kel 作文贴。。

面具小姐

In the lecture, the professor refutes the evidences proposed in the reading material from several aspects.
First and foremost, the primary usage of the Chaco structure (structures) , accoding (according) to the text, is to acommadate (accommodate) hundreds of people. (原文给观点时只说了作用是居住，而不是容纳上百的人，即原文观点没有给数目，这样说虽然也没什么大错，但还是小心为好吧)However, few signs showed that people had ever lived inside the building. On the contrary, the fireplaces, a place （places）for cooking, showed a （an）evidence against the proposal. That is, it's a satire（不要加入个人观点）that the number of fireplaces discovered inside the structure is fairly fewer than it suppose （supposed）to be . Only 10 fireplaces found in one of the largest houses, which is contradictory with the 100 families lived in the room. （原文中的数字都加了around，而且是more than 100）
Secondly, to store grain maize, containers are a must. Nevertheless, Excavations revealed that among the uncovered matters, there is （was）no such maize containers （此处另一细节是traces of maize）. It will be not so reliable to judge the Chaco structure （structures）as a place to store food without a container or a further evidence （个人观点，删去）.
Finnally （Finally）, when ti （it）comes to the broken pots in Pueblo Alto, it is doubted that those pots are （were）used for ceremonies .Hypothesis is （was）that these pots are （were）merely building materails（materials）left in the house, （pots 不是建筑材料，原文是说在放pots的地方还有其他与ceremony无关的东西，比如一些建筑材料）or else there are only for ordinary drinking and eating without a ceremony （说 the pots were left by the workers after meals 就好了）. That is, they indeed used those pots, but you cannot decide whether there is a ceremony there. （总结句可以不要）

错词有点多，可以先贴进Word里面，那些打错的此会被红线画出来，这样就知道自己那些地方容易打错了。
另外文中有些地方含个人观点或态度，这样不好，文章说什么就是什么好了，若果听力很好，照搬听力的句子也比加入个人观点好。
第三段估计听力没听清，细节有些错误。

慢慢练习吧，总会提高的，Practice makes perfect，一起加油吧！

-- by 会员 Stegosaurus (2012/9/1 10:31:12)

谢谢！我会加油的！

面具小姐

9.1 综合
Thereading material provides us three possible explanations about thedisadvantages of communal online encyclopedias compared to traditional ones. Thelecturer, however, holds a negative view towards these opinions, and gives thefollowing three arguments.
   First and foremost, there are many errorsin online encyclopedia, while they also exist on a the traditional encyclopedias.What' more. it will be much easier for the online encyclopedias to correct themistakes. Errors of the printed encyclopedia, on the other hand, may exist fordecades.
  Secondly, the online workers have realizedthe importance to defense against hackers. They have made two strategies. Theprimary one is to leave a special format to prevent certain crucial parts ofthe article from being modified. Besides, they have assigned several editors tomonitor and check the changes from the online encyclopedias.
   Finally, the lecturer states that traditionalprinted encyclopedias provide limit space to writers, who have to decide which informationis important. But in fact, their choices can't reflect public’s interests. Theonline encyclopedias, however, are mixed with both academic articles and currentlypopular topics. It is considered as the strongest advantage of the onlineencyclopedias.

面具小姐

9.1 独立
When it comes to success, opinions vary from person to person. Many peoplewould like to stand out and do things outside the box, while another largegroup of people prefer to imitate successors. As I see it, I’m in favor of thelatter point of view.
   First and foremost, Youngpeople can benefit a lot from their superiors and elder co-workers. Currently alarge proportion of young workers are most people who were born in 80s. Lackingphysical and spiritual resources, these people meet with difficulties moreoften. While the superiors or elder co-workers who have work for a long time mayhold various solutions. By imitating their act in certain conditions, most ofthe problems are avoidable or resolvable. Also, besides solutions todifficulties, their experience on work and life may be our short cuts tosucceed.

   For those who plan toestablish their own business, they may follow some successful examples firstly insteadof a novel onion. For example, in this day and age, more and more students tryto set up their own business in campus. Some people choose to be booksellers, whichproved to be successful, whereas some people surprisingly want to sale high-levelcars in campus, which is definitely a crazy idea because the rent inside theuniversity is expensive and few students can afford a high-level car. That is,with little experience and immature judgment, it’s easy for them to fail invain. Hence, it is indeed necessary for a person to imitate some reasonablecases.    

   Being different from peopleis a challenge to success. For one thing, outstanding people are easy to benoticed, but people’s curiosity toward their fresh ides will not last long.Maybe it is transferred to other person or it just vanishes. For another thing,the outstanding usually bear the brunt of attack. Once the ever special personmakes a mistake or failure, the criticism he or she receives may be twice ormore than the appreciation he or she has ever obtained.
   Therefore, although it seemsa best way to success, being different from normal group may take much more risksand challenges, compared to people following the public. On the other hand,acting more like others will be a more efficient way to succeed.

面具小姐

9.1独立修改Alex队长辛苦了。。伤了您这么多脑细胞我罪该万死。。。

In order to succeed, you should be more likeothers than be different from everyone else.

To pursue  success, many people would like to stand out and do things outside the box,while another large group of people prefer to imitate successors. As I see it,I am in favor of the latter point of view.
   First and foremost, youngpeople can benefit a lot from their superiors and elder co-workers. Currently alarge proportion of young workers are those who were born in 1980s. Lackingphysical and spiritual experience, these juniors meet with difficulties overtheir capabilities, which their experienced colleagues may hold varioussolutions to. By imitating the superiors’ act in certain conditions, thejuniors can avoid or resolve many problems. Also, apart from solutions todifficulties, their obstacle on work and life may exert a great deal of shortcuts to their success).
   For those who plan to runtheir own business, they may firstly follow some successful examples. While thereare still some people who are desired to show their novelty rather than followpublic’s views may usually fail at the beginning. For example, in this day andage, more and more students try to set up their own business in campus. Havingseen many students succeed as booksellers, a large group of people surge to bebooksellers, which have been proved to be successful. While some students chooseto sale high-level cars in college, which is doomed to be a crazy idea for therent for these high-level cars is expensive and beyond most students’affordability. Therefore, with little experience and immature judgment, thosewho are ambitious to earning their living in this unpractical way are morelikely to fail in vain. And that is why we should firstly stimulate successfulcases rather than follow a novel but unpractical idea.
   Being different from peopleis a challenge to success. For one thing, outstanding people are easy to benoticed, but people’s curiosity, which may be transferred to other persons orvanish later, toward their fresh ideas will not last long. For another thing,the outstanding people usually bear the brunt of attack. Once the ever specialperson makes a mistake or fails to accomplish an assignment, the criticism heor she receives may be twice or more than the appreciation he or she has everobtained.
   Therefore, although it seemsa best way to succeed, being different from normal group may take much morerisks and challenges, compared with those who follow the public. On thecontrary, acting more like others can benefit from the experienced fellows andaccumulate one’s own experience, which will be a fairly efficient way tosucceed.

fuzhengrui

9.1 综合
Thereading material provides us three possible explanations about thedisadvantages of communal online encyclopedias compared to traditional ones. Thelecturer, however, holds a negative view towards these opinions, and gives thefollowing three arguments.
   First and foremost, there are many errorsin online encyclopedia, while they also exist on a the traditional encyclopedias.What' more. it will be much easier for the online encyclopedias to correct themistakes. Errors of the printed encyclopedia, on the other hand, may exist fordecades.
  Secondly, the online workers have realizedthe importance to defense against hackers. They have made two strategies. Theprimary one is to leave a special format to prevent certain crucial parts ofthe article from being modified. Besides, they have assigned several editors tomonitor and check the changes from the online encyclopedias.
   Finally, the lecturer states that traditionalprinted encyclopedias provide limit space to writers, who have to decide which informationis important. But in fact, their choices can't reflect public’s interests. Theonline encyclopedias, however, are mixed with both academic articles and currentlypopular topics. It is considered as the strongest advantage of the onlineencyclopedias.

-- by 会员 面具小姐 (2012/9/2 10:52:16)

Stegosaurus

9.1独立写该
总体来说很不错，杯具的是我开始没有发现你自己已经改过一遍了。。。。。。
To pursue success, many people would like to stand out and do things outside the box, while another large group of people prefer to imitate successors. As I see it, I am in favor of the latter point of view.

First and foremost, young people can benefit a lot from their superiors and elder co-workers. Currently a large proportion of young workers are those who were born in 1980s. Lacking physical and spiritual experience, these juniors meet with difficulties over their capabilities, which their experienced colleagues may hold various solutions to. By imitating the superiors’ act in certain conditions, the juniors can avoid or resolve many problems. Also, apart from solutions to difficulties, their obstacle on work and life may exert a great deal of shortcuts to their success.

For those who plan to run their own business, they may firstly follow some successful examples. While there are still some people who are desired to show their novelty rather than follow public’s views may usually fail at the beginning. For example, in this day and age, more and more students try to set up their own business in （on） campus. Having seen many students succeed as booksellers, a large group of people surge to be booksellers, which have been proved to be successful. While some students choose to sale （sell） high-level cars in college, which is doomed to be a crazy idea for the rent for these high-level cars is expensive and beyond most students’ affordability. Therefore, with little experience and immature judgment, those who are ambitious to earning their living in this unpractical way are more likely to fail in vain. And that is why we should firstly stimulate successful cases rather than follow a novel but unpractical idea.

Being different from people is a challenge to success. For one thing, outstanding people are easy to be noticed, but people’s curiosity, which may be transferred to other persons or vanish later, toward their fresh ideas will not last long. For another thing, the outstanding people usually bear the brunt of attack. Once the ever special person makes a mistake or fails to accomplish an assignment, the criticism he or she receives may be twice or more than the appreciation he or she has ever obtained.

Therefore, although it seems a best way to succeed, being different from normal group may take much more risks and challenges, compared with those who follow the public. On the contrary, acting more like others can benefit from the experienced fellows and accumulate one’s own experience, which will be a fairly efficient way to succeed.

只改了几个小地方，论点展开的也很好，很有条理

面具小姐

9.2 综合

The reading passage provides us threereasons about the ecocertification which wood companies in America will not pursue .The lecturer, however, holdsa opposite view that  none of theseexplanations are convincing for the following aspects.

  First,American consumers can distinguish advising claims that madeby independent certified agencies. They do value ecocertified wood, and mayhave a preference for the products claimed by independent organization withinternational reputation for trustworthiness.

  Second, ecocertified wood may be more expensive than uncertified wood butin a small scale. Only products which are much higher than others will be on adisadvantage in competitions. If the difference between certified wood product and uncertifiedis small (maybe less than 5%), their value of preserving the environment will helpcertified companies a lot.
  Finally, in order to compete with foreign companies, American woodcompanies have to keep up with the advanced developments. If they slow the paceto capture these domestic consumers, the foreign competitors will surge inAmerican market.

fuzhengrui

写的没什么问题  挺好的 哈哈

9.2 综合The reading passage provides us threereasons about the ecocertification which wood companies in America will not pursue .The lecturer, however, holdsa opposite view that  none of theseexplanations are convincing for the following aspects.

  First,American consumers can distinguish advising claims that madeby independent certified agencies. They do value ecocertified wood, and mayhave a preference for the products claimed by independent organization withinternational reputation for trustworthiness.

  Second, ecocertified wood may be more expensive than uncertified wood butin a small scale. Only products which are much higher than others will be on adisadvantage in competitions. If the difference between certified wood product and uncertifiedis small (maybe less than 5%), their value of preserving the environment will helpcertified companies a lot.
  Finally, in order to compete with foreign companies, American woodcompanies have to keep up with the advanced developments. If they slow the paceto capture these domestic consumers, the foreign competitors will surge inAmerican market.

-- by 会员 面具小姐 (2012/9/3 10:42:16)

面具小姐

9月2日独立作文
我拖拉了。。。


it is better to relax by a movie or reading a bookthan doing physical exercise. Do you agree?

 In this dayand age, more and more people are pursuing high quality of life and seeking themost efficient way to relax. Some people would like to do physical exercise,while some others have a preference for books and movies. As for me, I am in favor of the latter one for the following aspects.

  First andforemost, reading books or watching movies are not only a spiritual relaxation buta way to absorb knowledge. Diversified books which fit into different kinds ofpeople, such as fairy tale books, science fictions and detective novels, can presentlarge amount of information and broaden their horizons. So do films. What’smore, most of the reading matter and films are a reflection on reality, which canlead us to interpret how to deal with similar problems and how to be a excellenthuman in real life.  

Also,there are many motivational books and movies which can stimulate our will tofight and pursue goals. For example, the film, the Pursuit of Happiness, shockedme deeply. Before seeing this film, I had ever considered myself studious enoughand no need to try harder. The moment when I saw Chris Gardner and his sonsleeping in the toilet, I could not help weeping. He is the real man who isfighting for happiness, which touches me and encourages me to pursue myhappiness persistently. Therefore, I would rather say that watching movies aswell as reading books are a really good way to inspire our will apart from arelaxation.

Atlast, exercising is a relaxation both physically and mentally, but it is easyto get hurt in doing sports. For freshmen, they are likely to be hurt for theyare unfamiliar with the equipment and operate  the machine improperly. There was an accident happenedin my city during the last summer vacation when a high school graduate was hurtby his own improper operation in the sports center. Hence, because of the existenceof danger, doing exercise is not suitable to everyone
   All inall, compared with exercises, books and films are better in that they are ofbenefit to obtain knowledge, suitable to everyone, and more gentle and peaceful.

面具小姐

感觉很多没听到。。听力还是不行。。

写的没什么问题  挺好的 哈哈

9.2 综合The reading passage provides us threereasons about the ecocertification which wood companies in America will not pursue .The lecturer, however, holdsa opposite view that  none of theseexplanations are convincing for the following aspects.

  First,American consumers can distinguish advising claims that madeby independent certified agencies. They do value ecocertified wood, and mayhave a preference for the products claimed by independent organization withinternational reputation for trustworthiness.

  Second, ecocertified wood may be more expensive than uncertified wood butin a small scale. Only products which are much higher than others will be on adisadvantage in competitions. If the difference between certified wood product and uncertifiedis small (maybe less than 5%), their value of preserving the environment will helpcertified companies a lot.
  Finally, in order to compete with foreign companies, American woodcompanies have to keep up with the advanced developments. If they slow the paceto capture these domestic consumers, the foreign competitors will surge inAmerican market.

-- by 会员 面具小姐 (2012/9/3 10:42:16)

-- by 会员 fuzhengrui (2012/9/3 11:07:52)