这个模板怎么了，害我作文只有21分,求解

cloudkong

给我21分的单项作文，太狠了，我的98分什么时候能刷上百啊！！！！！！！！！！大家帮我来找茬

Integrated Writing

The reading passage claims that_______ However, the statement is strongly questioned by the lecture which provides drastically different/further evidences and argues that__________

First, the reading material states that______. Nevertheless/Whereas, the professor indicates that___.

Second, the point demonstrated in the passage is that______, which challenges the standpoint made by the professor. He alleges that________.

Third, even though the passage illustrates that_________, the theory is somewhat groundless when compared to the argument proposed in the lecture. The professor, in contrast, points out that_______.

In general, the lecture goes against/strengthen what is presented in the reading passage that___________


Independent Writing

When faced with the dilemma of choice, some claims that A is more convincing. While others, in contrast, deem B as the primary choice. As for me , my favor goes to A. There are some conspicuous reasons as follows.

The main reason for my inclination is that_____________. For example,______________.

Another reason why I agree with the above statement is that I believe that A is better than B in ___________.

While admittedly, B has some merit in__________. However, A is more credible/reliable//valuable _________

In a word/In conclusion, it is true that both A and B sound reasonable to some extent. However, considering the potential problems resulted from B and the great benefit of A, I believe it is sensible to make a final decision of choosing A.

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综合重点是写听力的内容，稍微提提阅读的对比。我觉得你的模版都是 the reading， the passage,in the passage放第一句,  给考官感觉都是在说阅读吧。  第一句话一般是概括这一段的，还是讲听力比较好。阅读放在后面对比比较好。

jasonliu119

1.注意，综合阅读的话 是 阅读观点+讲座观点+讲座细节+点明他们两者的关系。在我看来，你少了“讲座细节”，对他们关系没有强调
2. 模板是你自己的吗？一定要是自己总结的。因为现在ETS有电脑程序的，如果你的模板是直接抄别人的话，应该会被检测出来的。 你抄一个人的模板是抄，抄一百个人的模板就绝对不是抄了——你明白了么？呵呵