6-9机经题目 colleges and universities should offer students a better job preparation

hansxiao7

As a substantial number of students are going to colleges and universities to study humanities or technology, the diploma of a college is no longer very competitive in the job market and the fierce competition. To make more graduates get adapted to their jobs after getting schooling, more and more universities have offered their students a job preparation, such exceptional opportunities as internships, to put them in a beneficial position when they find jobs. However, there are large quantities of people thinking the colleges and universities should offer students a better job preparation before they can start working. Subsequently, this has become a hot topic with heated debates. As far as I am concerned, I think that is pretty not fair for universities and such arbitrary conclusion can lead to grievous misjudgments.

It is undeniable that colleges and universities have offered their students a good job preparation, especially for the students who major in technology. For instance, civil engineering students can work in the building site as a internship to learn how to use their knowledge, such abstract subjects as the structural design and surveying, with highly experienced workers. It is incontrovertible that by taking this kind of internship, students can not merely improve their academic study ,but gain much experience, which will never be got from textbooks. After that, the student can also be employed if he is particularly industrial and hard-working. At the same time, schools also offer students extremely useful courses to make more students to learn how to get a professional credential and want to have a typically great impact on students' behaviors in work.

However, it is hardly appropriate to say universities or colleges should offer more to the students, because schools have entirely complete their responsibility. The mainly purpose fo the university is to instill high moral values and impart the advanced knowledge to students, rather to train people who are going to work. In addition, they ofter great opportunities to students, and subsequently make them more beneficial in the future job market. However, a considerable amount of students just think that is their schools' obligation and take it for granted. Therefore, some of them don't cherish the opportunity and just play instead of working hard in the job. The rampant misuse and abuse of the recourse has brought dilemmas and originate calamities for school. The reputation of the university maybe excessively devastated because of that.

As the above evidence, I think that it is generally accepted that universities have offered great chances for students before they can start working and that's indeed out of the responsibilities the schools should take. What can students do is to treasure this kind of opportunities, rather than just want more.

hansxiao7

求大神帮忙批改。。。好人一生平安。。。我觉得我想法怎么这么奇葩。。。

晨依Jacqueline

大哥 你要按照小分队的规则来(⊙o⊙)…
要占座啊、、、

hansxiao7

啊？什么意思。。。

Crystaljoy

这个http://forum.chasedream.com/TOEFL_Writing/thread-661450-1-1.html
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Crystaljoy

6-9机经题目 colleges and universities should offer students a better job preparation before they can start working新人求笼罩

As a substantial number of students are going to colleges and universities to study humanities or technology, the diploma of a college is no longer very competitive in the job market and the fierce competition. (你这句话跟这个题目无关吧。)To make more graduates get adapted to their jobs after getting schooling, more and more universities have offered their students a job preparation, such exceptional opportunities as internships, to put them in a beneficial position when they find jobs.（这不是job preparation吧） However, there are large quantities of people thinking （large quantities of people可以这样用么？there be 表自然存在。改成Lots of people deem that） the colleges and universities should offer students a better job preparation before they can start working. Subsequently, this has become a hot topic with heated debates. As far as I am concerned, I think that is pretty not fair for universities and such arbitrary conclusion can lead to grievous misjudgments.

It is undeniable that colleges and universities have offered their students a good job preparation, especially for the students who major in technology. For instance, civil engineering students can work in the building site as a internship to learn how to use their knowledge, such abstract subjects as the structural design and surveying, with highly experienced workers. It is incontrovertible that by taking this kind of internship, students can not merely improve their academic study ,but gain much experience, which will never be got from textbooks. After that, the student can also be employed if he is particularly industrial and hard-working. At the same time, schools also offer students extremely useful courses to make more students to learn how to get a professional credential and want to have a typically great impact on students' behaviors in work.

However, it is hardly appropriate to say universities or colleges should offer more to the students, because schools have entirely complete their responsibility. The mainly purpose fo the university is to instill high moral values and impart the advanced knowledge to students, rather to train people who are going to work. In addition, they ofter great opportunities to students, and subsequently make them more beneficial in the future job market. However, a considerable amount of students just think that is their schools' obligation and take it for granted. Therefore, some of them don't cherish the opportunity and just play instead of working hard in the job. The rampant misuse and abuse of the recourse has brought dilemmas and originate calamities for school. The reputation of the university maybe excessively devastated because of that.

As the above evidence, I think that it is generally accepted that universities have offered great chances for students before they can start working and that's indeed out of the responsibilities the schools should take. What can students do is to treasure this kind of opportunities, rather than just want more.


看完开头我很晕，浏览了全文后发现你是不是对题目理解的有点偏差呢？。

“同意否？ colleges and universities should offer students a better job preparation before they can start working ”
你的观点应该是agree：should offer/ disagree: should not offer.  
但是你把重心放在了是否应该better上，并且只有第二段的论证是针对这个你的论点的，第一个就是描述现状而已，我还以为你的背景信息怎么写了两段。

建议你在考试时候，审题后列个小提纲。把你的观点，理由1，理由2，理由3（或者承让反方）先列出来，保证交待清楚。

语言已经很强大了~我还学习了呢~ 6.9加油！