TWE010,WORK AND LUCK

gladys_gl

感觉越写越差了，可能是原来时间太松的原因吧，修改要2-3个小时，不知道这样是否对真正考试不利？偶该怎么办呢

开批吧，我听着呢

10. "When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success." Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.

Some people think success is resulted from hard work and without any relation with the factor of luck. However, others do not agree with them, and they think luck not only contribute to the success but also is an important component for it. Their considerations are different because of their diverse angles and personal experiences. In my point of view, I support the latter opinion, and my preference will be substantiated in the following discussion.

To begin with, any success, no matter it is small or large, definitely bases on hard work. There is a proverb "No Pains, no gains". That means more sweat will result in more fruits. Facts witness and present uncountable examples, one of which is so persuasive and is described below. When Edison tried to find suitable material as filament for electrical light, he conducted thousands of experiments and attempt various stuff. Although almost every experiment failed and he was enclosed in the puzzle for a long time, he did not give up and keep on attempting more different materials. Eventually, the electrical light was invented and consequently brought light to every room and every office all over the world. It is unimaginable to remove electrical lights from our daily life. Without his diligent work and endurable struggle, we would have to read books beside the dim lamp.

Next, hard work ensures us to grasp the opportunity by enhancing our skills. As a matter of fact,  some attempts will not create a success in certain circumstance immediately. However they still exposed their values that will firmly benefit to the later development. Hard work will definitely mature people’s mind, widen our horizon, enrich our experience and strengthen our skills. As a result, when luck stands in one's shoes, only the prepared head can grasp the opportunity. Otherwise what he can do is just crying, seeing luck off.

On the other hand, luck is the other ingredient to speed up the step to reach the goal. Luck can give people great surprise by open another window when they are engaged in difficulties. There is another concrete example to illustrate the effect of luck on success. Cola, one of the most popular beverages all over the world, has a surprising story in its creation. At the beginning, Cola is one kind of syrup to cure headache. One patient use soda water to diluting Cola instead of pure water, therefore the favorable beverage is generated totally by accident. So that the factor of luck provides more chances and more approaches to success.

To sum up, the opinion that only one part, industrious work or fortunate luck, is enough to lead to success is not comprehensive. The hard work lays the stable basis and gives the correct direction for success, meanwhile luck provides strong impulses and timely activators on the road to achievement. The merits of hard work and luck, when integrating together, will produce triumphal fruits and also o lead to my original propensity.

likui

我收拾～

guoliwei

感觉你越写越好了,羡慕ing

snow_mountain

可以把字体该大的嘛？

pengstone

To begin with, any success, no matter (whether)it is small or large, definitely bases on (stems from)hard work. There is a proverb "No Pains, no gains". That means more sweat will result in more fruits. (And that is what the proverb"No..." imply.)Facts witness and present uncountable examples, one of which is so persuasive and is described below. When Edison tried to find suitable material as filament for electrical light, he conducted thousands of experiments and attempt (attempted)various stuff. Although almost every experiment failed and he was enclosed in the puzzle for a long time, he did not give up and keep on attempting more different materials. Eventually, the electrical light was invented and consequently brought light to (went into)every room and every office all over the world. It is unimaginable to remove electrical lights from our daily life. Without his diligent work and endurable struggle, we would have to read books beside the dim lamp.

Next, hard work ensures us to grasp the opportunity (to succeed)by enhancing our skills. As a matter of fact,  some attempts will not create(necessarily lead to) a success in certain circumstance immediately. However they still exposed their values that will firmly benefit to the later development. Hard work will definitely mature people’s mind, widen our horizon, enrich our experience and strengthen our skills(good!). As a result, when luck stands in one's shoes, only the prepared head can grasp the opportunity. Otherwise what he can do is just crying, seeing luck off.

On the other hand, luck is the other ingredient to speed up the step to reach the goal(facilitator for success). Luck can give people great surprise (surprise people)by open another window when they are engaged in (confronted with)difficulties. There is another concrete example to illustrate the effect of luck on success. Cola, one of the most popular beverages all over the world, has a surprising story in (about)its creation. At the beginning, Cola is (was)one kind of syrup to cure headache. One patient use (used)soda water to diluting Cola instead of pure water, therefore the favorable beverage is (was)generated totally by accident. So that the factor of luck provides more chances and more approaches to success.

呵呵 进步还是明显的

注意基本语法哦

注意不要为了凑字数而使用一些复杂的不地道的表达

gladys_gl

多谢楼上的悉心批改，关于不地道的表达是因为自己水平差而不知道它不地道，不过我会更加努力的，如果能看出有一些进步的话，首先应该感谢你们的热情帮助。