也来参加写作小分队，6月15最后一战了，加油！！！

teresaz318

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If you need to discuss upsetting or controversial problemswithothers, you will use e-mail or text messaging, OR use the telephoneorvoice-messaging.

Along with the development of technology, many modern forms of communicationlike phone calls, emails, and lettersmessage 好像切题一点 are extremely convenient. When I need to talk about a problem thatmight be upsetting or controversial, I prefer to use e-mails or text messagingto express myself. I have three reasons for this preference.

To begin with, when we write, we can better control the flow of our ideas,explain complex issues patiently, and convey our feeling explicitly andaccurately. For example, my friends Carl and Julie, they are a couple. Everytime they have an argument, they always stop the quarrel and write an email toeach other to explain why they are angry and what they feel. After they writethe email and read the response, they become reconciled. Witting emails or textmessage can make people understood.（easier to understood?）

In addition, writing emails or text message can be the best way to avoidconflict and misunderstanding. When people talk about upsetting andcontroversial issues, it is quite probable that it leads to an argument withoutproperly control, which makes things worse. Solving problems by exchanging opinionsand ideas through written words can prevent conflicts from happening.Forinstance, one of my neighbors once dropped a note to me saying that mybicycleshouldn’t be parked in front of the driveway. The note was contained ina verylovely envelope, which was so sweet that I could not say no to hisrequest,although it is a shared driveway and I have the right to park my bikethere.

Last but not least, the written words could be evidence thatwe can refer to later. On thecontrary, with the oral communication, we couldn’t prove how the things were really happened. Last week, I bought a pair ofshoes online, but the store sent me the shoes in wrong size. I wrote an emailto thecustomer service and explain this issue; however, the customer service specialist(这不是专家的意思么？你是不是讲故意呢？purposely? Intentionally ) rejected to change a new pair of shoes inright size for me. Then, I forwarded the original emails to hersupervisor, and the supervisor finally apologized for their fault and changed anew pair of shoes for me.

To sum up, faced with troublesome problems, I prefer to use written expression,such as emails and text message. In this way, I could explain my ideas moreexplicitly, control my emotions, and leave some records to refer to.

主题都很清晰～！不错哦值得学习！

joan31217

6月4日 独立写作 101203NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Parents should encourage their children to do their schoolwork independentlyrather than help children to do their schoolwork.

Now people in growing number are beginning to believe thathelping their children to do their homework enjoy obvious advantages. Withparents’ help, children are able to grasp knowledge more efficiently and save alot  of time to develop other habits. However, I assert that encouragingchildren to do schoolwork on their own carries more advantages because it can improvechildren’s ability of solving problems,  sendreal feedbacks to teachers, and sometimes parents’ helps are not alwayscorrect.



To begin with, urging children to do their homework bythemselves could help them develop the ability to solve problems independently. It is an of utmost importance period toeducate children to form good habit of solving problems when they are students.Faced with those academic problems, the children would try to figure out how toanalyze problems and solve problems. This ability will be crucial for their futurelives and careers. In fact, there is no doubt that people could not rely ontheir parents forever, they have to learn how to live on their own and face thechallenges independently.  



In addition, teachers can get real feedbacks when childrenfinish their homework on their own, which could benefits both of teachers andstudents. It is important for teachers to know whether their learning materialswell introduced and explained.  With thehelp of their parents, children could hand in perfect assignments, but it doesn’treflect their true understanding.  Onlyreceiving the real feedback, can teachers know the students’ weak points andadjust their teaching schedule.



Last but not least, as the times progress and societyadvances, educations system have changed dramatically. The knowledge thatparents learned might be out of date. For example, when I started to learncomputer skills in my high school, my parents always tied to help me. However,instead of helping me obtain the computer skills, they make me more confusedabout it. The knowledge they imparted to me is quite different with that myteacher told me. At the end, I have to stop getting any instructions from myparents and focus on what my teacher taught. It is obvious that some parents’helps can make things worse since they are not professional.


To sum up, taking into account of all these factors, we mayreach the conclusion that children had better do their schoolwork on their own.Parents should pay more attention on providing children comfortable lives ratherthan interfering with their study.

lxc1989614

6月3日 综合写作 TPO11

The lecture and the readingpassage give contradictory opinions on if people are reading less literaturethan they used to. 这里不对了，不是if ，是读者少是好还是坏~The passage explains that young people are reading lessliterature than before while the lecture provides several counterarguments tothis view.没有对读者多还是少进行质疑啊，读者少是确定的~

To begin with, the reading saysthat it is unfortunate for people to read less literature since it canstimulate imagination. On the contrary, the professor contends that other typesof books, such as nonfiction books, are also of high quality and can stimulatereaders’ imagination.  

The professor also refutes thesecond point in the reading passage that people turn to read some self-helpbooks or watch other media that are less intellectually stimulated. Theprofessor, however, argues that reading less literature doesn’t（does not作文中不能缩写~） mean that the cultureis（level of culture) in decline. In fact, the today’s culture has changed, and other forms ofexpression can correspond to this change.这个文中没说吧

In the end, while reading passagecomplains that modern literature lack of audience, the professor asserts thatit is not reasonable to blame literature decline for readers. He explains thatpeople are reading less literature because there are less talented authors. Themodern literature is hard to understand.

All of this means that it is notprecise to criticize that young people are reading less literature than ever.

注意听力中的细节~

lxc1989614

6月2日独立写作101029NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Communication skill is the most important character of those who are successful.

It is human that everyone is eager for success这句有点怪~. When itcomes to what character is the most important for those who are successful inlife, some people choose communication skills. I assert that the most important character that a successful person shouldhave is the ability to think critically.

First of all, communication skills are not crucial for thosewhose jobs do not involve in communicating with others. For example, scientistsspend most of their time on researching cutting-edge technology in labs; artistsimmerse themselves in performing beautiful music; software engineers are occupiedwith the work of coding. All of them are successful, but not necessarily to bea good communicator. The success of a person relies on how much contributionsthey make. Therefore, a successful person might be an incommunicative one. one who not good at communicate

On the contrary, the ability to think critically is ofutmost importance for a successful person because it can enable one to makedecisions wisely and prudently. Sound decision making is essential to success.Bill gates, for example, is a very famous and successful man. When he was studyingat Harvard University, he noticed the vast opportunities of personal computers.Consequently, he dropped out of school to set up the Microsoft Empire andbrought the whole world into an information age. The ability to thinkcritically made him make correct decisions at right time.

What’s more, thinking critically can help one concentrate onright targets. We all have only and exactly 24 hours a day, but we often havemountains work? to do in hands, along with which many personal affairs seemequally urgent. Concentrating on right target is probably the only way toovercome such dilemmas. For instance, my brother always makes a plan every day.He categorizes tasks he is going to fulfill according importance and urgency,and then he put his time and energy on those the most urgent and important tasks.By this good habit, he leads a full fruitful life and become a successfulperson.这段好像写偏了

To sum up, to be successful in life, one should have theability to think critically. Even though he or she is not a great communicator,he or she can still be successful.

jasmine35

6月4日 独立

Now people in growing number are beginning to believe that helping their children to do their homework enjoy obvious advantages. With parents’ help, children are able to grasp knowledge more efficiently and save a lot of time to develop other habits. However, I assert that encouraging children to do schoolwork on their own carries more advantages because it can improve children’s ability of solving problems, send real feedbacks to teachers, and sometimes parents’ helps are not always correct. （如果可以改的更加对称会不会更好）



To begin with, urging children to do their homework by themselves could help them develop the ability to solve problems independently. It is an of utmost importance（我读着觉得怪怪的） period to educate children to form good habits of solving problems when they are students. Faced with（有传言说外国人prefer主动句，我可能会用facing） those academic problems, the children would try to figure out how to analyze problems and solve problems. This ability will be crucial for their future lives and careers. In fact, there is no doubt that people could not rely on their parents forever, they have to learn how to live on their own and face the challenges independently.  



In addition, teachers can get real feedbacks when children finish their homework on their own, which could benefits both of teachers and students. It is important for teachers to know whether their learning materials well introduced and explained. With the help of their parents, children could hand in perfect assignment（不然后面it没有指代了）, but it doesn’t reflect their true understanding. Only receiving the real feedbacks, can teachers know the students’ weak points and adjust their teaching schedule.



Last but not least, as the time progresses and society advances, educations system has changed dramatically. The knowledge that parents learned might be out of date. For example, when I started to learn computer skills in my high school, my parents always tied（是想用tried么） to help me. However, instead of helping me obtain the computer skills, they make me more confused about it（it不知指什么，不如删之吧）. The knowledge they imparted to me is quite different with that（是不是应该用what） my teacher told me. At the end, I had to stop getting any instructions from my parents and focus on what my teacher taught. It is obvious that some parents’ helps can make things worse since they are not professional.


To sum up, taking into account of all these factors, we may reach the conclusion that children had （是要虚拟还是？不太理解）better do their schoolwork on their own. Parents should pay more attention on providing children comfortable lives rather than interfering with their study

结构相当清晰，我需要好好学习呢~~
话说看到了很多词中间没空格或是多空格了，我不知道是写的时候没注意还是发布的时候出的问题~~~

joan31217

6.4日 Tpo 12



The reading passage suggests that three piece of evidenceprovide support that the subject of a portrait that is owned by a member ofJane Austen’s family is Jane Austen when she is a teenager. However the lecturerejects such evidence and argues that the subject could not be Jane Austen.

Firstly, the reading passage says that Austen’s family claimedthat the subject of the portrait is Jane Austen since the family gavepermission to use Austen’s portrait in the publication of her letters couplesof decades ago. On the contrary, the lecturer argues that the portrait is notAusten because when the portrait was authorized to be used in the publicationof her letters, Austen has been deaf for 70 years. Therefore, her family membershave not seen Austen and could not make sure if the subject of that portrait isAusten.

The professor also refutes the second point in the readingthat the face in the portrait looked like the one in Cassandra's sketch whichpainted adult Jane Austen. The professor asserts that the subject of the portraitis one of Austen’s cousins who resemble Austen very much and was a teenager inthe relevant period.

In the end, while the reading passage contends that thisportrait was created by Ozias Humphrey who was active painter when Austen was ateenager, the professor admits that the portrait was painted by Humprey,however he explained that the portrait was painted on blank canvas which wasnot sold until Austen’s 27 years old. Consequently, the subject of thatportrait is unlikely to be young Austen.

All of this means that the subject of the new found portraitis not Jane Austen.

joan31217

6月4日 独立

谢谢ＭＭ的修订，我在ｗｏｒｄ上写好的，ｃｏｐｙ到这里就出现丢空格的状况，　而且还更改不了，一改就直接换行了，多多担待。

结构相当清晰，我需要好好学习呢~~
话说看到了很多词中间没空格或是多空格了，我不知道是写的时候没注意还是发布的时候出的问题~~~

-- by 会员 jasmine35 (2012/6/5 11:25:08)

joan31217

6月5日 独立写作 110130ML
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People now are less happy and less satisfied than people in the past.
The world is changing and developing at a faster and fasterrate all the time. With today’s hectic schedules, many people complain thatthey are less happy and less satisfied than their counterparts in the pastsince they endure more pressures that come from various directions. However, I frownon this opinion. I argue that nowadays people are much happier and moresatisfied about their lives than ones in the past because of the improvement ofquality of life, more opportunities they have, good relationship with familythey maintain.
To begin with, along with the rapidly economic development,the overall quality of life has improved dramatically. People could live ahappier life with a better facilities and service.  Moreover, technology has aided us in the fightagainst the two most serious threats to human beings: hungers and disease. Withthe help of technology we have been able to save millions of lives bydeveloping vaccinations, cures and treatment for diseases that used to be consideredfatal.  Consequently, the material andspiritual life is enriched greatly and people could live and work in peace andcontentment
In addition, we have more opportunities to pursue our dreams.When our parents were growing up, the world was filled with turmoil. They hadto work had to feed their family no matter if they enjoy that job.  On the contrary, the current generation hasgrown up in a very safe and peaceful environment.  The society provides them more opportunitiesto achieve success. They could receive advanced education with a wide array of scholarshipor financial aids that school and government offer; they could change theircareers when they come to the career bottleneck; they even could go aboard tofind a job as long as they want to do so. There are infinite chances available foreveryone.  Those opportunities give peoplegreat happiness and satisfaction.
Last but not least, there is no doubt that family is themost important part in our lives. A person's happiness correlates closely tothe family relation. Despite the society has changed, people still highly valuethe strong family ties. For example, during the holidays, thousands of peoplego back to their hometown and get union with their family. Thanks to moderncommunication and transportation tools, they make the family relation closer.By telephones, emails, and internet, we have ability to easily communicate withour family. By flights, trains and buses, we have ability to visit out familyat any time. The relationship with family is more intimate.
In a nutshell, compared to our past counterparts, we live ina stable, advanced and open world.  As aresult, we gain more happiness and satisfaction.

hysx1988

6.1日 TPO9

The lecture and the reading passage give contradictoryopinions(中间加空格） on the topic of hydrogen-based fuel-cell engines.  The passage explains that the fuel-cellengines will replace the internal combustion engines whereas the lectureprovides several counterarguments to this view.

Firstly, reading passage argues thathydrogen can be easily reachable because it can be obtained from numeroussources, such as natural gas and water, but internal-combustion engine dependson petroleum that is non-renewable resource.  On the contrary, the lecturer contends that,in fact, hydrogen is not easily available substance since it must be gained inpure liquid state.  Nevertheless, it istechnological difficult to produce and store pure liquid hydrogen because itneeds an extremely cold environment.

Lecturer also refutes the second point in the readingpassage that fuel-cell engine produce less pollution as its by-product is onlywater. The lecturer asserts that producing pure hydrogen release a great deal ofpollution. According to the lecturer, in the purification process, a largeamount of） coal and oil are burned in order to gain energy, and therefore it createspollution.

Finally, while the reading passage suggests that the fuel-cellengine is more economical than the internal-combustion engine, the professorargues that it is very expensive to produce the fuel-cell engine because itrequires a rare mental-platinum. In addition, there is not alternative metal toreplace platinum so far.

All of this means that hydrogen-based –fuel-cell engine is notthe solution to replace internal-combustion engine.

-- by 会员 joan31217 (2012/6/3 3:50:53)

结构清晰，要点明了，也木有什么语法错误~就是好几处没有空格，要注意一下哦~你发这篇的时候有点晚，我上来看时你还没有发，所以改完了，见谅~:-D

joan31217

结构清晰，要点明了，也木有什么语法错误~就是好几处没有空格，要注意一下哦~你发这篇的时候有点晚，我上来看时你还没有发，所以改完了，见谅~:-D

-- by 会员 hysx1988 (2012/6/6 11:30:20)

确实我发晚了，不好意思。 我是在word里写好粘过来的，所以总丢空格，还修改不了，看着费劲了，麻烦了~