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OG1:

People attend college or university for many different reasons(for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

“Why should people go to college?” - It’s a question which might be rarely asked in my homeland China. When I look back into the past years in college, the answer seems obvious: I gained knowledge, made new friends and explored, with self-doubt and struggle, what are things I truly want in my life. But like most people I know, I didn’t actually decide to go to college, I were sent there, by my teachers and my parents. And I believe it’s the common situation for most of the high school kids in China: We never had the choice.

We were told, at a very young age, that college is the only place you can get the qualification for your jobs in future. Without high education people can only find easy manual jobs like washing dishes and sweeping the street. It’s not true and I can give hundreds of examples to prove it. But absurd as it might seems, we did believe this lie at that certain age in which we know nothing but doing piles of homework and hoping to obtain a good score for entering a college with better reputation.

It’s not hard to figure out the reason why Chinese parents hold opinions like that. -They were unsure and even scared just like we were. Although they might also be aware of the fact that a diploma is not a must for success and happiness, they still want to choose a safest way for their children. (in most cases their only child) You can not necessarily make a fortune with 4 years’ study in the university, but it ensures you a life of certainty: a job with average salary, a husband or a wife just as ordinary as you are, and, in proper time, a baby and worries along with it. Since parents have the supreme authority in the asian culture, children can not fight against their decision or more pathetically, not even give a thought to it.

此段纯粹写作时有感而发，可以略过不看
(When I came to Germany and pursued my further study, I noticed the difference immediately. - German students love what they study. The education system here provides a wide range of choices: They can study seemingly useless theories in university or get specific vocational training from local companies. And most important, the social security system guarantees that they can live an average life even though they take up “easy manual jobs like washing dishes and sweeping the street”.)

The reason why people attend college is not a simple question as it may seems. It reflects the state of mind of the whole country. I hope one day young people in China can choose their own path of life and not afraid of making mistakes. And when they become parents of their own children, they could tell them, proudly, those mistakes they’ve made and say: I never regret it. （这一段……哎，感觉深受多年来写作教育的荼毒，到结尾就忍不住想把立意拔高一下，不知道是否符合托福的要求）

彻彻底底的托福新人一个，写作一直属于弱项，自我感觉词汇量虽然不小，但能用到笔下的积极词汇却少得可怜。看了OG和十天突破，觉得练习最好的方法还是不断地写和改。所以希望大家能多多指点，本人感激不尽。