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白天没时间~~~现在马上改了哈~~ 6月6日110198 ML Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Food in the past was much healthier than today. We are what we eat, as the proverb say. When we decidewhich foods to eat and how to prepare them, our choices do much more thanplease our taste buds - they also affect our health.(这里的they感觉有点指代不明啊,如果再用一次food会不会更好些呢。) Food and healthis the (这里感觉应该用a,不应该特指啊)topic of endlessdiscussion, which also brings about some controversy. (这里会不会说Food andhealth is a controversial topic of endless discussion会更好些呢?)Some people claim thatfood in the past is much healthier than today, for both foodstuff itself andthe cooking methods are more natural. From my perspective, thanks to the rapidadvance of technology, and the government supervision on food safety, it's notsurprising that the food today are(food泛指的话是不可数名词) much healthier.(safer和healthier直接画等价可能有点唐突。作者可以再用一句来做连接啊) The development of technology enables us to haveincredible variety of food, which satisfies our increasing need of thedifferent kinds of nutrition. As we all know, some critical nutrition, such asprotein, vitamin and calcium, are mostly acquired through balanced diets.However, due to the lack of food, people in the past may find it hard to meettheir need of energy input, let alone to have adequate nutrition.(这里的let alone to have adequatenutrition是不是一个fragment了呀~) As a result, numerous people sufferednutritional deficiency. Fortunately, advanced agronomic techniques make itpossible for us to easily attain abundant food. At the same time, the convenienttransportation system has ensured the freshness(最好加个of food). We can easilypickup vegetables, fruits and dairy products according to our need(需求的话还是用复数吧这里). Furthermore, along with the increasing(有用过increasing了,可以换做growing) awareness of the significance of foodhealth, the government has attached greater importance to the issue(Greater importance?这个不是很理解啊). Governmentagencies has(have) take the responsibilities for settingfood safety standards, conducting inspections, ensuring the standards are met,and maintaining a strong enforcement program to deal with those who do notcomply with standards. For example, on January 4, 2011, the Food SafetyModernization Act(FSMA) was signed into law by President Obama, which enablesthe Food and Drug Administration(FDA) to protect public health by strengtheningthe food safety system. It allows FDA to focus more on the (这个the多余了)preventing food safety problems, ratherthan reacting to the problems after they occur. Under the severe protection ofthe government, it's not surprising that the food today is healthier than inthe past, when little attention was paid on food safety. Last but not least, some new professions, such asdietitians and nutritionists, have come up nowadays. They are experts in foodand nutrition. They work in hospitals, cafeterias or schools, advising peopleon what to eat in order to lead a healthy life. With their help, people areable to know how to select and prepare food in a scientific and healthy way.Moreover, universities also offer the courses in food and health and relatedtraining for those who want to become a dietitian or nutritionist in thefuture. Though the advantages of food now are considerable, we shouldnever deny that food in the past has some minor advantages. Food in the past ismore natural with little contamination. Comparatively, we eat junk food,non-nutritional food sometimes. However, if we treat it properly and buildhealthy eating habits, the problems can be neglected(应该用avoid,neglect有种主观忽视的意思). In a nutshell, with the help of advanced technology andthe severe supervision of the government, there's no doubt that the food wehave today is much healthier. 文章写的很赞啊···里面的很多观点跟结构都很有说服力。尤其是那个FDA的例子,很能体现出作者表达的主要的意思。lol, 我压根就不知道这码事情啊~~~~楼主的文章也给了我很大的启发~~~受教了~~~~ |
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