求狠批，求互改

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今天开始写作之旅，求狠批，求互改。跟上小分队的节奏。每天写一篇综合和独立。加油！

18  December
Independent Writing:在家工作好, 还是去公司工作好？( some people prefer to work at home while others would rahter work in an company, which one would you like?)
Integrated Writing: TPO 13

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TPO13综合

In the lecture, the professor states that even though same negative consequence of selling fossils in the commercial market, the benefits outweighs the disadvantages. And the professor casts doubt on the reading passage by offering specific points.

First of all, according to the professor in the listening, the public exposes to the fossils a lot, since people can see a lot of fossils during fossil selling. And the school and constitution can buy some fossils in the market to store them to see. However, this directly challenges the statement demonstrated in the reading that the public have less access to the fossils thus they lose interesting in fossils.

Furthermore, the speaker argues that the scientists have a lot of time to learn to valuable fossils since before selling the fossils in the commercial market, the scientists indentified the fossils and they can tell the details of fossils and examine the valuable information. Fossils sold in the market passed through the hand of scientists. This makes the statement in the reading passage indefensible that scientists may lose some access to important fossils and miss out vital discoveries of some fossils.

Finally, the lecturer points out that some damage may occurs during the excavation by private collectors. But when many undiscovered fossils in the location run by scientists, they cannot discover so many of them. The damaged fossils are good for scientific uses than the fossil completely undiscovered in the underground. This contradicted the argument in the reading passage.

In sum, the speaker totally disagrees with the argument in the reading passage and she uses three specific points to weaken the statement.

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TPO13综合总结，在软件上写的。 能在规定时间写完。但是问题多多。
首先对阅读的内容理解不到位，导致听力点也跟不上。首先在3分钟的阅读中要总结出作者各个论点是什么用中文写出来吧，你的英文表达不都。三分钟一定要利用好，不然你对整个文章都很难把握。更别人听力中理解。你的听力本来就是弱了，听力的理解更抓不准。
听力还是听不出来，改怎么办呢？把每个综合的拼音听写下来吗？参考了晨依的作法，可以把听力的音频听写出来。每篇找出听力的对应点吧。看了文本感觉不难，但是为什么听力在现场不能听出来的呢。

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独立的：
The last decades have witnessed the diversity of working style all over the world. Employees in some larger companies are allowed to decorate working place as what they like. Some people even just work at home, the namely SOHO people. Thus the discussion of work place arouses a lot of attention. Those who object to work at home argue that the team work will be affected when the employees work at home. But people, who advocate working at home, on the other hand, argue that working at home using computers or telephones will make work more efficient. I am of the opinion that working at home using computer or telephones benefits a lot of us.

First of all, working at home using computers or telephones enable the employees to make a flexible arrangement of their work. Employees can choose the most efficient time to work and thus the working efficiency will be raised. Since people will not be distributed when working at home and concentrate on their work. They will think deeply about their job and create some novelty ideas of their work. According to a survey by an advertising company, 90% percent of people like working at home. The advertising company does an experiment of their employees working at home. The result of the experiment shows that people can accomplish their job in 3days that used to work in a week. And the employees can create more novelty ideas than before.

In addition, working at home will save a lot of time. Since people do not go to the company every day. They do not spend much time on the road to the working office. As we know, people spend two or three hours on the road to the working office. If people work at home, they can use more time to their work. Working at home facilitate people make good use of time. For example, my uncle used to work for the IT Company, every day he spent three hours on driving between work office and home. But now he works at home using the computer and telephone, he can make use of time to contract other employees to discuss job more carefully.

Moreover, working at home gives the environment an advantage over working at the office. Since there is less commuting, which is to blame for the air pollution .Because diesel particle levels in vehicle used for commuting were five to eight times higher than the air around them, but if more and more people work at home, there are fewer private cars on the road. The environment is way better.

In conclusion, working at home using computers and telephones gives many advantages for us and benefits a lot for the environment. More and more people like working at home.

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19 December
Independent Writing: Agree or disagree? Your job has more effect on your happiness than your social life does.
Integrated Writing:TPO14
今天要争取把19号的也写了才能跟上小分队的步骤哦。加油写吧。

vanessa923

亲。我19的写过了，所以明天打算贴上18的作文。嗯见谅！

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19号的独立
Happiness, one thing that Aristotle defined as intrinsic value for everyone, is pursuit by everyone for the whole life. It is indisputable that everyone wishes to be happy every day. What elements make us happy, the jobs or social life with friends and families? Some people believe that the jobs determine happiness everyday. But others are convinced that social life plays an important role on happiness. I, given the chance, prefer to endorse that social life make people happier than the jobs.



First of all, social life involved time with family, which is the basic of a person's happiness. Happiness derives from harmony with family and living in a harmony family enables people to be happy everyday. The reason is that when we live in a harmony family we often get help from family members and share joy and tear with family members. For instance, when spending fixed time with family every day, I can talk about everything happened in daytime with my family. The discussion helps me to find solutions to my problems happened in the daytime, thus increasing my happy to some extent. Sitting together to enjoy tasteful dishes with my dad and mom, playing online games with my brother and sharing recent anecdote with sister all make me happy. Every time I spent time with my family, I felt happy from deep inside, which cannot be acquired outside home, for example, job.



Furthermore, happiness comes from enjoying social life with our friends, which enrich our spare time. During the interaction in social life, people can make many new friends with numerous people with same interesting. With the same interesting will bring much happiness to us. For instance, I always go out with my friends for fun. We go hiking, swimming, skiing and so forth. My friends and I even found a bicycle team to ride a bike every weekend to release pressure from work. Doing this sport make me happy and improve my healthy. Thus social life with friends is the source of happiness.



Admittedly, our job could also create happiness at certain circumstance. We will be happy by the new that the bosses raise our salary because we just stay late to accomplish a project, which makes a big deal for the company. However, we can’t ignore the negative side that we’re suffering considerable pressure from work, which is extremely awful for our health. Thus, all of the above joyfulness does not come from the job itself, but the harvest at the cost of high pressure and long time to stay up late or all night. Therefore, the transient pleasure is far less than the pain people are experiencing.



After ruminating all those factors above, I hold a viewpoint that our social life does have influenced our happiness more than our jobs, despite jobs do an occasional favor as well.

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20号的独立写作，没有限时写。左想想，右想想才出来的。20号的综合贴在后面


The internet and social media have brought us the news of young people helping others. We are informed everyday that the teenagers in high school found a tutor centre for primary school students, that the business school students hold a donation event to improve the level of medical care for senior citizen in the rural area, and that many graduates relinquish high pay in the cities to teach in the rural areas. All these new tell us that young people today are more willing to help others. There are many factors to explain for the phenomenon.

First of all, education teenagers received today has played a vital role on young people’s growth, thus increasing the awareness of helping others. In primary school children learned that helping others can make them to be popular guys. For instance, in my country, teachers usually told the story of Lei Feng, who was always willing to help others, to students and used him as a model to encourage children to help others. Thus, many young people firmly built the sense of helping others during their growth .However, hundreds years ago, people didn’t get enough education when they were children. As a result, when they grow up they weren’t more likely to help the other people. Thanks to the society development, today most countries in the world have taken more and more attentions to public education. Public education, such as elementary education, can teach young people how to be a good person. Helping each other is one of the most important behaviors that teachers need their students to learn. So it is more likely that young people will help not only their friends but also other strangers now.

Another major reason is that the young are enthusiastic about sharing information and experience with others. The high technology enables young people to share information and help other easily. The young not only like to share information and experience in the internet but also get this information in residential areas. For instance, the college students who major in computer sciences like to organize activities to help residents to learn about the knowledge of computers especially for senior citizens. They share their knowledge they have learned and put into practice. This activity let them realize their value of the society .More and more young people join in groups to do such meaningful things.

Last but not least, the modern society advocates a harmonious and friendly atmosphere in which each member should be helpful and united. This atmosphere facilitates young people to help others. Some organizations even reward the young people who are brave to help others when others are in danger. For instance, the official with the civil affairs bureau in my city recently reward twenty thousand to the young guy who dived into the river to save a drowning child. When the event broadcast in the local news channel, more and more young people are inspired to help others in the daily life.

In conclusion, the increasing role of public education in people’s growth, the young people’s enthusiastic about sharing information and experience with others and the encourage of government make the claim that young people today are more willing to help others than young people in the past. Helping with each other, indeed, could make the world more beautiful and colorful.

vanessa923

黄亮精彩，蓝色建议，红色错误。



The last decades have witnessed the diversity of working style all over the world. (I like it!)Employees in some larger companies are allowed to decorate working place as what they like. Some people even just work at home, the namely SOHO people.(maybe it is better to say "Some people even just work at home, namely, the SOHO people")the(The) discussion of work place arouses a lot of attention. Those who object to working at home argue that the team work will be affected when the employees work at home.(weird) But people, who advocate working at home, on the other hand, argue that working at home using computers or telephones will make work more efficient. I am of the opinion that working at home using computer or telephones benefits a lot of us.

First of all, working at home using computers or telephones enable the employees to make a flexible arrangement of their work. Employees can choose the most efficient time to work and thus the working efficiency will be raised(maybe here we can use boosted?). Since people will not be distributed when working at home and concentrate on their work. They will think deeply about their job and create some novelty ideas of their work. According to a survey by an advertising company, 90% percent of people like working at home. The advertising company does an experiment of(on) their employees working at home. The result of the experiment shows that people can accomplish their jobin 3days that used to work in a week.( I understand what you mean,but a little weird.)And the employees can create more novelty ideas than before.(this sentence is not convincing here.)

In addition, working at home will save a lot of time. Since people do not go to the company every day. They do not spend much time on the road to the working office. As we know, people (usually)spend two or three hours on the road to the working office. If people work at home, they can use more time to their work. Working at home facilitates people make good use of time. For example, my uncle used to work for the IT Company, every day he spent three hours on driving between work office and home. But now he works at home using the computer and telephone, he can make use of time to contract (you mean sign agreements?)other employees to discuss job more carefully.

Moreover, working at home gives the environment an advantage over working at the office. Since there is less commuting, which is to blame for the air pollution .Because diesel particle levels in vehicle used for commuting were five to eight times higher than the air around them, but if more and more people work at home, there are fewer private cars on the road. (this long sentence is not connected well.)The environment is way better.

In conclusion, working at home using computers and telephones gives many advantages for us and benefits a lot for the environment.(benefit is Vt) More and more people like working at home.(this sentence is useless here. This is a declarative sentence and it is used to say some facts. I think maybe it is better for you to say "I believe that more and more...)

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自己再 重新把写的文章参加修改同学的意见再写一遍。感觉这几篇都是赶的。要好好修改下。