three theories to try to explain the function of Chaco Canyon in New Mexico in the American Southwest. The lecture, however, argues in each of these theories.

The lecture indicates that fireplaces in these structures are in contradiction with the huge size of these houses, so these are out for living. But the reading passage holds that the Chaco structures were purely residential.

The second theory, the Chaco structures were used to store food supplies, is refute by the lecture. He says a place that had been used for storing maize would have many traces of scattered Maize. But no clue indicates that there was a granary.

Finally, the third theory of reading passage, the house was as ceremonial centers, is confuted by the lecture. Because the great houses do not offer sufficient proof that this was a place for ceremonial activities. He thinks the pots were probably used by construction workers upon completion of the great houses.

晨依Jacqueline

TPO5 综合修改~
The author of the reading passage points out three theories to try to explain the function of Chaco Canyon in New Mexico in the American Southwest. The lecture, however, argues in(with)each of these theories.

The lecture indicates that fireplaces in these structures are in contradiction withthe huge size of these houses, so these are out for living.(这个地方Alex可以再听一下，应该是内部结构反驳了居住理论。然后细节是：听力说fireplaces数量比较少，最大的一个巨屋只供十余户居住，但是空间供百余户住在Great Houses里面。) But the reading passage holds that the Chaco structures were purely residential.

The second theory, the Chaco structures were used to store food supplies, is refute(d) by the lecture. He says a place that had been used for storing maize would have many traces of scattered Maize. But no clue indicates that there was a granary(高级词汇，但是感觉好像不是特别合适呢~).

Finally, the third theory of reading passage, the house was as ceremonial centers, is confuted by the lecture(r). Because the great houses do not offer sufficient proof that this was a place for ceremonial activities. He thinks the pots were probably used by construction workers upon completion of the great houses.

偷偷告诉Alex一个小秘密，unlike独立写作，综合写作中在写listening的内容的时候尽量要用原文的表述，就是你听到什么就写什么，这样会显得你的水平灰常高，让ETS的评分员感觉你好像把听力的内容全都准确地记下来了~然后写reading的内容的时候，就换成同义表述，这样证明你都读懂了不是抄的原文。So我想说的就是Alex的文章里面有很多很高级的词汇，一定要用对地方哈~

What's more, 一定要尽可能地多多提供你听到的details来support，这一篇文章写得基本观点还OK，但是缺乏细节，当然啦这个细节主要还是考察我们的听力了~而且细节还可以充实一下你的文章字数，虽然ETS说的150-225words就够，但是还是多多益善呀！

In sum，我觉得Alex的开头还是不错的，语言表达也很流畅，听力部分可以再听听细节内容，提炼一下要点。继续加油咯~！

chasedreamabc

灰常感谢晨依同学的建议，确实是蛮重要的问题，总结经验，下一篇争取有所改进

chasedreamabc

TPO6 综合

In terms of the listening passage, the professor refutes the standpoints stated in the reading passage by presenting evidences to prove that it is biased and ignorant to judge online encyclopedias in the way the reading passage presents.

First, the professor claims that errors are inevitable for an encyclopedia, while those errors in online encyclopedias are even easier to be corrected. He maintains that traditional encyclopedias are far from entirely comprehensive, and it takes decades for expert to come up with a new version to correct the errors. From this perspective, the idea presents in the reading passage that online encyclopedias are more vulnerable to inaccuracies is untenable.

Second, the professor points out that there are effective strategies to protect the online encyclopedias from malicious changes like hacking. The strategies include the read-only format that prevents the users from fabricating information, and special controlled by experts to ensure that the crucial facts are reliable and that all changes to the articles are monitored. Therefore, the statement in the reading passage that hackers would tamper online encyclopedias cannot stand on its own.

Third, instead of worrying about excessive information, the professor states that a wide scope of information proves to be the strongest advantage of online encyclopedias. He holds that traditional encyclopedias lack the width of interest due to the confinement of experts who edit them. However, online encyclopedias not only include academic materials, but also reflect a great diversity of user’s interests. Such view renders the worry in the reading passage unnecessary.

In all, the professor contradicts the viewpoint in the reading passage in the abovementioned three aspects to demonstrate that online encyclopedias are not inferior to traditional ones.

gre呀gre

不好意思我刚到家，今天身体不太舒服，头疼的很，明天早上一定改你的作文，真不好意耽误了

gre呀gre

亲~ 你写好综合记得叫我哈~~~

miss绿光

对不住ABC，初次见面就给你添麻烦啦~我428考试，写的是JJ，今天的任务我之前就写过了，于是写了新的，结果发现是416了…我涉及到剧透了...所以我为了不打扰你写文章，我今天就先不发啦~ ^^

chasedreamabc

4.14 综合

The reading passage and the lecture suggest two different theories—a predation theory and a pollution theory, to explain why the sea otter population is in rapid decline



First，the reading passage points out the sea is polluted without doubt, which cause the death of sea otters. In contrast, the professor reasons that less death sea otters washed up the coast suggests that their decline is not caused by water pollution but rather by sea predators who consume sea otters’ bodies after killing them.



Second, the lecturer argues that orcas are likely factors in the dead of sea otters, because the scarcity of whales, their usual prey, has left them with no other choice but to start hunting smaller mammals such as the otters. The reading passage, on the other hand, Rules out this theory based on the orca's preying habit, and instead approves of the pollution theory as the only explanation for the decline op both large and small sea mammals across the entire ecosystem.

Last, according to the lecturer, the uneven pattern of sea otter decline corresponds to the distribution of the orcas. However, the reading passage argues that changeable environmental factors, which lead to different concentrations of pollutants, better explains the varying pattern of sea otter decline.