kel 作文贴。。

面具小姐

TPO8综合


The reading passage casts doubt on theaccuracy of Chevalier de Seingalt's memoir. The lecturer, however, holds anopposite view that none of the explanations are convincing for the followingthree aspects.
  Firstly, Chevalier is not poor despite of the loan. In fact, Chevalierspent a lot of money on parties and gambling. This asset had to be sold formoney and cannot be used directly as cash, thus he has to loan from friends everytime he ran out of money and then wait for the money to arrive.
   Secondly, Chevalier wrote dairy everyday which contained everything he can remember on that day. What's more, he would consult the notes in the dairywhen he was composing the memoir many years later. Thereby, his memoir cancapture those conversations so accurately.
  Finally, if Chevalier was bribed to be free, why is that those who hadmore powerful friends than Chevalier in the Venetian prison did not escape? What'smore, according to a governmental document, the ceiling in Venetian prison wasrepaired after Chevalier made a hole in the ceiling and escaped through the roof.

哇 翻页了好开心！

面具小姐

9月3日 独立


Do you agree that it is better to spend money on traveling and vacation than save money for the future?


People's attitudes toward life vary from person to person, which result in the various opinions to money. Some people prefer to go on vacation, while others may save money for future. From my standpoint, I am in favor of the former one for the following aspects.
   It is a low-cost, spiritual relaxation to go travelling, especially when you are under great pressure. It is also a bonus since the disturbing and time-consuming assignment has been accomplished. Apart from cleaning our heart, vacations can rich our lives with different sites and unforgettable stories. To those families with kids, parents have little time with them during the weekday. At this time, go travelling or go on a picnic on weekends will be a good choice rather than stay at home watching TV.
   Trips are full of opportunities. To artists and designers, inspiration primarily occurs while travelling. Impressed landscape, peaceful towns, and even the conversations during the trip may develop their mind. Furthermore, many merchants discover new prospects on trips. Take the film, Smile Crab for example. It described a girl and her family who travelled to Xinjiang province in China during the summer vacation. The girl heard from the local partners by accident that the river there contains many freshwater crabs, which even other locals have never discovered. Finally, the girl's father seized the chance to develop this new prospect and won success. Therefore, opportunities are always on the road. If you go to pursue them, you may get them.  
 Although a large group of people choose to save money in case of some emergencies or investments, their life then are often boring and of no excitement. It will be a pity if they do not meet with those situations need large sum of money during their lifetime. Still, their enthusiasm for enjoyment may vanish.
  Hence, journeys can relax ourselves, keep us from the noisy city and even benefit our works. With so many benefits above, I strongly recommend that we should spend more money on travelling and enjoy a better life.

guoyang88

9.2 修改          【】内为建议   XXX 为添加        下划线为亮点
it is better to relax by a movie or reading a bookthan doing physical exercise. Do you agree?

In this day and age, more and more【an increasing number of 】 people are pursuing  a high quality of life and seeking themost efficient【有效 effective】 way to relax. Some people would like to do physical exercise,while some others have a preference for books and movies. As for me, I am in favor of the latter one for the following aspects.

 First and foremost, reading books or watching movies are not only a spiritual relaxation buta way [are 和a way 矛盾]to absorb[obtain] knowledge. Diversified books which fit into different kinds ofpeople, such as fairy tale books, science fictions and detective novels, can present large amount of information and broaden their horizons. So do films. What’smore, most of the reading matter[materials] and films are a reflection on [of] reality, which canlead us to interpret how to deal with similar problems and [ problems, as well as  how to...] how to be a excellent human in real life.  

Also,there are many motivational books and movies which can stimulate our will tofight [make effort] and pursue goals. For example, the film, the Pursuit of Happiness, shockedme deeply. Before seeing this film, I had ever considered myself studious enoughand no need to try[work] harder. The moment when I saw Chris Gardner and his sonsleeping in the toilet, I could not help weeping. He is the real man who isfighting for happiness, which touches me and encourages me to pursue myhappiness persistently. Therefore, I would rather say that watching movies aswell as reading books are a [are a 矛盾]really good way to inspire our will apart from arelaxation.

Atlast, exercising is a relaxation 【an ideal way for relaxing】 both physically and mentally, but it is easyto get hurt in doing sports. For freshmen, they are likely to be hurt for theyare unfamiliar with the equipment and operate  the machine improperly. There was an accident happenedin my city during the last summer vacation when a high school graduate was hurtby his own improper operation in the sports center. Hence, because of the existenceof danger, doing exercise is not suitable to everyone
  All inall, compared with exercises, books and films are better in that they are of benefit to obtain knowledge, suitable to everyone, and more gentle[形容人的吧 换个convenient] and peaceful.


电影的例子不错。 可以再打磨下 成为一个经典的自己的段子。 用于关于励志 努力 电影 爱好 的段子。可以用在口语写作。

然后单复数要注意下。 are  and a就一起出来了。

面具小姐

9.2 独立修改
感谢guoyang~


it is better to relax by a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise. Do you agree?

In this day and age, an increasing number of people are pursuing a high quality of life and seeking the most effective way to relax. Some people would like to do physical exercise, while some others have a preference for books and movies. As for me, I am in favor of the latter one for the following aspects.

First and foremost, reading books or watching movies is not only a spiritual relaxation but a way to absorb knowledge. Diversified books which fit into different kinds of people, such as fairy tale books, science fictions and detective novels, can present large amount of information and broaden their horizons. So do films. What’s more, most of the reading materials and films are a reflection on reality, which can lead us to interpret how to deal with similar problems and as well as how to be an excellent human in real life.  

Also, there are many motivational books and movies which can stimulate our will to fight [make effort] and pursue goals. For example, the film, the Pursuit of Happiness, shocked me deeply. Before seeing this film, I had ever considered myself studious enough and no need to work harder. The moment when I saw Chris Gardner and his son sleeping in the toilet, I could not help weeping. He is the real man who is fighting for happiness, which touches me and encourages me to pursue my happiness persistently. Therefore, I would rather say that watching movies as well as reading books are a really good way to inspire our will apart from a relaxation.

At last, exercising is an ideal way for relaxing both physically and mentally, but it is easy to get hurt in doing sports. For freshmen, they are likely to be hurt for they are unfamiliar with the equipment and operate the machine improperly. There was an accident happened in my city during the last summer vacation when a high school graduate was hurt by his own improper operation in the sports center. Hence, because of the existence of danger, doing exercise is not suitable to everyone
 All in all, compared with exercises, books and films are better in that they are of benefit to obtain knowledge, suitable to everyone, and more convenient and peaceful.

fuzhengrui

婷婷connie

9.3综合改文
TPO8综合
来找错误啦~红色错误，蓝色讨论，高亮精彩
The reading passage casts doubt on theaccuracy of Chevalier de Seingalt's memoir. The lecturer, however, holds anopposite view that none of the explanations are convincing for the followingthree aspects.


Firstly, Chevalier is not poor despite of the loan（from merchants）. In fact, Chevalierspent a lot of money on parties and gambling. This asset had to be sold formoney and cannot be used directly as cash, thus he has(had)to loan from friends everytime he ran out of money and then wait(waited) for the money to arrive.


Secondly, Chevalier wrote dairy(没有听见这个，只是take notes every time after the conversation with Voltaire)everyday which contained everything he can remember on that day. What's more, he would consult the notes in the dairywhen he was composing the memoir many years later. Thereby, his memoir cancapture those conversations so accurately.


Finally, if Chevalier was bribed to be free, why is that those who hadmore powerful friends than Chevalier in the Venetian prison did not escape?(开头不建议写问句)What's(What is)more, according to a governmental document, the ceiling in Venetian prison wasrepaired after Chevalier made a hole in the ceiling and escaped through the roof.
可以写一个总结的说~

Conclusion：听力细节很全了，适当注意一下结构完整性哦~加油啦

面具小姐

9.3独立修改稿

图图辛苦了~~
Do you agree that it is better to spend money on traveling and vacation than save money for the future?



People’s various attitudes toward life result in  several kinds of opinions about money. Some people prefer to go on vacation, while others may save money for future use. From my standpoint, I am in favor of the former one for the following aspects.


It is a low-cost, spiritual relaxation to go travelling, especially when you are under great pressure. It is also a bonus since the disturbing and time-consuming assignment has been accomplished. Apart from cleansing our hearts, vacations can  enrichour lives with different sites and unforgettable stories. To those families with kids, parents have little time with them during the weekdays. At this time, going travelling will be a good choice rather than stay at home watching TV.


Trips are full of opportunities. To artists and designers, travelling can stimulate their inspiration. Impressive landscapes, peaceful towns, and even the conversations during the trip may inspire them.Furthermore, many merchants discover new prospects on trips. Take the film, Smile Crab for example. It described a girl and her family who travelled to Xinjiang province in China during the summer vacation. The girl heard from the local partners by accident that the river there contains many freshwater crabs, which even other locals had never discovered. Finally, the girl's father seized the chance to develop this new prospect and achieved success. Therefore, opportunities are always on the road. If you go to pursue them, you may get them.


Although a large group of people choose to save money in case of some emergencies or investments, their lives then are often tedious and of no excitement.However, If you get the chance to see a beautiful landscapes or encounter an unforgettable experience, remember not to miss it for neitherof them can be reproduced again by your saved money.


Hence, journeys can relax ourselves, keep us from the noisy city and even benefit our works. With so many benefits above, I strongly recommend that we should spend more money on travelling and enjoy a better life.

面具小姐

9.4 独立作文

Do you agree or disagree with the followingstatement? An effective leader should try to make others feel that they arepart of the decision making process.

In this day and age, leaders are profoundin decision making. Thus, whether they should make everyone aware of theirdecision making does make sense. From my standpoint, an efficient leader doesnot need to join in every conference.


First and foremost, busy as leaders, theyhave no sufficient time to participate in all meetings and discussions. Takethe hierarchy for example. In the past, kings and queens had to deal with alarge amount of national affairs everyday. Without sleeping, they still could notfinish such piles of work. Therefore, they used to pick out some crucial partsand lead the public debate, while other parts were assigned to responsibleofficials. With this strategy, the national leaders usually operated theircountry in a good condition. Thus, current leaders will be sensible to adoptthis method to manage their companies.


Secondly, by offering the responsibleofficials opportunities to deal with issues on their own, an efficient leaderis able to stimulate their potentials, strengthen their abilities and show hisor her trust to the members. For example, currently, many multinationalcorporations are seizing the chance to extend their foreign markets. Jack, afriend of mine, is one of the founders who established Rose Group in America in1993. Recently, as the CEO of an IT company which is belonged to Rose Group, hecame back to China to open up a market in Chengdu, Sichuan Province. He once toldme via emails that the chairman left this assignment to him and barely helpedhim make decisions. Jack took this assignment as an appreciation for it is away to improve his abilities in various aspects; It is also efficient for thechairman. Thus, the leader should leave some opportunities to those he believein to train their skills, which will strengthen the cohesion of whole group.


Finally, if a leader did decisions on hisown, his burden will be too heavy and his teammates will just follow his ideasand lack enthusiasm for work, which is a potential threat for the further developmentof a company.


In a nutshell, to be an efficient leader,one must decide the most important and urgent issues rather than decide everydecision, and leave other decision making chances to potential, well skilled members.

面具小姐

9.4 TPO9综合


The reading passage provides threeexplanations that the hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine will replace theinternal-combustion engine. The lecturer, however, holds on opposite view forthe fuel-cell engine has many disadvantages.


Firstly, hydrogen is not easily accessible.Although hydrogen can be produced by water and natural gas, it has to be usedas pure liquid state. This state is hard to produce and store artificiallybecause pure liquid hydrogen should be kept in rather cold condition, say, minus253 Celsius degree. Thus, it is not a substance that easy to get and use.


Secondly, the fuel-cell engine will notsolve the pollution problems. Even though the cars will not produce pollutedgas, the factories, which burn coals and oil to get energy for hydrogen fromwater and gas, will produce pollution.


Finally, fuel-cell engines will not beeconomically since manufacturing these engines will contain a raw expensivematerial, platinum. Without this component, the mechanical reaction to get hydrogenwill not happen. However, trials using economical materials to produce hydrogenare all unsuccessful. Therefore, platinum is needed to manufacture theexpensive fuel-cell engines.

小兔爱twins

亲。。。 注意审题。。 等你改好的。。

 In thisday and age, leaders are profound in decision making.Thus, whether they should make everyone aware of their decision making doesmake sense. From my standpoint, an efficient leader does not need to join inevery conference.

Firstand foremost, busy as leaders, they have no sufficient time to participate inall meetings and discussions. Take the hierarchy for example. In the past,kings and queens had to deal with alarge amount of national affairs everyday.Without sleeping, they still could notfinish such piles of work. Therefore,they used to pick out some crucial partsand lead the public debate, while otherparts were assigned to responsibleofficials. With this strategy, the nationalleaders usually operated theircountry in a good condition. Thus, currentleaders will be sensible to adoptthis method to manage their companies.


Secondly,by offering the responsibleofficials opportunities to deal with issues on theirown, an efficient leaderis able to stimulate their potentials, strengthen theirabilities and show hisor her trust to the members. For example, currently, manymultinationalcorporations are seizing the chance to extend their foreignmarkets. Jack, afriend of mine, is one of the founders who established RoseGroup in America in1993. Recently, as the CEO of an IT company which isbelonged to Rose Group, hecame back to China to open up a market in Chengdu,Sichuan Province. He once toldme via emails that the chairman left thisassignment to him and barely helpedhim make decisions. Jack took thisassignment as an appreciation for it is away to improve his abilities invarious aspects; It is also efficient for thechairman. Thus, the leader shouldleave some opportunities to those he believein to train their skills, whichwill strengthen the cohesion of whole group.


Finally,if a leader did decisions on hisown, his burden will be too heavy and histeammates will just follow his ideasand lack enthusiasm for work, which is apotential threat for the further developmentof a company.


Ina nutshell, to be an efficient leader,one must decide the most important andurgent issues rather than decide everydecision, and leave other decision makingchances to potential, well skilled members.