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发表于 2012-11-24 13:48:53 | 只看该作者
The lecture casts doubt on the arguments illustrated in thereading material. According to the professor, controlling the population ofcane toad is not easy and the measures mentioned in the reading passages willbe unsuccessful and produce unwanted damage.


Tobegin with, the speaker points out that a national fence will not stop themovement of cane toads. This apparentlychallenge(改为challenges:主语是this需主谓一致) the  points(改为point:本段最后一句话的主语用的是point”what IS presentedin the reading material”lecture里的一点对应readingmaterial的一点吧。。。) made in the reading. Those young cane toads are ableto move into new areas with the help of rives or streams. They will finallyfind a way to other side, even if a(加个冠词)national fence isbuilt up. The point made in the lecture contrasts with what is presented in thereading material.

In addition, in accordance with the professor,untrained volunteers would destroy many precious species. The reading maintainsthat plenty of people are able to capture those toads; and the professor admitsit would work. However, professor also maintains that behavior could pose a threat  to
pose a threat to sth. 是个好用法,只是别忘了to alreadyendangered fragesfrogs.

Furthermore, the lecturer also doubts thewriter’s viewpoint by asserting that virus will infect American toads. In orderto demonstrate with her opinion, she provides evidence that some toads could betransported by researchers from Australia toAmerican
America. Ifthose infected species are bought toAmerican----toads’ native habit, those disease-causing virus will attack nativecane toads, too.

In a nutshell, the professor believes thatthose measures are ineffective. All these three evidence
these  three evidencesshows showthat thestandpoints in the reading material are totally jeopardized by the professor.


楼主听力点覆盖得全,语能不错。 学习了!


12#
 楼主| 发表于 2012-11-24 15:01:35 | 只看该作者
谢谢!纠正的很正确呢!要继续努力~~
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 楼主| 发表于 2012-11-25 21:54:28 | 只看该作者
11.25 综合
The lecture casts doubt on the arguments illustrated in the reading. According to the professor, the benefits of private collection of fossils far overweigh its disadvantages, while the reading passage conveys the opposite information.

To begin with, the speaker points out that great exposure of fossils to the public is available due to private collectors. This apparently challenges the point made in the reading passage. Those low level institutes like schools can buy some of the fossils to arouse the interests of people. The public will have more opportunities to access those fossils. This opinion made in the lecture contrasts with what is presented in the reading.

In addition, in accordance with the professor, scientists won’t miss out any important discoveries, which differs with the statement in the reading that they cannot obtain most essential fossils for the fierce competition of collectors. Every fossil needs scientists to value and identify before people sale or buy it. Those fossils collected by individuals will pass the hands of scientists first, contradicting what is stated in the reading.

Furthermore, the lecturer also doubts the writer’s viewpoint by asserting that without private collections, many fossils cannot be discovered. In order to demonstrate with her idea, she provides the evidence that finding out more fossils is more important than protecting some locations and surroundings. This refutes the idea claimed in the reading.


In a nutshell, the professor believes that private collections are good for both scientists and general public. All three evidences show that the standpoints in the reading material are totally jeopardized by the professor.
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 楼主| 发表于 2012-11-26 16:05:58 | 只看该作者
11.25 独立

In an era of outstanding sophistication and versatility, we lay considerable emphasis on success. Consequently, there is a general discussion over the question that we should copy others or be different from others to achieve success. A large number of people have pleasant association with the idea that we should be more like others. However, is this really the case? The information I have collected in the recent years leads me to believe that difference enjoys more advantages. It can bring us creativity, opportunities and many friends, which are essential factors to our success.

When it comes to success, the majority of people claim that creativity exerts profound impacts on it. Some people even equate the behavior of one person how far away from the standard with the achievement he can make. Let's take my uncle for example. About ten years ago, his friends seemed to live under the illusion that investing stocks would produce a huge sum of money. However, my uncle decided to sale diary. He didn't believe everyone do the same thing will bring any benefits. As a result, his company is the top 500 in China, while his friends earn nothing but failure. In view of the contribution of creativity, we should spare no effort to be a unique person.

In addition to creativity, it is commonly acknowledged that opportunity is an indispensible part of success. When we try to act differently, the opportunity will come to visit us. Students could gain the opportunity to attend their dream schools due to their speciality; workers could obtain promotion opportunity because of their uniqueness. In a research, 1,000 billionaires are randomly recruited by experts and they are asked the major point in their career and the reasons cause it. 75% people insist that when they try to be different, it is not so far from success. Due to the opportunities bought by difference, we are inclined to be successful.

What's more, we will have access to make friends with various people, when we are special. Some people advocate that being more like others would acquire useful lessons and experience. What those people fail to take into account is that copying others will never provide us chance to meet brilliant people. Everyone wants to communicate with pioneers rather than imitators. Besides, copy others will never reach the same height others made. Thus, being special should be encouraged and it does good to success. On no account can we ignore this basic principal.

From what have been discussed above, it would be reasonable to believe that being different plays vital role in our success and should be given priority. It's time to bring people the value of it. I believe that a much better and brighter future awaits us as long as we keep doing that.
15#
发表于 2012-11-27 16:36:11 | 只看该作者
亲  你还没有给我改17号的独立哦   那天咱俩是互改的 后来你就一直没有给我改。。
16#
发表于 2012-11-28 16:39:47 | 只看该作者

11.25 综合修改

The lecture casts doubt on the arguments illustrated in the reading. According to the professor, the benefits of private(privatilization the) collection of fossils far overweigh its disadvantages, while the reading passage conveys the opposite information.

To begin with, the speaker points out that great exposure of fossils to the public is available due to private collectors (这个原因概括的不是很好,不是因为这些私有者,而是私有化这件事). This apparently challenges the point made in the reading passage. Those low level institutes like schools can buy some of the fossils to arouse the interests of people. The public will have more opportunities to access those fossils. This opinion made in the lecture contrasts with what is presented in the reading.

In addition,in accordance with(这个词用的好怪啊,应该也可以吧,就是有点生僻,不如according to) the professor, scientists won't miss out any important discoveries, which differs with the statement in the reading that they cannot obtain most essential fossils for the fierce competition of collectors. Every fossil needs scientists to value and identify before people sale or buy it. Those fossils collected by individuals will pass应该是pass on to the hands of scientists first, contradicting what is stated in the reading.

Furthermore, the lecturer also doubts the writer’s viewpoint by asserting that without private collections, many fossils cannot be discovered. In order to demonstrate with her idea, she provides the evidence (用的模版吧,但是that后面不是evidence啊,只是一种观点罢了,in other words可能更恰当)that finding out more fossils is more important than protecting some locations and surroundings. This refutes the idea claimed in the reading.


In a nutshell, the professor believes that private collections are good for both scientists and general public. All three evidences show that the standpoints in the reading material are totally jeopardized by the professor.



细节还是不错的,听力内容基本都涉及了,剩下的都是小问题了,good!
17#
发表于 2012-11-28 16:54:01 | 只看该作者

11.25 独立修改

In an era of outstanding sophistication and versatility, we lay considerable emphasis on success. Consequently, there is a general discussion over the question that(既然是question, 这里最好说whether)we should copy others or be different from others to achieve success. A large number of people have pleasant association with the idea that we should be more like others. However, is this really the case? The information I have collected in the recent years leads me to believe that difference enjoys more advantages. It can bring us creativity, opportunities and many friends, which are essential factors to our success.

When it comes to success, the majority of people claim that creativity exerts profound impacts on it. Some people even equate the behavior of one person how far away from the standard with the achievement he can make. Let's take my uncle for example. About ten years ago, his friends seemed to live under the illusion that investing stocks would produce a huge sum of money. However, my uncle decided to sale diary. He didn't believe everyone do the same thing will bring any benefits. As a result, his company is becomes one of the top 500 in China, while his friends earn nothing but failure. In view of the contribution of creativity, we should spare no effort to be a unique person.

In addition to creativity, it is commonly acknowledged that opportunity is an indispensible part of success. When we try to act differently, the opportunity will come to visit us. Students could gain the opportunity to attend their dream schools due to their speciality; workers could obtain promotion opportunity because of their uniqueness. In a research, 1,000 billionaires are randomly recruited by experts and they are asked the major point in their career and the reasons cause it. 75% people insist that when they try to be different, it is not so far from success. Due to the opportunities bought by difference, we are inclined to be successful.

What's more, we will have access to make friends with various people, when we are special. Some people advocate that being more like others would acquire useful lessons and experience. What those people fail to take into account is that copying others will never provide us chance to meet brilliant people. Everyone wants to communicate with pioneers rather than imitators. Besides, copy others will never reach the same height others made. Thus, being special should be encouraged and it does good to success. On no account can we ignore this basic principal.

From what have been discussed above, it would be reasonable to believe that being different plays vital role in our success and should be given priority. It's time to bring people the value of it. I believe that a much better and brighter future awaits us as long as we keep doing that.



刚看LZ每段的分段点,都觉得有点诡异,不过后面解释的都很不错,所以我也提不出什么问题,但是如果能够把每段的分段点总结的更合理一些,可能会更好!语言上很不错啦,句式变换很多样
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