【写作小分队】tyyhappy 欢迎狂批^_^

qianjun06

7-1   批改
Have you ever finished school work with complete help of parents and been spoken highly of teachers? It is not seemingly comfortable to be praised for others’ effort. Have you ever come into the situation that teachers （are not informed of ）被告知缺点?are not aware of your drawbacks as you hand on homework well at the aid of parents? Such is common question which would encounter when parents help children do schoolwork instead of letting them finish independently. Form my perspecitive, it is not wise for parents to give a hand to kids for following reasons.

First of all, it goes without saying that teachers conclude from children homework about how they grasp knowledge and who is in need of extra consideration for poor performance. What if parents together do homework with children and， it appears that those students are good at this partwhat if 是条件从句，主句没有了. Take myself my example, my experience at high school is a typical counter-example. I remember there is a time that difficult math problems are assigned to us and each time I turn to my father for help to work them out which consequently leads to perfect homework for a long time. However, the action turns out to be a short-sighted behavior for I get low scores in the final exam in need of independently work. If I have had done homework on my own would I still have got the same scores as before and I guess the answer is no. Therefore, the shortcoming of dependently work far outweighs it good.it's  advantages

Also, the truth that children should cultivate independent thinking patterns plays a vital role when it comes to accomplish homework. No one would come up with excellent ideas if he or she always relies on others; no one is able to complete a challenging task wonderfully if one never does with it alone. Obviously, the theory suits children as well. For instance, once my little sister went out to visit her school friend by bus. It is the first time for her to catch a bus in the complicated transportations and she easily made a mistake by getting on an opposite direction bus. This is not rare. Consequently, I believe children should be brought up without too much help from parents.

Admittedly, sometimes extra guidance leads to an effective work. However, there are other ways such as internet books and experiences from precedent which would probably act as well.这段有点粗糙，本来已经是转折了，再用个however就用转回去了，缺少个例子

As far as I am concerned, it is not essential to help children with their schoolwork for the reasons I mention above.

tyyhappy

7-5综合
The reading passage raises the issue that if the park let the big fire go, then the policy has many negative effects. This standpoint is strongly questioned in the lecture which provides with drastically different evidences and argues that big fires are part of ecologic and have positive effects on many parts.

The professor begins pointing out that the big fires provide new environments to new plants. As in the past environment, there is less open area for little plants to grow, however after the big fire the open places are just suitable for them to plant. However, the statement disagrees with the standpoint that big fire has brought great damage to the park's trees and vegetation.
The professor goes on to mention that the new plants which comes out after the new environment provides opportunities for other new animals to live here, such as small rabbits and so on. However, according to the reading passage, the park's wildlife was deeply endangered by the fire for many species cannot escape. Therefore, the lecture goes against with what is presented in the reading passage.
Finally, the professor states that the big fire in fact bring benefits to the local economy. For tourists would like to see The Yellow Park after a rare big fire, the next year floods of people visited the park and it turns out to boost the economy. The view casts doubt with the contents of the reading passage, which considers that big fires decrease the local economy as a result of fewer tourists in that year.
问题：听力漏点了，只能听着大点，听不完全下面的论证过程。

DanielleZ

The reading passage raisesthe issue that if the park let the big fire go, then the policy has manynegative effects(我感觉这两句话可以成一句). This standpoint is strongly questioned inthe lecture which provides with drastically different evidences and argues thatbig fires are part of ecologic and have positive effects on many parts.

The professor begins pointing out that the big firesprovide new environments to new plants. As in the past environment, there isless open area for little plants to grow, however after the big fire the openplaces are just suitable for them to plant. However, the statement disagreeswith the standpoint that big fire has brought great damage to the park's treesand vegetation.


The professor goes on to mention that the newplants which comes out after the new environment provides opportunities forother new animals to live here, such as small rabbits and so on. However,according to the reading passage, the park's wildlife was deeply endangered bythe fire for many species cannot escape. Therefore, the lecture goes againstwith what is presented in the reading passage.


Finally, the professor states that the bigfire in fact bring benefits to the local economy. Fortourists would like to see The Yellow Park after a rare big fire, the next year floods of people visited the park and it turns out toboost the economy(这个理由没有听全哦，我找不到原文，只能自己听写了一下,做个参考吧~)Theview casts doubt with the contents of the reading passage, which considers thatbig fires decrease the local economy as a result of fewer tourists in that year.

第三个理由原文：
And the last, Fires, like 1988 Yellowstone’s fire, would be a problem to the tourism ifthey happen ever year, but they don’t. It was fair unusual the combination factorsthat year, low rain fall, unusual the strong winds, accumulation of dry undergrowth.The cause of the fire to be massive, this combination has not occur since, And Yellowstonehas not seen that fire since 1988, visitors came back the park the next year,and each year after that
Happy，这篇写的语法没有什么问题，但是第三个理由没有听对，你自己的修改的时候也发现这个问题了。嘿嘿~加油！

tyyhappy

7-6 独立
Have you ever attended an online class of biology or economy? Have you ever listened to an open lecture given by universities? Such is common reality that nowadays open universities and convenient internet are likely to provide more opportunities to obtain knowledge than before. In my point of view, people nowadays are more easily available to knowledge than people in the past days.

First of all, it goes without saying that modern people can take advantage of rapidly developed computers and widely used internet to get educated. Online classes, various of books and videos of lectures are offered to housewives workers and all kinds of people who lack massive time or great opportunities to study in universities. Take my best friend Victor for example, he learns French all and merely on the internet. The books downloaded from the internet and websites about how to learn French turns out to play an important role for him in the process of self-learning. Hardly can anyone in the past believe that we learn a language without a teacher talking with us face by face. Also, it is the website called Ted that shows plenty lectures in diversity areas and these lectures improve my ability of listening to English a lot. Therefore, I state that we have more chances to learn contrast to the past days.

Also, open lectures and various programs given by universities play a vital role in promoting educations. Diversity programs are provided to students who merely have time at night or weekend but are in deep eager to study in universities. For instance, my university is filled with bank workers and company managers on weekends for they are taking further study in business or finance. As far as I am concerned, account finance engineering and math which largely improves skills at work is taught as fundamental subjects in these programs. In addition, open lectures are increasing. Last week, there was an open lecture about Black-Shores equation given by Shores who are given the Nobel Prize Award in my university. That is to say, scholars, students and anyone else have the access to attend the lecture. How surprising and exciting is the new. Consequently, we cannot emphasize more about the fact that people get more opportunities to get knowledge.

Admittedly, nowadays more lures emerge and they may probably take up time or energy from people. However, if we take control of time and balance the schedule, we will probably come over these negative impacts.

As far as I am concerned, the more developed our society is as today, the more easily for people to get educated. For one thing, we benefit from the massive knowledge on the internet. Moreover, more lectures and classes are reachable in universities.
好几天没练习，手生·····

tyyhappy

The reading passage raisesthe issue that if the park let the big fire go, then the policy has manynegative effects(我感觉这两句话可以成一句). This standpoint is strongly questioned inthe lecture which provides with drastically different evidences and argues thatbig fires are part of ecologic and have positive effects on many parts.

The professor begins pointing out that the big firesprovide new environments to new plants. As in the past environment, there isless open area for little plants to grow, however after the big fire the openplaces are just suitable for them to plant. However, the statement disagreeswith the standpoint that big fire has brought great damage to the park's treesand vegetation.


The professor goes on to mention that the newplants which comes out after the new environment provides opportunities forother new animals to live here, such as small rabbits and so on. However,according to the reading passage, the park's wildlife was deeply endangered bythe fire for many species cannot escape. Therefore, the lecture goes againstwith what is presented in the reading passage.


Finally, the professor states that the bigfire in fact bring benefits to the local economy. Fortourists would like to see The Yellow Park after a rare big fire,the next year floods of people visited the park and it turns out toboost the economy(这个理由没有听全哦，我找不到原文，只能自己听写了一下,做个参考吧~)Theview casts doubt with the contents of the reading passage, which considers thatbig fires decrease the local economy as a result of fewer tourists in that year.

第三个理由原文：
And the last, Fires, like 1988 Yellowstone’s fire, would be a problem to the tourism ifthey happen ever year, but they don’t. It was fair unusual the combination factorsthat year, low rain fall, unusual the strong winds, accumulation of dry undergrowth.The cause of the fire to be massive, this combination has not occur since, And Yellowstonehas not seen that fire since 1988, visitors came back the park the next year,and each year after that
Happy，这篇写的语法没有什么问题，但是第三个理由没有听对，你自己的修改的时候也发现这个问题了。嘿嘿~加油！

-- by 会员 DanielleZ (2012/7/7 19:36:30)

谢谢daniellez,有点小苦恼呢，关于综合，如果记了就容易漏点，不记回头又想不起来了····哎····苦逼听力。

tyyhappy

7-6
综合
The reading passage raises the issue that the society benefits a lot from genetic modification. However, this statement is strongly questioned in the lecture which provides with drastically different evidences and argues that it has seriously negative impacts.

The professor begins pointing out that tress may not survive when pests or others changes in climates occurred. Because there are plenty of trees varying in genes, part of they are doomed to get through these damages and pick up by nature however some died. But the genetically modified trees are uniform and they will soon die out when deadly factors appear. This view disagrees with the standpoint that genetically modified trees are made to resist dangers as demonstrated in the reading passage.

The professor goes on to mention that farmers spend more on genetically modified tress. It goes without saying that companies will charge more for the special seeds. According to the reading passage, farmers make extra profits as these trees grow faster than normal ones. Therefore, the lecture goes against with what is represented in the reading passage.

Finally, the professor states that these trees pose a threat on other trees. Genetically trees grow faster and better so that they spread and take up more space in forests. As a consequence, normal trees have to compete with them for water or nutrients. This view casts doubt on the contents of the reading passage which considers that special tress will protect other trees from cutting down for their accumulations meet the need of wood.

包子不包子

7-6
综合
The reading passage raises the issue that the society benefits a lot from genetic modification. However, this statement is strongly questioned in the lecture which provides with drastically different evidences and argues that it has seriously negative impacts.

The professor begins pointing out that tress may not survive when pests or others changes in climates occurred. Because there are plenty of wild trees varying in genes, part of they them are doomed to get through these damages and pick up by nature however some died. But the genetically modified trees are uniform and they will soon die out when deadly factors appear. This view disagrees with the standpoint that genetically modified trees are made to resist dangers as demonstrated in the reading passage.

The professor goes on to mention that farmers spend more on genetically modified tress. It goes without saying that companies will charge more for the special seeds. According to the reading passage, farmers make extra profits as these trees grow faster than normal ones. Therefore, the lecture goes against with what is represented in the reading passage.少了一小点信息by law...

Finally, the professor states that these trees pose a threat on other trees. Genetically modified trees grow faster and better so that they spread and take up more space 可以用aggressive  in forests. As a consequence, normal trees have to compete with them for water or nutrients. This view casts doubt on the contents of the reading passage which considers that special tress will protect other trees from cutting down for their accumulations meet the need of wood.

只有些小错误 其他都蛮好
但是包子不大清楚 是不是要完全遵照听力原文的表述嘞 看到HAPPY用了很多自己的表达 在有听力原文的情况下 嘿嘿

丰碑无语Yee

7-6 独立
Have you ever attended an online class of biology or economy? Have you ever listened to an open lecture given by universities? Such is common reality that nowadays open universities and convenient internet are likely to provide more opportunities to obtain knowledge than before. In my point of view, people nowadays are more easily available to knowledge than people in the past days.



First of all, it goes without saying that modern people can take advantage of rapidly developed computers and widely used internet to get educated. Online classes, various of (various 是形容词建议去掉of)books and videos of lectures are offered to housewives workers and all kinds of people who lack massive time or great opportunities to study in universities. Take my best friend Victor for example, he learns French all and merely on the internet. The books downloaded from the internet and websites about how to learn French turns out to play an important role for him in the process of self-learning. Hardly can anyone in the past believe that we learn a language without a teacher talking with us face by face. Also, it is the website called Ted that shows plenty lectures in diversity areas and these lectures improve my ability of listening to English a lot. Therefore, I state that we have more chances to learn contrast to the past days.



Also, open lectures and various programs given by universities play a vital role in promoting educations. Diversity programs are provided to students who merely have time at night or weekend but are in deep eager to study in universities. For instance, my university is filled with bank workers and company managers on weekends for they are taking further study in business or finance. As far as I am concerned, account finance engineering and math which largely improves skills at work is taught as fundamental subjects in these programs. In addition, open lectures are increasing. Last week, there was an open lecture about Black-Shores equation given by Shores who are given the Nobel Prize Award in my university. That is to say, scholars, students and anyone else have the access to attend the lecture. How surprising and exciting is the new.（这个语气用这不错啊，更生动啦.但是我觉得应该这样 How surprising and exciting the new is!）Consequently, we cannot emphasize more about the fact that people get more opportunities to get knowledge.

Admittedly, nowadays more lures emerge and they may probably take up time or energy from people. However, if we take control of time and balance the schedule, we will probably come over these negative impacts.（这段再有个例子就好啦，虽然字数已经很多）

As far as I am concerned, the more developed our society is as today, the more easily for people to get educated. For one thing, we benefit from the massive knowledge on the internet. Moreover, more lectures and classes are reachable in universities.

Happy的写作水平比我强多啦，我觉得总体写得不错啦，我也从文章中学到了很多，有什么迅速提高作文水平的方法求赐教啊~

PS：好不容易才找到happy的作业地址啊

tyyhappy

7-7独立
Have you ever spent few hours on a seemingly difficult math problem？ However, your friend help you work it out directly in few minutes. Have you ever been assigned a task which needs to be accomplished soon when you travelled outside? Who would you ask for assistance? I guess your friend. Such is common reality that we would like to make friends with those who would give us a hand whenever. In my point of view it makes sense to choose useful and helpful friends other than friends who have lots of fun with you.

First of all, it goes without saying that friends' help may lead to more efficient study. Sometimes a piece of recommendation or guidance from friends may enlighten us suddenly. Take myself for example, once I was working on company's financial sheets to calculate some important figures. It is my friend that pointed out figuring out such things by excel costs plenty time and she suggested to search a website called Wind for these figures. How lucky! The website has provided all what I wanted and needed to work out already and it saved much time for me. What if my friend had not told me about the wonderful website, the massive work must have driven me crazy. Therefore, I state that we should we should make friends who are ready to do you a favor.

Also, friend's help in daily life plays a vital role when considering choosing friends. There are emergencies that we could not deal with merely by ourselves. For instance, once I failed to catch the train on which my friend took my bags and computers. It turns out to be a tragic because my friend has to take these bags to her hometown however far from mine. With worry, ideas came to my mind that I could ask another friend to bring it back home, who just studied in that city and were going back to home. And things went on well at last with my bags back few days later. That's why I emphasize friends who would solve your problems are undoubtedly important.

Admittedly, staying and playing with friends who always crack jokes add up happiness. However, why not we ourselves play the role in such relationship or just choose friends who possess both qualities? My best friend Victor is a perfect paragon. He is highly spoken of for his kindness and helpful actions, in addition he appears humors.

As far as I am concerned, being ready to help us comes first when it comes to choose friends for reasons mentioned above.

DanielleZ

The reading passage raisesthe issue that if the park let the big fire go, then the policy has manynegative effects(我感觉这两句话可以成一句). This standpoint is strongly questioned inthe lecture which provides with drastically different evidences and argues thatbig fires are part of ecologic and have positive effects on many parts.

The professor begins pointing out that the big firesprovide new environments to new plants. As in the past environment, there isless open area for little plants to grow, however after the big fire the openplaces are just suitable for them to plant. However, the statement disagreeswith the standpoint that big fire has brought great damage to the park's treesand vegetation.


The professor goes on to mention that the newplants which comes out after the new environment provides opportunities forother new animals to live here, such as small rabbits and so on. However,according to the reading passage, the park's wildlife was deeply endangered bythe fire for many species cannot escape. Therefore, the lecture goes againstwith what is presented in the reading passage.


Finally, the professor states that the bigfire in fact bring benefits to the local economy. Fortourists would like to see The Yellow Park after a rare big fire,the next year floods of people visited the park and it turns out toboost the economy(这个理由没有听全哦，我找不到原文，只能自己听写了一下,做个参考吧~)Theview casts doubt with the contents of the reading passage, which considers thatbig fires decrease the local economy as a result of fewer tourists in that year.

第三个理由原文：
And the last, Fires, like 1988 Yellowstone’s fire, would be a problem to the tourism ifthey happen ever year, but they don’t. It was fair unusual the combination factorsthat year, low rain fall, unusual the strong winds, accumulation of dry undergrowth.The cause of the fire to be massive, this combination has not occur since, And Yellowstonehas not seen that fire since 1988, visitors came back the park the next year,and each year after that
Happy，这篇写的语法没有什么问题，但是第三个理由没有听对，你自己的修改的时候也发现这个问题了。嘿嘿~加油！

-- by 会员 DanielleZ (2012/7/7 19:36:30)

谢谢daniellez,有点小苦恼呢，关于综合，如果记了就容易漏点，不记回头又想不起来了····哎····苦逼听力。

-- by 会员 tyyhappy (2012/7/7 20:45:24)

我基本上记得时候也是记得多了来不及听，所以我尝试就记个论点的记个词，例子的记个词。然后就可以自己发挥一下，把听力额内容串起来了。
我觉得还比较有帮助的~你可以试试啊~