Issue 39 求拍砖

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College students should be encouraged to pursue subjects that interest them rather than the courses that seem most likely to lead to jobs.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

When a student is going to university for further education, what major should he or she chooses?Every student just graduates from middle school and about to go to the university must face this choice.Actually, they never need to ask opinions of other people or search for information to help them make a choice.The only person a student should ask is oneself.Students are encouraged to purchase a major according to one's interest.


Choosing a subject according to one's interest is going to make the university life more enjoyable.Only by doing the favorite things could makes us happy.When you study in university, academic, or your major, plays an important part in your life.If you choose a major that you have no interest in, it means that you have to put a lot of time on a thing you do not like.And you are going to be extremely unhappy throughout your university life. For example, a student chooses finance as her major, just because finance is likely bring her a good job.However, she has no interest in finance. She has to do her homework till late in the night everyday.She has to use computer software to dissolve all the difficult financial problems, and build up financial models. These kinds of work take her a lot of time.She loves novel and history, but she has no time to read them, which makes her extremely unhappy everyday. From this example, we can see that a favorite major is important to one's university life.We never want to spend a lot of time on a thing we have no interest in.


A favorite major can not only bring a student a lot of happiness, but it also brings a wonderful study effort. Interest is the best teacher of a student.If a student has interest in a subject, it means that he or she is willing to spent more time and put more effort on this subject. As we all know, practice makes prefect. We are less likely to see a person put a lot of effort on a subject makes little achievement on it. For example, a boy loves chemistry very much.He chooses it as his major in the university.He really enjoys his class and lab work. What is more, he thinks about his major often and he automatically relates his everyday life to his major. He never lacks of topics and materials for his essay.After he graduate, since his academic performance is so wonderful, he enrolls in a PhD program for his further study.


Admittedly, some students consider job as an important matter when they chose a major.We have to say job is important because you have to earn your own life with you salary.However, it is hard to tell if a major could bring you a job easily now could still do the same thing four years later when you graduate from university. Actually, a favorite major could let you have an outstanding academic performance and guarantee you to have a bright future after you graduate from university.


To sum up, interest is the first thing a student should consider when he or she chooses a major in university.A favorite could bring us a lot of happiness as well as achievement.


这样举例子会不会显得很生硬。。

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When a student is going to university for furthereducation, what major should he or she chooses? Every student just graduatesfrom middle school and about to go to the university mustface this choice.建议这个句子用低于从句吧，every student who has justgraduated from high school must have to face this question。 Actually,they never need to ask opinions of other people or search for information tohelp them make a choice. The only person a student should ask is oneself. Studentsare encouraged to purchase a major according to one's interest.（我咋觉得这个观点很武断呢）

Choosinga subject according to one's interest is going to make the university life moreenjoyable. Only by doing the favorite things 这里的主语是什么呢could makes 这里用make us happy. Whenyou study in university, academic, or your major, plays an important part inyour life. If you choose a major that you have no interest in, it means thatyou have to put a lot of time on a thing you do not like. And you are going tobe extremely unhappy throughout your university life. For example, a studentchooses finance as her major; just because finance is likely bring her a goodjob. However, she has no interest in finance. She has to do her homework tilllate in the night everyday. She has to use computer software to dissolve allthe difficult financial problems, and build up financial models. These kinds ofwork take her a lot of time. She loves novel and history, but she has no timeto read them, which makes her extremely unhappy everyday. From this example, wecan see that a favorite major is important to one's university life. We neverwant to spend a lot of time on a thing we have no interest in.
举这样的例子并不牵强，但你没有挖掘的恨透，仅仅是unhappy吗？那为什么unhappy呢

Afavorite major can not only bring a student a lot of happiness, but it alsobrings a 不要这个a wonderful study effort. Interest is the bestteacher of a student. If a student has interest in a subject, it means that heor she is willing to spent more time and put more effort on this subject. As weall know, practice makes prefect. We are less likely to see a person put a lotof effort on a subject 这里缺主语makes little achievement on it. Forexample, a boy loves chemistry very much. He chooses it as his major in theuniversity. He really enjoys his class and lab work. What is more, he thinksabout his major often and he automatically relates his everyday life to hismajor. He never lacks of topics and materials for his essay. After he graduate,since his academic performance is so wonderful, he enrolls in a PhD program forhis further study.


Admittedly,some students consider job as an important matter when they chose a major. Wehave to say job is important because you have to earn your own life with yousalary. However, it is hard to tell if a major could bring you a job easily nowcould still do the same thing four years later when you graduate fromuniversity. Actually, a favorite major could let you have an outstandingacademic performance and guarantee you to have a bright future after you graduatefrom university.


Tosum up, interest is the first thing a student should consider when he or shechooses a major in university. A favorite could bring us a lot of happiness aswell as achievement.
这篇文章没有考虑到话题本身的复杂性，对可能的反对观点的反驳或者说明力度不够。选专业的时候如果对专业本身的信息没有足够的了解，就谈不上兴趣不兴趣的，凭我们自己的经验也是如此，当初选专业的时候看到那些专业的名字，也许有些看起来很有意思，但仔细了解所学的东西发现自己完全不感兴趣，另外，ＬＺ论证的深度不够，在文中已经指出，希望ＬＺ加强下，不要试图回避问题的复杂性和深度，你能想到多少能想到哪个方面比较发杂比较难以有定论，就越要去写。最后，注意语言的成分，主谓一致，成分完整。
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谢谢版主，批改好详细呀~感动ing
我也觉得剖析不够深入，把观点一拆就开始写了。。另外句子成分问题也一直都有，实战的时候会有写的慢来不及及检查的问题。。觉得三分钟检查不够用

我会努力改正的~再次感谢