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The impressive presentation on work or school could be the miracle during our life ,only a few people could represent themselves in the public ,it will brings more and more concerns on(bring to ) us . if you grab a opportunity for(of) the presentation , show the people how exceptional you are (好!). (铺垫太长,可以删掉半句)nowadays ,there is a concern about when you are assigned a presentation , which do you prefer , work on it every day or wait until a big plan coming .for my perspective , prepare(preparing the work every day should take more advantages . In the essay ,I will analyze the issues and come up with some effective reasons to demonstrate it.
First of all , it is wise(obvious) that working on the presentation every day will relieve the stress for other works . for instance, if you are a student from senior high school , there must has a lot of assignments after the class , so the tough thing is ,you get your homework done it primarily(一句话里多套主谓关系) . then pay a another attention on your presentation’s work ,in the case that if you are waiting for the good idea popping out ,there must be a heavy workload for your presentations , so you will have no choice but work for it till the middle night. On the contrast ,you could divide the mission into several small parts , and try to work on each part for each day,that could makes your schedule regularly . On no account can we ignore the importance of the working each days . Moreover , there is a other story to testify my hypothesis , not one illustrating the mitigating for daily pressure , but one showing the subtlety of the sufficient preparation(仁兄确定这是正确的句子吗) . more aspects will support my point below : work on the presentation each day will allow you to collect the crucial informations patiently , sometimes you can discuss the uncertain perspectives in presentation with your teacher and classmates in order to shine your speech in the public, even ask someone to revise your defects of expression on your article .therefore, the more time you willpay , the more harvest you will receive . In this sense , it is undeniable that work on it everyday will definitely benefit your preparation. Finally , Updating the informations from your presentation each day will make your article more fashionable and desirable . For example, the main point of your speech is to comment the current relationship between china and japan . For common sense we could provide the historical datas and background. However, the event of DiaoYu island which is the blasting fuse of collision between china and japan will make your speech more fruitfully and conspicuously . As a result , you should to pay a great attention on all of the world and pick the useful information to ornament your article .(语句是好的,但是政治的东西尽量避面)From what has been discussed above , we may safely draw the conclusion that although the brilliant idea will allow you to finish the presentation effectively , scheduling the work each day is the best solution for your presentation.很不错啦,建议最后由一个让步,客观,很多亮点词汇,但是美中不足的是有一些的用法有问题,加油,来看看我的 -- by 会员 45573asdasd (2012/12/30 9:05:09)
for instance, if you are a student from senior high school , there must has a lot of assignments after the class , so the tough thing is ,you get your homework done it primarily 这句话断句存在问题。但我认为句子本身应该不存在问题吧
政治话题应该尽量避免吗? 多谢指教 |
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