王大叔的作文贴

wanggang0411

9月5日 综合写作
TPO 30

The passage raises several reasons, such as the lack of technology and the impractical of the method, to challenge the truth of the story about 'burning mirror'. On the other hand, the lecture stands on the opposite side by referring following reasons:

To begin with, the lecture believes that the ancient Greeks were available to build a big mirror by combining several pieces of small copper surfaces together.

Second, because it takes at least 10 minutes to set the wood on fir, the passage concerns that such method would be impractical and ineffective. On this point, the lecture refers a new found that the ship built by ancient Rome were not only by wood but also my another material named "Pitch" which could be on fire by "burning mirror" just in a second, no matter the ship was moving or not.

Finally, to explain why the Greeks army was more prefer the "burning mirror" rather than traditional weapon, the lecture says that the Rome army were already familiar with this weapon, and could deal with it sophisticatedly. Therefore, compared with flaming arrows, the "burning mirror" is more difficult to be defended by Rome.

iammuse

wanggang0411 发表于 2013-9-7 17:05
9月5日 综合写作
TPO 30

不好意思，刚改好。这几天事情太多耽误了。不好意思

wanggang0411

9月6日 独立写作 感觉越写越困难啊, 不知道写什么, 也不知道怎么写.

Young people today more likely to give time and effort improving the world than young people were at the past.  

When I was young, thanks to my parents, Igot the awareness to improve the environment of my society and even the world,but by the reasons such as poverty and low living standard, I couldn't makethis awareness in practice on that time. Therefore, when I saw such questionwhether young people today are more likely to give time and effort improvingthe world, I believe, for sure, the environment today could give them morechance to do better than me 30 years ago.

To begin with, education plays a key roleon the development of young people. Thanks to abound of resources such as teachersand schools, the quality of education today is higher than that in the past.Thus young people could be educated to be aware of social responsibility. Mynephew, a 12 years old boy, gets such awareness in the school, and then worksas a volunteer to help elders who has no relative around them. In contrast, Ididn't get such idea when I was at the same age, because nobody taught me the importantto help others or improve the society.

Furthermore, living standard plays anotherimportant part on this topic. When I was young, living standard was quite lowin my country, bread earning is high priority, not only adults but alsochildren need to contribute their effort to earn bread for the family.Therefore, even if I got the awareness of improving the world, the economics ofmy family didn't allow me to spend much time on such fair.

Besides education and economic, thetechnology today, such as internet and broadcasting media, gives great help tolet young people know this world. For example, they could not only familiarwith the environment of their daily life, but also acknowledge that there isstill poverty in this world. How could they get this vision? By TV and socialmedia. And then through internet, they could find what and how they could do tohelp the poor people in this world. In contrast, it was quite difficult for thepeople in my country 20 years ago to do the same.

From what have been discussed above, Icould easily and confidently draw the conclusion that young people today getmore chance to understand this world and then to give time and effort toimprove it.

wanggang0411

9月6日 综合写作 TPO1

The passage believes the mandatory policyof four-day workweek could benefit many sides, individual, company and even theeconomics of the country. However, the lecture stands on the opposite side by referringfollowing reasons.

To begin with, four-day workweek policyenforces the company to hire more employees, and more employees means morecost. Because the costs of insurance and office rent are same no matter theemployees working for four days or five days, the company need to spend much more bysuch policy, not even mention the training fees for new comers and the additionalcost for more office spaces and computers.

In addition, it’s quite reasonable tospeculate that by the reason of increasing cost, most of companies will enforcetheir employees work overtime, and expect the working quality of four daysworker as same as that of five days. And, in turn, the working environmentcould be much harsher.

On the other hand, four-day workweek couldrisk the career of employees, because short working time could decrease theirworking ability. Furthermore, those who work four days a week are more likelyto lose their job during the recession, and have less possibilities to beraised as higher level like manager, because most companies prefer people whocould supervise the daily work for whole week rather than just four days.

wanggang0411

9月7日独立写作

In the past young people are more dependedon their parents in making decision. Today, young people are better able tomake decisions in their own lives.

When I was in the high school, I made thedecision by myself to go to campus. After graduated from university, I Alsomade my own decision whether to keep studying in the campus or to start mycareer. Therefore, when I see such question whether young people today or thosein the past are more likely to choice their future by themself, I stand on theside of today's young people.

To begin with, 30 years ago, there waslimited choice for my parents' generation, because the living standard wasquite low at that time, so everybody need to start work as soon as possible torelieve the financial pressure of the whole family. So these young people whowant to keep studying in the school or join university were forced to give uptheir dream. In contrast, in my generation, thanks to the improvement ofeconomics of the whole country, there is no such heavy financial pressure inthe family, so young people could have more choice to decide their way.

In addition, by the improvement of technology,young generation are more likely to receive the information from different areas.Therefore, the creative and innovative idea could be cultivated and sprung farearlier than people in the past. From the news I just read few days ago, thereis a 14 years teenager in American who get all information about nuclear frominternet and finally created a reaction equipment in the garage! And that'sevent results in the decision that he want to become a nuclear scientist in thefuture. However, such things are completely un-imaged 30 or 40 years ago.

On the other hand, young people in several decades’years ago, rarely had many ways to know the world beyond their society. That'sexplained why most of young people decided to follow the career of theirparents or follow the decision made by older generation. Just as my father, hefollowed the decision of my grandfather to work as an accountant which is quiteun-preferred for himself. And now, he encouraged me to chase my own dream to dosomething I could really engage in.

From everything discussed above, I couldconfidently draw the conclusion that young people nowadays have more chancethan older generations to make their own decision.

wanggang0411

9月7日 综合写作 TPO2

The passage supports the idea that merginga group of people to work as a team could do better job than people worksindependently. However, the lecture stands on the opposite side, and followingis the reason:

To begin with, from a investigation of ateam working project which has already operated for 6 months, the professor inthe lecture found that people who worked free riding received as same rewardingas those worked contributed a lot in this project. Therefore, the morale ofthese real contributors have been deeply harmed.

In addition, the progress of this projectis extremely slow, because it takes too long to make consensus among the wholeteam. Even worse, there are some influential people who could easily dropothers ideas, and make the whole discussion again. Therefore, it is not thewhole team guiding the project, but these influential people decide the destinyof the project.

Finally, it will not be surprised that therisky and even the right decision could be easily ignored by the team, and whenthe whole project sailed in a wrong way, not only some unqualified people butalso the whole team will be blamed.

iammuse

wanggang0411 发表于 2013-9-8 21:35
9月7日 综合写作 TPO2

The passage supports the idea that merginga group of people to work as a team  ...

改好啦：）

wanggang0411

iammuse 发表于 2013-9-8 22:42
改好啦：）

谢谢啦, 建议都很好, 我明天写的时候一定改!

sherlock1992

童鞋，我9.7日的独立还在等着你呢。。。http://forum.chasedream.com/thread-836006-13-1.html

wanggang0411

9月8日 独立
School always collect information of the teaching performance of teachers and according to it, give teacher who has efficient  teaching rewards. So which is more useful: evaluation by students or by other teachers?  
正文
When I was in the campus, I had to fill the teaching performance form for each course I had taken. And to be frankly, the information delivered from my side was contaminated by personal preference and even the emotion, positive and negative. Therefore, when I see this question about who is more objective to evaluate the performance of teachers, as an adult I believe teachers themselves are more qualified to evaluate each other’s performance.

To begin with, I could still remember a course I took named chemistry. Because I was and I am quite not engaged in this course, and believe such knowledge has no benefit for my future to become business man, so I ranks the performance correspondingly lower at the end of the term. However, now as an audlt with objective vision, I really want to say sorry to this teacher, because he encouraged me many times when I felt frustrated and bored in this class, and he really did a good job.

In contrast, there was another course named 'Business management' in which I was extremely interesting, and I got a very high score at the final exam, so it was not surprised that I ranked his education performance very high. However, when I recall the whole term of studying this class, actually the teacher was absent many times because he had so many personal business need to deal with, and he rarely took care his students seriously. The only reason he gave me a good score was not because I studied well, but because he wanted to be ranked higher.

Therefore, after many years seriously consideration, I believe teachers rather than student could evaluate each other usefully and objectively. First, since they are professional on teaching, teachers know their job, such as what is good for students and what is not. Secondly, as adults, they are less inclined to be impacted by personal preference or emotion, because whether they are majoring on the specific field will not impact their decision-making power.

Admittedly, some people would say that it is the students who join the class, experience the class, and benefit from the class, thus, students should be the people evaluating the teaching performance, because they know what they learned from class. However, I believe before we make the judgment, other factors, just as examples I mentioned above, should be considered.

Thus, from what have been discussed I could confidently draw the conclusion that it's too arbitrary to say that students are better than teachers to evaluate teaching performance.