【感恩CD】一向死在作文上的新人求各位CDer狠批！！望共同进步

花生张

我是4月份考，在CD上收获了很多很有用的经验，被很多热心的分享经验和资料的CDer感动，以前考雅思作文6分，深受打击，现在转考托福，希望作文不要再拉后腿，所以在此求各位狠批，与大家在互改的过程中共同进步（真心希望自己以后也能帮别人修改作文==）
这是我根据无老师的屠龙分类练的前2篇，这几天刚开始练，希望自己能慢慢进步~

1 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Letting a friend make a mistake is better than saying or doing something that may destroy your friendship.

I definitely believe that a friend in need is a friend in deed, what’s more, what makes a good friend is someone who is honesty and helpful. So when my friend made any mistakes, there is no doubt that I would try to help her to correct her error.

The first reason why I think it’s my duty to give her a hand at the cost of destroy our friendship is that my friend would be able to learn from right. Take myself as a example, i have a friend who is very intelligent and she feel such proud of herself that she believe she would not do any thing wrong. It was in my senior high school when we were doing our math homework together in my room, we argued about a difficult math question, she insisted on her answer was right but i did not agree with her as I still remember what the teacher said about that kind of questions, then she became extremely out of sorts and yowl at me that she never made any mistake. But lastly, i was proved to be right. Our friendship became better instead of destroyed.

Furthermore, if you don’t tell your friend that he is doing something wrong, then he will be misguided much further. For example, your friend has been cheated by others into doing something illegal, if you are afraid to prevent him because you do not want to hurt him, your friend would lose more than his face when he is in the prison one day.

Admittedly , there may be some exceptions, for instance, your friend may think he has losen face and do not want to make friends with you. However, i think the major reason is you did not take the proper action or use the proper words that is acceptable for your friends. As long as we can avoid to bring shame on our friends, your friendship will not be influenced and even get closer.

In this case, I strongly disagree that letting my friends make mistakes instead of taking steps to correct him that may destroy our friendship, hence I believe that the true friend should be honesty and helpful.

花生张

这是第二篇
2 do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to make friends with intelligent people than with people who have a good sense of humor. (P老美 40页，Topic62)

There is no denying that friends make a extremely significant part no matter in our daily life or on our way to be success. Thus ,choosing friends who is intelligent and outstanding will be more helpful than those who just have a good sense of humor.

To begin with,it is of more benefit to have a merit friend, since people’s achievement is closely related to the people around them. The reason is twofold. On the one hand, your friends will influence you in various aspects, such as the way to think and solve problems. By getting along with brilliant people, you will also getting into kinds of good habits, for example, you may make better use of your leisure time. On the other hand, there is no one but have the ability to accomplish everything by himself. Sometimes we need partners to cooperate with, in other times we hope for several experienced suggestion. Then ,our intelligent friends will be the suitable persons. In that case, people who make friends with merit people are more likely to be success.

In addition, the reason why we need friends is that nobody want to be alone and chatting with friends makes us feel happy. It is conceivable that your life would become more colorful and have much fun with those charming friends. The first reason is that intelligent people often have a variety of interests, for instance, sometimes they may go hiking or clam the mountain, while in other times they may just stay at home reading. what’s more, opposite to the humorous people who are just good at tell jokes and make funny, when you are in trouble, your friends will cheer you up and empower you with good mood and energy for future work.

Admittedly, the humorous people will make you laugh and get rid of sadness, when you stay with the humorous people, we do not have to think much about our work or studying and feel relaxing. However, the benefit can be also gained as the intelligent people will also be humorous, they know better about when to tell joke and when they should be serious.

In sum, there may be one or two advantages of having a humorous friends, I still feel that the advantages of making friends with intelligent people are more obvious as not only they are fascinating but also they are helpful in future career.

花生张

求各位给点意见啊啊啊啊啊。。。。。。

超级无敌小鹤鹤

这儿没有专门的批改老师，大家都只是托福备考者，只有在自己有多余时间的情况下才会有可能帮你批改，所以写自己作文的同学很可能很久都得不到批改。。建议加入小分队，写小分队的题目，这样可以每天帮你安排作文互改者。。

超级无敌小鹤鹤

http://forum.chasedream.com/TOEFL_Writing/thread-821378-1-1.html#last
建议可以和这位同学互改'

花生张

超级无敌小鹤鹤 发表于 2013-3-20 09:17
这儿没有专门的批改老师，大家都只是托福备考者，只有在自己有多余时间的情况下才会有可能帮你批改，所以写 ...

soga~我是第一次加入作文小分队。。。不知道有统一的题目==  我去逛逛~