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In this day and age, finding a job is getting harder and harder, especially for the newly graduated college students. According to the latest statistics from Chinese Education Department, only 24% of the bachelor graduates of the year 2012 could find a job that lasts more than 3 months immediately after their graduation, while 48% of them could find a job but got fired less than 3 month. Why so many university students, who have been educated for more than 15 years and are supposed to have the privilege in employment, confront such a frustration that everyone has not expected? As far as I am concerned, it is the college and universities that should be blamed. If they had offered students better job preparation before they start working, this problem could be solved much more easily. 这样的开头蛮新鲜的哦。现象解释法。











To begin with, job preparation for college students can get them some real world experience, thus making them more competitive in the labor market. Indeed, I have interviewed some recruiters from big companies on what they care most about candidates, and the answer was neither education background nor intelligence, but rather experience. If the candidate has previous experience, he knows what exactly he is going to do, so he can undertake this job right away. All he needs is a little adjustment. Besides, the employer can save lots of money from training. Therefore, if colleges and university can provide students intern opportunities or find (这里find表示啥意思呢？)them some practical projects, students can get valuable experience and earn the edges they need before working. 中心句写的真漂亮。











Furthermore, job preparation during college can help students find the right path to their future career. If a student knows more about what his job will be like and what he is going to do at work, he can figure out whether his major is a right choice. Subsequently, he can set specific goals towards the future job and make detailed plans, which will benefit him in both academic performance and future career. Unfortunately, universities and colleges in China nowadays do not pay enough attention on job preparation. As a result, many bachelors choose to have further study in order to change their majors when they cannot find an ideal job after graduation, not to mention only less than 30% graduates are doing jobs concerning their majors.











In summary, when students starting finding jobs, there is always a considerable gap between what they picture in mind and the reality, since they are not well prepared as they thought. Thus, to better help students overcome those adversities, universities and colleges should take the responsibility of job preparation











这文章写的真地道啊。语言很优美。这文章肯定good了。拼写啦都很完美。考试的时候冲刺满分哦。如果可以字数再加点哦，争取上500呢。

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Vanessa，我看到你也写过TPO18的独立，就麻烦你先帮我看下这篇吧～我会在晚些时候把TPO4放上来～～谢谢哈
TPO 18

In the lecture, the professor does not agree with what is claimed in the reading passage. Actually, the professor holds the view that none of the three options in the reading passage is a satisfactory answer. The reasons are as follows:

First of all, the original location cannot be the propitious place for the Torreya any more, since the coolest, dampest areas of the microclimate are easily intervened. Indeed, the microclimate can be greatly influenced by the climate of outer larger regions. Maybe global warming has raised the temperature all over the world, or the near wetland has been drained. All those events can lead to a drier microclimate, in which the Torreya can no longer survive as it used to.

Secondly, the professor uses the black nokes（没听出来瞎写的）trees as an adverse example to illustrate her point. Like Torreya, the black nokes was once in danger and was transplanted to another location. However, the new species grew really fast in its new home and as a result, killed many other plants, some of which were even in danger. Bringing a new species may bring about unexpected outcomes.

Lastly, if Torreya trees are preserved in research center, they cannot grow into large population. Thus, they cannot develop the ability to resist disease. In the long run, without large population and diverse climate, they will be defeated by disease and die out finally.



听这篇文章的时候新介绍的树名不知道怎么拼，Torreya的单复数也搞不清，问题比较多。还想请教个问题，如果综合写的超过了225字，是好还是不好呢？

vanessa923

黄亮精彩，红色错误，蓝色建议。
In the lecture, the professor does not agree with what is claimed in the reading passage. Actually, the professor holds the view that none of the three options in the reading passage is a satisfactory answer（个人建议直接就说satisfactory）. The reasons are as follows:

First of all, the original location cannot be the propitious place for the Torreya any more, since the coolest, dampest areas of the microclimate are easily intervened. Indeed, the microclimate can be greatly influenced by the climate of outer larger regions. Maybe global warming has raised the temperature all over the world, or（and） the near wetland has been drained. All those events can lead to a drier microclimate, in which the Torreya can no longer survive as it used to.（其实你这段话写得很好，可是我读完不知道哪个是文章观点，哪个是教授观点，教授又是如何反驳的。所以必要的限定是需要的，你可以看看综合范文怎么写的。）

Secondly, the professor uses the black nokes（没听出来瞎写的）trees as an adverse example to illustrate her point. Like Torreya, the black nokes was once in danger and was transplanted to another location. However, the new species grew really fast in its new home and as a result, killed many other plants, some of which were even in danger. （Thus，）Bringing a new species may bring about unexpected outcomes.

Lastly, if Torreya trees are preserved in research center, they cannot grow into large population. Thus, they cannot develop the ability to resist disease（s）. In the long run, without large population and diverse climate, they will be defeated by disease and die out finally.

建议再加个结尾哦。
第三点和第一点一样的问题。
树名是blacklocust。
综合多余225无所谓，主要是把重点说清楚，条理清晰就好。

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1月4号综合～～拖了这么久才发，不好意思啊
TPO4
In the lecture, the professor refutes the idea that dinosaurs were endotherms. She also claims that not one of the three reasons stated in the reading passage is convincing.

First of all, the dinosaur fossils found in Polar Regions cannot prove that they were endotherms, because the Polar Regions were much warmer when they lived there----even warm enough for the animals that were not endotherms to live. Also, the polar dinosaurs might have migrated to places warmer when the weather got cold, or they could just hibernate like many other reptiles. Thus, the dinosaurs might not be able to maintain a constant temperature to protect themselves from frigidity. In this way, they were not endotherms.

Second, their leg position and movement cannot be used as evidence, because supporting more weight for the dinosaurs may be another explanation. If the position of their legs was just underneath their bodies, they could gain more weight and then grow into a larger size. Obviously, larger size had many advantages, so there is no need for the idea of being endotherms.

Third, although Haversian canals did exist, the growth rings of dinosaur's bone structure showed that dinosaurs grew slower when the weather became cooler. Genuine endotherms still grow rapidly during colder period. However, dinosaurs would grow less rapidly, or even not grow any more when the weather changed. Therefore, dinosaurs were not endotherms.

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A person’s job has more effects on his or her happiness than this person’s social life does.


How do people define happiness? Some of them equate happiness with a satisfactory job, and some others think that the more money they earn, the happier they are. Nevertheless, as far as I am concerned, happiness has nothing to do with jobs or money, but is closely related to people’s social life. Therefore, I strongly support the view that social life has more effects on a person’s happiness than job does.

To begin with, social life makes people happy because it makes them relax, whereas work often gives them considerable pressure. Unlike working with colleagues, who gather in an office with explicit purpose----to finish their work in time, hanging out with friends means they can chat, make jokes, play games or do some sports, all wonderful activities that make people release from a whole day’s work. Take my uncle Joey for example. He is a doctor with extremely high salary and prestigious social status. However, when he is at work, he always feels nervous or exhausted. All he desires is to spend some quality time with his friends at a bar after work. He tells me without hesitation that his social life obviously makes him happier than his job does.

Moreover, when people confront some difficulties or bewilderment at work, they need to talk with their friends and become happy again in their social life. In fact, work is fraught with challenges and adversities. Sometimes, people are not brave enough to deal with all the thorny things at work alone. Sometimes people lose confidence in themselves and need to be encouraged. And sometimes people spin like a top at an intersection and need some advice to find the right path. Then, it is time for friends to show up and help them to pull through the dark moment.

In addition, if people make an achievement at work, they have to share the success with friends or families so that they can feel happy. In other words, it is the congratulations from others or the celebrations with friends in social life that make them happy. It feels miserable if someone has no opportunity to share the joy in social life. For example, in my first employed year, I once got the award of “the best new employee”. I was quite thrilled, and the first thing occurred to me was to call my friend, who had consoled me and made me believe in myself again during a tough time. Yet I was exceedingly disappointed when I found I could not reach her at that time, even though I got the reward.

In summary, social life is so indispensable in making people happy that it is the source of joy in people’s life. Different from jobs, social life makes people relax, cheers people up in their setbacks, and passes one’s successful news to others, thus making people happy. As long as people can still keep in touch with friends, they can conquer as many trials and tribulations as they want to.

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To increase economic growth, government can neglect environmental concerns.



Over centuries, numerous claims about economic growth and the environmental concerns have been made. Some people think economic growth should take priority over environmental problems, believing that economic growth is indispensable in whatever circumstances. Nevertheless, as far as I am concerned, environmental problems have become so severe in the past a few years that we cannot neglect them anymore. Indeed, environmental problems have significantly compromised our life today.



To begin with, environmental problems are drastically damaging people's health. As we all know, air and water are basic requirements for us human beings. However, air and water pollution is increasing sharply every day. It is hard for us to live as healthily as we used to due to the serious pollution. Take my family for example. We used to live in an industry city called Langfang in China. But several years ago, my mom was diagnosed with asthma because of the contaminated air in Langfang. As a result, my family had to move to another city with a better air condition, or my mom might get into really dangerous health situations. There is no doubt that millions of people on earth are suffering from all kinds of diseases caused by environment pollution.



Moreover, environmental problems have posed a threat to our survival. Currently, deteriorating environmental problems such as soil degradation, deforestation, and species extinction are sounding the warning bell to all human kinds. Especially, global warming is the most catastrophic event that is impending gradually. With the temperature all over the world rising every day, the melting ice sheets in the Arctic and the Antarctic have put the civilization of human race in danger, since one day, the ascending ocean will swallow our continents and destroy everything.



Additionally, people cannot boost the economy with such serious environmental problems. In other words, a good environment is the prerequisite of economic growth. Will enterprises establish their office buildings in a place with extremely bad air condition? Will investors invest their money in a city that has been demolished by land degradation? Obviously, the answer is no. Focusing on economic growth and ignoring environmental concerns will definitely lead people to a dead end road.



To sum up, it is time for us human beings to face the reality and examine the harm we have done to our planet and of course, to ourselves. If we keep pretending unaware of the fragile situation of the environment and make no effective remedies, the nightmare will finally come true.

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It is impossible to be completely honest with your friends all the time.


Whether we should be completely honest with our friends all the time has aroused considerable controversy. Some people claim that complete honesty is the foundation of friendships, whereas others regard complete honesty as impossible, holding the view that all people need some privacy and personal space. As far as I am concerned, total honesty is not only terrible but also impossible, since there are always some obstacles getting in our way when we are trying to be honest.


First of all, privacy is a necessity in our social life because everyone has some deep secrets that he or she does not want others to find out. When we look back in the past, we will inevitably find some bad memories or horrible experiences that we do not want to remember. Maybe it is about a failure in business, or about a heart-broken relationship. If we have to be complete honest with friends, we have to tell them the miserable story at least one more time, recalling the dark moment and falling in the bad mood again. And that is not what our friends look forward to. Instead, as some people that really care about us, friends should help us forget those memories and make sure the deep secrets will not hurt our feelings again. In this case, complete honesty should be avoided if we do not want to recall the past.


Secondly, in certain situations, we should tell our friends some white lies, for the truth may hit them in the face and make them lose the final faith. I still remember 2 years ago, one of my grandma's friends got really sick. When we went to visit her in the hospital, the doctor told us that she got cancer and was in extremely bad health condition. So my grandma agreed with the doctor and decided not to tell her friend the real situation, because she did not want her friend to fall into desperation. At that time, I realized that sometimes white lies are far better than telling the truth.


Additionally, at times, keeping other’s secrets is a demand so we cannot be complete honest with our friends. In fact, there are always some things we have promised others that we will not tell. For example, we may have signed a contract to keep business secrets at work. Or, we may have made a deal with one of our friends and promised her not to spill the beans to my other friends.


In summary, although honesty plays a vital role in friendship, it is impossible to be complete honest with our friends, for sometimes we need to keep a little bit privacy and not to go back to a bad experience. And for other situations, telling the truth can be too cruel and a white lie can help our friends better handle the thorny things in their lives.

e23lzh

文章写得真好，来学习了。

e23lzh

Happiness那篇，仔细拜读了，写的真好。word文档里面有我的一点批注，没什么太多的建设性意见，因为水平实在有限。一起学习共同进步吧。

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1月20号独立
Which way do you think is the best for a student to make new friends?
a. join a sports team,
b. participate in community activities,
c. traveling


How do students make new friends? Some of them believe that joining a sports team is a good choice, while others regard participating in community activities as a wonderful method. However, as for me, making new friends in travel is a terrific opportunity that I will never miss.



First of all, travel companies can easily become friends because they need each other for help. During a trip, especially when someone is travelling alone, there is no doubt that he will need some help sooner or later, for it can be a wholly new environment, where is fraught with uncertainties. If this is the case, the one he resorts for help is highly likely to become his new friend. Take myself for example. I once traveled to a little town in Sichuan by myself. Unfortunately, I lost my way and could not find the hotel I had booked. So I asked a passenger, who happened to be an earnest girl, for help. She not only helped me find my way, but also became my guide, and accompanied me to several places of interest in that town. Undoubtedly, we became friends and have kept in touch ever since. Had I not traveled to that town, I could not have met one of my best friends, which would have become a big loss for me.



Moreover, it is easy to make new friends during a trip, since people have plenty of time to talk with each other when they are on the way. In fact, the time we spend on transportations takes a significant part of our travel. Before we get to our destination, we have to take planes, trains, and buses. Therefore, talking with the passengers sit beside us is a good way to kill time. Friendship can be forged easily after a pleasant conversation. I still remember last time I took a train in travel, Ian, the boy sitting next to me, became my friend, because we kept talking all the way to the final station and found out that we had lots of hobbies in common.



Last but not least, travel can contribute to friendship owing to the beautiful memories that people had during the trip. When people are on a trip, they have no pressure but a relaxed mood. Unloading their defense and burden, even people with bad tempers can become friendly and easy-going. Isn’t it a perfect time to make friends?



To sum up, I strongly recommend students to make new friends while travelling, since they have the need, the time, and even the mood. In turn, travel will be full of surprise and happiness when we open our hearts to unexpected encounters. Maybe, our future friends are waiting for us at the next station.