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SarahGao

topic: in general, people are living longer now.Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to devedop your essay.

  We can obviously feel that nowadays people are living longer than befor. Our grandparents usually have a high age and many old people, who have reached more than 70 years old  can always been seen on the street-this happened much less in the old days. In my opinion, there are several reasons account for this phenomenon.

  First, with the progress of our society is the advanced medical technology that contributes to it. Much less people in a contrary young age died from vital disease in the bygone days. For example, pneumonia was a severe killer in the past but at the present fewer humans are deprived of life due to it.

  Moreover, the whole globe is in a peaceful state, there are only few exceptions, though. So mankind doesn’t have to face the cruel battle and kill one another any more. Young people can enjoy their life -unlike some soldiers during the wartime, and needn’t to sacrifice in the battlefield. At the same time, civilians may lead a peaceful life too.

  Apart from these, it also thanks to some brilliant inventions. People don’t have to do some very hard work of dangerous nature, like minering and exploring in deep water. Contrary, machines can don these instead of us. Besides, some dull everyday work can also been done by computers. They to some extent alleviate our pressure and enable us to live a less-load life. And we know that there is a correlation between mental state and illnesses.

  The last but not the least, modern people are concerned mush more over their health. They choose to eat nutritional and sanitary food, at the same time, aware that sport is essential to life. So they often do some exercises in spare time. These attempt are really good for health.

  Above all, I believe these are the major reasons why people have a longer life span than before. And as the growth of our society, the miracles of medical technology and ourselves’s matainance will bring us a longer life than now.  

pengstone

其实写三个理由段就足够了，但每个理由应论述得更充分些。