破个釜沉个舟，11.24要杀TTTTTT！！！！求狠狠劈！！

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linger0527 发表于 2013-10-27 16:24

谢谢小伙伴的批改~~~每一处都相当精彩及中肯~~looking forward the next time you come and correct my work!

linger0527

修一一 发表于 2013-10-27 16:39
谢谢小伙伴的批改~~~每一处都相当精彩及中肯~~looking forward the next time you come and correct my w ...

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People who develop many different skills are more successful than people who focus on one skill only.

We live in a world where knowledge is accumulated exponentially and at the same time become more and more specialized. Therefore, to be professional in a certain field today becomes gradually important. However, on no account should we ignore the status of people who possess different skills.

Specialists, who we all know are excel in one aspect such as science, art, sports and literature. There is no doubt that these people are supposed to concentrate on a subject rather than develop many other interests. Take NBA star Kobe Bryant as an example. Influenced by his father, Kobe started to play basketball when he was four years old and he showed a striking talent on it. After senior high school, in order to develop his basketball career, Kobe abandoned college life. During his 17 years career, he didn't try to learn something other but work hard every day. As he said:" you want to know why I am successful? I almost know about the look of LA every day.” he spared no effort to train, to play, and to win. He focused on only one skill but vastly amplified it. Until now, he is so successful that he has been wined 5 championship rings, which achieved by few person.

In another hand, there is increasing demand for generalists of our society. Lots of positions, especially administrators or managers need to be familiar with all aspects and develop many skills. It is conceivable that they don't have to learn a certain skill so deeply as specialists; all they need is to master it on shallow level. For instance, Steve Jobs, the former CEO of APPLE, is an outstanding manager. He knows some knowledge about electric principle, which are not as much as Wozniack did, he was familiar with art, from which he could design beautiful outlook of PC and telephone, and he understood how to manage and organize others' works. Based on such different skills, he could perform his ability in the area of IT and finally made a so great success---" have changed the world" as he claimed.

Nowadays, so many people have been successful depending on one certain skill and so many people also achieved their final goals as versatility generalists that we cannot judge which way is better. What we should do is to find out who we are. If you are a person who can concentrated on a subject but not likely to develop many skills, maybe you should go toward specialization and do your utmost to make a breakthrough. Probably you prefer to study some kinds of skill, and then you will be an excellent administrator. To sum up, as one of famous philosophers once said " Every man has its price", as long as you find out a suitable way, you will be succeed in the future.

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改好了~要是你觉得有什么不合理的地方和我说哦~

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Do you agree or disagree with the statement: In modern times, parents will learn more from children than children learn from parents?

We live in a world where science and education are speedy stimulated and at the same time more and more advanced. Therefore, children live in today’s society know more knowledge than those in the past and most parents are claiming that they can learn a lot from their children. However, is it reasonable that parent will learn more from children than children learn from parents? Actually, the knowledge children can learn from their parents are more than we can image.

In terms of life, so precious are parents’ experiences that children are supposed to learn them. Parents have lived more twenty years in this world than their children. As one of old saying” they pass by bridges than their children’s roads”, they have experienced so much that they completely know how to deal with some problems which their children are not able to solve perfectly. Take myself as an example: one year ago, I had an argument with my best friend about scholarship as we both have qualification to win it. I asked help to my father, and he said” let it go; on no account should you give up friendship for some money”. Later I did what my dad told me to do. Not until few months ago when that friend helped me with an important matter did I realized importance of my father’s words and I still have a far way to learn more from him.

Furthermore, speaking of health, parents know much more than their children. Due to colorful activities, young children often stay up late and eat lots of junk food, which are bad for their health. They should learn some good habits from their parents since parents have lived through young time and are familiar with ways to keep healthy.

Nowadays, admittedly, children are more talented to learn something novel such as computer, internet, and smart phone. They are able to master these equipments even without deliberately learning. On the other hand, most of their parents cannot use them easily. It is conceivable that parents call for help from their children in this area.

To sum up, even though parents don’t understand plenty of things and need to learn from children, they indeed have abundant experiences that children ought to learn. The old principle “Parents are best teachers” will never out of date.

wl441790417

改好啦～ 改得不好的地方多担待啊，不同意见最好拿出来讨论讨论哈，要不我也不知道哪些对哪些不对。

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wl441790417 发表于 2013-10-29 15:19
改好啦～ 改得不好的地方多担待啊，不同意见最好拿出来讨论讨论哈，要不我也不知道哪些对哪些不对。
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童鞋改滴很好，很细心~~谢谢啦~我也感觉我作文不大行，因为每次都要花1个半小时来写，不知道过后练练会不会有提高。你的建议不错~以后觉得有点chinglish的时候我就去google去搜搜哈哈~~~

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修一一 发表于 2013-10-29 16:05
童鞋改滴很好，很细心~~谢谢啦~我也感觉我作文不大行，因为每次都要花1个半小时来写，不知道过后练练会不 ...

恩的 我也是考完GMAT之后忘光光了 不太确定的就去google一下看看有没有类似的句子会在广告啦报告中啦出现的，会比较靠谱～