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婷婷connie

婷婷又来写作文了~~

婷婷connie

第一篇
-The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
In the contemporary society, there is a heated discussion over the preparation of leadership for juveniles. Some people assert that competition should be given precedence, others, on the contrary, place considerable emphasis on the cooperation. Standing at this intersection, I am inclined to hold the perspective that a balance of competition and cooperation counts in youngsters’ success of being extraordinary leaders.

At the very beginning, it is the competition that enhances young people to sharpen their competence. According to the Darwinism, creatures struggle to adapt and survive to the changing environment though competitions among intra-species and inter-species, and individuals which outcompete others will eventually evolve. This theory can be applied properly to human beings-everyone is eager for success in his field, namely owning more power than others. During this way, people will probably find their weakness and thus make for it. For example, at a relatively poor position in his company, a bank clerk endeavors to acquire some accounting skills for the sake of victory in competition with his fellow workers. Odds are that he ultimately gets a promotion, governing his peers.. Here, we could safely view the competition as the prodder to a people's success in terms of leadership.

What is more, the competition not only benefits individuals but also plays an essential role to the improvement of the society as a whole. Since every individual is looking forward to progress, they together are able to make great contributions to the flourish of the society. Specifically, the technology and science has been propelled greatly over the last few centuries. With the enhancement of competition, the number of technological devices are ballooning, followed by intriguing prices. In the year of 1847, Alexander Graham Bell invented the first telephone in the world, worked by the connected wires, at exorbitant price. While it is conspicuous and ubiquitous to see people communicate with each other via portable mobile phones, which exchange informations by seven satellites orbiting the earth. And their prices are also affordable. Deep analysis, this breakthrough is motivated by competition with scientists and manufactories. Therefore, it isobvious that competition is an indispensable element which contributes to the development of the society.

Nevertheless, we have to pay a heavy price if we ignore the side-effects of excessive competitions. Proper competitions exert positive impacts on both individuals and the whole society, irrational ones, however, will cause some counterproductive and even disastrous consequences. Some aggressive athletes are the exact people who fall into these case. Never could we make it to stay way from the scandals that a reputed athlete is charged for the utility of banned medicine, which functions to boost his performance during the match. Besides, we are also frequently informed that a genius sportsman get unrepairable injury during the tournament for he exceeds the tolerance of his physical capacity. Under these circumstances, we witness the demerits brought by improper and illicit competitions.

In addition,there is immense hardship for us to distinguish competition and cooperation, for they are mutually related. Let us go back the former occasion, an ambitious young man pay his effort to outcompete his peers thus to become a member of a powerful corporation which is likely to be more competitive. Here, it is not hard for us to grasp the eventual destination of competition, namely, cooperation. Only if brilliant people are collaborating with a team will they achieve greater triumph. For instance, a private car which is sold to a customer has to be assembled by a certain factory with different components coming from various manufactories which have good mastery of specialized production technology. In this way, this private car, undoubtedly, is more competitive compared with other alternative cars which are produced by a single company.

Furthermore, it is unjustifiable for us to make a conclusion that the youngster could be prepared well to be a preeminent leader only through competition and cooperation, since other factors also have significant influence on the success of leadership. An investigation conducted by China Daily, which enjoys large prestiges in China, unveils that most eminent leaders, approximately beyond 30 years old, ascribe their achievements to their conducive personalities such as entrepreneurship, clear goal and optimism. As far as they concerned, it is the well mastery of knowledge that enables them to stand out in the human resource market, decisive choice pulls them out of a dilemma, and the optimistic attitude toward potential failure pushes them to confront the impending challenges. Without these fabulous factors hardly they reap the fruits of being successful leaders.

In a nutshell, from what has been analyzed above, we can comfortably arrive at the final conclusion that a good balance of competition and cooperation is a rational and effective strategy to prepare the young for leadership, since it benefits both individuals and the whole society. As long as these brilliant young people are furnished comprehensively with diverse competence will they certainly make strides in their careers.

瓜瓜不瓜

-The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
In the contemporary society, there is a heated discussion over the preparation of leadership for juveniles. Some people assert that competition should be given precedence, others, on the contrary, place considerable emphasis on the cooperation. Standing at this intersection, I am inclined to hold the perspective that a balance of competition and cooperation counts in youngsters’ success of being extraordinary leaders.

At the very beginning, it is the competition that enhances young people to sharpen their competence. According to the Darwinism, creatures struggle to adapt and survive to the changing environment though competitions among intra-species and inter-species, and individuals which outcompete others will eventually evolve. This theory can be applied properly to human beings-everyone is eager for success in his field,(好像语法有错) namely owning more power than others. During this way, （during this process, in this way）people will probably find their weakness and thus make (up )for it.For example, at a relatively poor position in his company, a bank clerk endeavors to acquire some accounting skills for the sake of victory in competition with his fellow workers. Odds are that he ultimately gets a promotion, governing his peers.. Here, we could safely view the competition as the prodder to a people's success in terms of leadership.
(略艰难地读懂了..总起句和for example后面的有点不搭..accounting skill这个通过competition来获得，感觉有点囧)

What is more, the competition not only benefits individuals but also plays an essential role to the improvement of the society as a whole. Since every individual is looking forward to progress, they together are able to make great contributions to the flourish of the society. Specifically, the technology and science has been propelled greatly over the last few centuries. With the enhancement of competition, the number of technological devices are ballooning, followed by intriguing prices. In the year of 1847, Alexander Graham Bell invented the first telephone in the world, worked by the connected wires, at exorbitant price. While it is conspicuous and ubiquitous to see people communicate with each other via portable mobile phones, which exchange informations by seven satellites orbiting the earth. And their prices are also affordable. Deep analysis, this breakthrough is motivated by competition with scientists and manufactories. Therefore, it isobvious that competition is an indispensable element which contributes to the development of the society.（这段写的挺好的，但是貌似社会进步和leadship无关？）

Nevertheless, we have to pay a heavy price if we ignore the side-effects of excessive competitions.（这句好棒!） Proper competitions exert positive impacts on both individuals and the whole society, irrational ones, however, will cause some counterproductive and even disastrous consequences. Some aggressive athletes are the exact people who fall into these case. Never could we make it to stay way from the scandals that a reputed athlete is charged for the utility of banned medicine, whichfunctions to boost his performance during the match. Besides, we are also frequently informed that a genius sportsman get unrepairable injury during the tournament for he exceeds the tolerance of his physical capacity. Under these circumstances, we witness the demerits brought by improper and illicit competitions.（这段扣总起句和结尾句都挺紧的 好）

In addition,there is immense hardship for us to distinguish （感觉distinguish只是distinguish啊！试试isolate？separate?）competition and cooperation, for they are mutually related. Let us go back the former occasion, an ambitious young man pay his effort to outcompete his peers thus to become a member of a powerful corporation which is likely to be more competitive.(这个一句话得出后面的结论略显无力) Here, it is not hard for us to grasp the eventual destination of competition, namely, cooperation. Only if brilliant people are collaborating with a team will they achieve greater triumph. For instance, a private car which is sold to a customer has to be assembled by a certain factory with different components coming from various manufactories which have good mastery of specialized production technology. In this way, this private car, undoubtedly, is more competitive compared with other alternative cars which are produced by a single company. （leadship好像又不见了喂。。）

Furthermore, it is unjustifiable for us to make a conclusion that the youngster could be prepared well to be a preeminent leader only through competition and cooperation, since other factors also have significant influence on the success of leadership. An investigation conducted by China Daily, which enjoys large prestiges in China, unveils that most eminent leaders, approximately beyond 30 years old, ascribe their achievements to their conducive personalities such as entrepreneurship, clear goal and optimism. As far as they concerned, it is the well mastery of knowledge that enables them to stand out in the human resource market, decisive choice pulls them out of a dilemma, and the optimistic attitude toward potential failure pushes them to confront the impending challenges. Without these fabulous factors hardly they reap the fruits of being successful leaders.（这段应该还可以吧。。我不知道GRE讲题目要素以外的行不行额）

In a nutshell, from what has been analyzed above, we can comfortably arrive at the final conclusion that a good balance of competition and cooperation is a rational and effective strategy to prepare the young for leadership, since it benefits both individuals and the whole society. As long as these brilliant young people are furnished comprehensively with diverse competence will they certainly make strides in their careers.

To 婷婷：
    GRE的作文果然好销魂o(>﹏<)o 看得我欲生欲死！！！！！
    段落逻辑基本都写在每段后面了，没有太仔细地看语法，应该语法没有大错误。
    感觉是不是整篇文章有点绕了？╮(╯▽╰)╭我真的不懂GRE作文。。只能硬着头皮给点意见啦！
   总之 加油啊!

婷婷connie

再改
The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
In the contemporary society, there is a heated discussion over the preparation of leadership for juveniles. Some people assert that competition should be given precedence, others, on the contrary, place considerable emphasis on the cooperation. Standing at this intersection, I am inclined to hold the perspective that a balance of competition and cooperation counts in youngsters’ success of being extraordinary leaders.

At the very beginning, it is the competition that enhances young people to sharpen their competence. According to the Darwinism, creatures struggle to adapt and survive to the changing environment though competitions among intra-species and inter-species, and individuals which outcompete others will eventually evolve. This theory can be applied properly to human beings这里改成冒号~)everyone is eager forsuccess in his field,(好像语法有错) namely owning more power than others. During inthis way, （during this process, in this way）people will probably find their weakness and thus make(up )for (原来弥补是make for) it.For example, at a relatively poor position in his company, a bank clerk endeavors to acquire some accounting skills for the sake of victory in competition with his fellow workers. Odds are that he ultimately gets a promotion, governing his peers.. Here, we could safely view the competition as the prodder to a people's success in terms of leadership.
(略艰难地读懂了..总起句和for example后面的有点不搭..accounting skill这个通过competition来获得，感觉有点囧)(这里是想说竞争促使他去学习accounting skills)

What is more, the competition not only benefits individuals but also plays an essential role to the improvement of the society as a whole. Since every individual is looking forward to progress, they together are able to make great contributions to the flourish of the society. Specifically, the technology and science has been propelled greatly over the last few centuries. With the enhancement of competition, the number of technological devices are ballooning, followed by intriguing prices. In the year of 1847, Alexander Graham Bell invented the first telephone in the world, worked by the connected wires, at exorbitant price. While it is conspicuous and ubiquitous to see people communicate with each other via portable mobile phones, which exchange informations by seven satellites orbiting the earth. And their prices are also affordable. Deep analysis, this breakthrough is motivated by competition with scientists and manufactories. Therefore, it isobvious that competition is an indispensable element which contributes to the development of the society.（这段写的挺好的，但是貌似社会进步和leadership无关？）（额，失误了，貌似偏题了，我完全是在说competition对社会的好处，忽略了leadership）

Nevertheless, we have to pay a heavy price if we ignore the side-effects of excessive competitions.（这句好棒!） Proper competitions exert positive impacts on both individuals and the whole society, irrational ones, however, will cause some counterproductive and even disastrous consequences. Some aggressive athletes are the exact people who fall into these case. Never could we make it to stay way from the scandals that a reputed athlete is charged for the utility of banned medicine,whichfunctions to boost his performance during the match. Besides, we are also frequently informed that a genius sportsman get unrepairable injury during the tournament for he exceeds the tolerance of his physical capacity. Under these circumstances, we witness the demerits brought by improper and illicit competitions.（这段扣总起句和结尾句都挺紧的 好）

In addition,there is immense hardship for us todistinguishseparate(瓜说的对，区分趋势没有分离来的好~)（感觉distinguish只是distinguish啊！试试isolate？separate?）competition and cooperation, for they are mutually related. Let us go back the former occasion, an ambitious young man pay his effort to outcompete his peers thus to become a member of a powerful corporation which is likely to be more competitive to join in a more powerful group(其实就是想表达，人们竞争是为了更好地合作).(这个一句话得出后面的结论略显无力) Here, it is not hard for us to grasp the eventual destination of competition, namely, cooperation. Only if brilliant people are collaborating with a team will they achieve greater triumph. For instance, a private car which is sold to a customer has to be assembled by a certain factory with different components coming from various manufactories which have good mastery of specialized production technology. In this way, this private car, undoubtedly, is more competitive compared with other alternative cars which are produced by a single company. （leadership好像又不见了喂。。）

Furthermore, it is unjustifiable for us to make a conclusion that the youngster could be prepared well to be a preeminent leader only through competition and cooperation, since other factors also have significant influence on the success of leadership. An investigation conducted by China Daily, which enjoys large prestiges in China, unveils that most eminent leaders, approximately beyond 30 years old, ascribe their achievements to their conducive personalities such as entrepreneurship, clear goal and optimism. As far as they concerned, it is the well mastery of knowledge that enables them to stand out in the human resource market, decisive choice pulls them out of a dilemma, and the optimistic attitude toward potential failure pushes them to confront the impending challenges. Without these fabulous factors hardly they reap the fruits of being successful leaders.（这段应该还可以吧。。我不知道GRE讲题目要素以外的行不行额）(写这段的出发点就是想完善claim,年轻人不仅需要instill the sense of competition and cooperation,也需要其他的factors,从作文书上看来的)

In a nutshell, from what has been analyzed above, we can comfortably arrive at the final conclusion that a good balance of competition and cooperation is a rational and effective strategy to prepare the young for leadership, since it benefits both individuals and the whole society. As long as these brilliant young people are furnished comprehensively with diverse competence will they certainly make strides in their careers.
提纲：

1.竞争促使年轻人去sharpen自身能力

2.竞争促进整个社会的进步（bell到mobile phone）

3.不正当的竞争会带来严重的不良后果（athlete）

4.我们很难把竞争与合作明确地分离（竞争是为了合作，合作是为了更好地竞争）

5.要把年轻人培养成一个优秀的leader,还可以从其他方面着手——entrepreneurship, clear goal, optimism

结论：我们需要balance竞争与合作，并且从方面培养

To 婷婷：
   GRE的作文果然好销魂o(>﹏<)o 看得我欲生欲死！！！！！
   段落逻辑基本都写在每段后面了，没有太仔细地看语法，应该语法没有大错误。
   感觉是不是整篇文章有点绕了？╮(╯▽╰)╭我真的不懂GRE作文。。只能硬着头皮给点意见啦！
  总之 加油啊!

自我感觉：感觉肿么还是扣题不紧，论证competition和cooperation的时候，就侧重他们的好处了，忽略了和leadership的联系，这个是弱点，我要好好改~

婷婷connie

Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the students’ field of study.

Currently, there is a heated discussion over the topic of the variety of courses offered by universities. Some suggest that the multiplicity of curricula undoubtedly help to broaden students' horizon, others, however, place much emphasis on the latent stress on universities and students. Standing at this intersection, I am inclined to stand for the view that university authorities are supposed to carry out the policy which provides more courses while considering experts' points and students' interests.



To begin with, the diversity of curricula offered by universities exerts conducive influence on the enhancement of students' studies. We cannot deny the basic fact that every discipline is mutually related. Only a good mastery of various disciplines could we get better understand of our major knowledge and find efficient approach to research tasks. Philosophy, which lays the fundamental principle for every other disciplines plays an indispensable role in students' studies for it enables us to think problems at a more profound angle; without the help of mathematics, hardship is faced to make calculations, especially for students majored in economics to work out the results of a certain marketing strategy model; it is the art that gets students struck by flows of inspiration then enables them to come out of the academic mire they are confronting. Thus, the charming of more courses available for students is available to us.



Furthermore, the pragmatical skills rendered by the courses related with work, which are neglected in traditional curricula, makes students have advantages in competing with others at human resource markets. Compared with the previous teaching plan, this new policy, which adds some guiding courses for future work getting students involved into the real working circumstances, greatly boosts the employment chance among graduates. Specifically, a brilliant student, who had received the tips about how to behave in the interview as well as project-planing trainings in campus would be more likely to stand out in the interview, outcompeting his peers. In addition, courses fostering interpersonal skills and oratory are also subsumed, so chances are that students can easily accommodate the new working environment and make contribution to the company.



However, this action probably creates some barrier on the cultivation of persons who are expert in some areas since the diverse curricula tend to distract their concentration on the strengths. Let us imagine that a genius fond of the astronomy has many innovative thoughts, unluckily, he is forced to take too many other requirements such as art and economics, holding little relation with the astronomy. Possible is the impairment of the vigor on his dreaming courses for he has to spare some and even large part of his time to study the rest of his course in order to keep dominant position in the list of academic grades. Therefore, it is conspicuous that more courses, on the contrary, decelerate the rate at which his progress on astronomy develops.



Besides, the pressure on the students' study and the burden on the campus' finance often prevent the implementation of the policy. On one hand, since students have more examinations and papers, most of them will choose to stay up until the midnight, which result in the poor condition of their

physique and mood. An investigation conducted by China Daily unveils that students who are overworked ubiquitously suffer from illnesses like poor eyesight, bore on these additional courses and even melancholia. On the other hand, with the need for diverse courses rising, financial predicament is confronted by university authorities as they have to hire more preeminent professors and adopt more sophisticated appliances used in the laboratory. Therefore, we witness the underlying problems inevitable for university administers if the policy is to be put into effect.



I concede we may be pulled up by some difficulty, nonetheless we do not necessarily lose heart to this policy. Even if the college has to face the financial quandary, effort made by selfless alumni to donate considerable money can turn the case into a promising direction. Besides, the government will pitch some money to boost the improvement of education industry as it is absolutely not be blind to the development of the educational industry. What is more, the state of tension maybe another way to prod students to go further, just as an old saying goes "stress is the best motivation".



Last but not least, how to make the teaching plan is also an issue of much importance. To strengthen the advantages of the policy, curriculum planners are supposed to solicit students' opinions towards the contents of extra requirements to be added. And it is beneficial to offer them course for time management, so students will not feel exhausted to oscillate among diverse courses. With the interest and reasonable time concept, we assure that the policy will guide the students to their acme of their life.



In a nutshell, from what has been discussed above, we could apparently see both merits and demerits of the policy which offers students with variety of curricula. Non-ignorable as passive effects on students and university's finance are, we are able to come up with a balance solution, namely, adding more courses with consideration to the perspectives of both experts and students. In this way, we can put the policy to function in a more correct way.

提纲：

1.课程多样性促进学生更好地学习（各个学科是互相交织在一起的，不能只学专业课，有些课奠定了专业基础，比如philosophy, mathematics,art）

2.当中培养pragmatic skills的课程对学生的就业很有帮助

3.不利于人才特殊化的培养

4.开设更多的课会对学校造成经济负担

5.繁重的血液负担也会对学生造成身心上的pressure

6.Teaching plan很重要，可以综合学生的兴趣以及experts的建议开设。

结论：尽管more curricula会对学生和学校造成一些负担，但它的积极影响更大，所以我们需要合理规划课程，让它的advantage发挥到最大。

婷婷connie

The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.



Currently, there is a heated discussion over the indicator to judge the greatness of a nation emerged among academics whose opinions vary from each other. Some experts believe that the accomplishments of elites best manifest the development of a nation. Others, however, contend the preponderant position of the well-being of people in a nation when evaluating the great power of a nation. As far as I am concerned, a combination of the two indicator could be applied to get a more precise judgment. Comprehensive arguments and specific examples will be demonstrated in the article to verify my point.



At the every beginning, it is the people that take up the major part of a nation instead of the brilliant rulers, artists, or scientists. As we all know, the staple part of an object usually tells its main attributes, so does the people in this case. Since the people is the majority of the nation, what they think and feel greatly reflect the main trend. Possibility is that an ambitious emperor exaggerates the influence of some events or leave out his misconducts in order to glorify his image of a wise monarch to the offspring. While it actually presents barrier for historian to reconstruct the bygone history when referring everything from the governmental documentaries. In contrast, if this historian place considerable emphasis on the welfare of the people at that time, it is not difficult for him to get some remarkable discoveries-what was their livelihood and how ordinary individuals reacted to the war happened during the domination of the emperor . In this way, we could know that the general welfare is able to reflect the biggest reality of a nation.



I concede that the general willingness of people portrays the nation in the best light, yet it is of too much complexity to make a clear comment. Specifically, according to Aristotle, a reputed philosopher in ancient Greek, the general well-being of people is composed with the satisfaction of material and spirit. Let us make a further step, the aspect of material includes adequate clothings to keep warm, free from the fear for the hazard of famine, a house to maintain stable life instead of nomadic one and ability to reach remote places. As for the aspect of psychoactive gratification, things get much more complicated since the thoughts of human-beings are too vagarious to determine. Thus, a distinct utilization of happiness index still a challenge for us. Realizing the sophistication of the general welfare of its people, this indicator is certainly beyond our control to be utilized for pragmatical use.



Besides, hardship may be faced by us to accept the view that the general well-being of people can indicate the conditions of a nation more surely as with consideration to the latent erratic factors. And an unpredictable war is a good case to bolster this point. Assumed people of the nation A are living in serenity: adults go working with satisfaction, youngsters receive education in school, old people just enjoy themselves by playing chess in the clement sunlight. Here, it seems no doubt to make a conclusion that this nation is thriving. Unfortunately, envious of the affluent sources of the nation A, its nearby nation B provokes a war suddenly. Thus, the people of nation A suffer a lot from the war, and their welfare is undermined: some of them may confront the danger of starvation and exposure as the result of war. This case convincingly inform us that the welfare of people is too unstable for us to rely on when making judgment for a nation since it  is readily disturbed by an event.



Moreover, the achievements of the elites of the nation which are potent impetus to prod the whole society to move on can suggest the clear progress of people's welfare.  Without extraordinary scientists, we may remain the original style of communication with each other by means of paper letters conveyed by human labor, or perhaps we have to ride horses to reach a far place, and sailing though oceans with ease probably is an unimaginable task for us. Large numbers of inventions that boost the well-being of humans are conspicuous and ubiquitous. They bring us a new world. Artists also play a significant role in enriching people's mental world. A painting describing the fascinating scenery of a range is able to lift people from heavy pressure of work. A piece of lyric song has the magic power to refresh a weary person and get his ready to face the next adversity. Additionally, we also need to express gratitude to the rulers who enact policies to create better environment to enhance these achievements to serve for people.  In all, their compelling accomplishments perform as a strong indicator for the ever-increasing quality of people's life.



In a nutshell, from what has been discussed above, we may apparently see advantages of both the well-being of people and the accomplishments of elites to judge the greatness of a nation. Achievements of these preeminent individuals are the clearest indicators to reflect the improvement of the nation, while we can not be blind to the people's thoughts and feelings. Only if we consider the both indicators fully will we get the more accurate judgment of a nation.

提纲：

1.大众是国家的主体，people’s ideas reflect the main trend

2.General willingness很复杂，难以确定

3.General willingness易变，比如受到战争的影响

4.achievements of elites具有指标性，能推动general welfare的发展（科技：computer,television,radio;艺术：music,painting...lift people’s spirit;统治者：制定policy）

结论：a combination of general welfare and accomplishments is more precise to judge a nation’s greatness.

婷婷connie

10.6
Government officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people they serve.



Currently, there is a heated discussion over the topic of the government, and one of questions under debate is whether government officials are supposed to tackle issues according to their own judgment instead of the consideration of people's will. The information I have collected over the last two years disposes me to believe that neither dependence on officials' own knowledge nor people's desire ought to be given precedence. Conversely, an organic combination of these two factors contributes to better results, namely, the improvement of the quality of citizens' life.



At the very beginning, blockade is met as government officials are engaged to carry out people's will without hesitation, for the will of people differs from each other that results when people come from different backgrounds and receive various level of education. A case comes to bolster this point that a mayor, who is just inaugurated in the town, wants to make a different during his time. Limited by capital, energy and time, he has to choose the most valuable project to improve people's life. Now divergence comes out: workmen, afflicted by traffic jams, eagerly appeal to ameliorate this vexing situation; oscillating between her well-paid job which renders her money to support the family and her little child who just needs her company, the single-mother is also the exact person demanding for special care. Here, predicament can be foreseen if the official insists to make a consensus between myriad people they serve. Thus, possibility is slight for officials to carry out the will of people undoubtedly as with failure of reaching a consensus of people's will.



Furthermore, the implementation of the certain will embodied by the majority of people just like a ship sail in the mist, as officials cannot assure of the validity of this will. To take the 1950s in China as a case, when people of the nation were exposed to the fear of poverty. Prodded by the motivation of owning fortune, millions of people were jumped into the flow of the production of iron. In spite of some provident officials' warn, the government encouraged this trend for the reason that it reflected the whole will. Unluckily, this iron-production movement turned out to be a failure for hardly could people of that time have a mastery of metallurgical technology thus making little output. What made the things worse was this movement exerted large harm to the environment as they cut down trees for energy recklessly. In this way, we apparently witness the disastrous outgrowth of government officials' action totally depending on people's will. Even if a brilliant official manages to get the ultimate goal demonstrated by investigation, it is hard for him to prove this goal is replete with rationality as the average of people are not able to consider issues as professional as government officials do.



Admittedly, I concede, to some degree, that it is advisable to applaud the government officials own judgment on issues superficially, difficulty, however, will be faced if too early conclusion is drawn. According to the prestigious French philosopher Rousseau, democracy represents the freedom of the people of the nation to speak in public, to maintain their own possessions and to participate in the decision making process which affects the quality of their life. There is no denying that it is the people that dominate a democracy nation which contradicts the occasions where the government officials make the decisions alone ignoring the willingness of people. To ensure people's precious self-discretion, efforts need to be made to prevent the spread of despotism which means centralization, so the solely reliance on officials' own judgment to enact laws is not encouraged currently.



The government official ought to take into account for people's thoughts and feelings when making judgment of affairs since the ultimate goal for those officials is to realize the well-being of the people they serve. Touched by the resolution to contribute the society, citizens in democracy nation vote for the candidate whom they regard as the most promising one. Therefore, we can hit the point that the most of government officials are ready to donate themselves to the construction of politics, economics and culture of the nation. They are bound to act in accordance with the duties to guarantee the safety of people's life and assets, freedom of public speech as well as accessible passage of the legislation of laws. To realize these formidable yet rewarding tasks, government officials require the involvement of people in their decision making process.



In a nutshell, from what has been discussed above, it is conspicuous to see the complexity of the issue: neither it is justifiable to put the law in to effect, which is enacted purely according to people's will, nor to lay down the decision by merely referring to the officials' own thoughts. Only if endeavor is commit to attenuate the negative influence of the two factors and make their merits far overweigh their demerits will the government officials work better to shape glorious future for their citizens.

提纲：

1.人们的选择出于各种目的，很难reach consensus

2.及时达成统一也不能证明人们的意愿的validity（因为缺乏专业的知识）

3.，尊重民意，仅靠officials’ own judgment会造成专制（despotism）

4.Officials是由民众选出来的，ultimate goal是造福人类，应该考虑到人们的意愿

结论：unquestionably carry out general willingness不理性，officials’ own judgment太专制，所以需要把officials’ judgment and people’s willingness有机的结合起来考虑，尽力削减弊端。

corneliaflower

婷婷考完了是嘛？

晨依Jacqueline

婷婷怎么又开新帖啦？923战绩如何呀？
有没有发现思羽也在我们小分队

vanessa923

哎呀，话说我也在准备GRE 作文的说。婷婷有啥好建议分享的没。。。