【写作小分队】Byron来了！

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蓝色 表示可能有问题 附加自己观点
红色 认为不错的
绿色 观后感

The reading is concerning about the growth of the human popluation and the agriculture incrsasing's impact(这句话不是很通)on the number of the birds, saying that birds will be fewer and fewer in the following years. While in the contrary(感觉on the contrary 就有转折的意思，没有必要再while了), the professor casts doubt on this perspective and gives her own opinions.
    First, the professor refutes the idea that the human populations and settlements' expansion will cause the decline of the birds number. She admits, though, that some tpyes of birds will decrease in number, she also indicates that the new envrionment of human settlements actually provide more space and habitats for many other birds. These new areas make it possible for many birds to inhabit and reproduce, finally increase the total number of the birds.
    Second, unlike the reading expects that the agricultural activities must increast the destruction of bird habitats as a result of corresponding the growth of the human population, the professor says thanks to（感觉say something that benefits from XXX 换成定语从句怎么样~~~）the technology development, scientists have alreadly cultivated the high productive crops that not only will （can表示能力更好些吧）produce more crops in the certain area but also be more nutrient than normal crops,thus no more agriculture land will be developed and the birds habitats will be perserved well.
    Third, the reading is quite worried about the chemical pesticides used in agriculture will lagrely affect（感觉一个句子里谓语动词太多了 你觉得呢，will前面加个that 变成限定性定语从句如何）the bird population by either killing them outrightly or disturting their reproducing process. However, the professor holds a positive idea. She thinks the（感觉可以引导一个同位语从句，idea that 然后去掉she thinks the 和句号）genetical pest resist new types of crops and more evnironmental and efficent pesticide will avoid this consequence. Like her optimistic expectation about the crops' productivity, she also believe the technology advancement will perfectly solve this anxiety.



首先非常抱歉，昨天是各种事情，今天又是一天的课！所以拖到现在才给你改！

再次抱歉！

观后感: 观点很全，总体很流利，字也很多~

       但是，觉得可以少一些自己发挥，尽量用些客观的，不需要想太多的优秀的自己的模板会好些，最后鉴于我水平有限，如果改得不合适，还请多多包涵！

并祝顺利crack T

byron777

嗯，多谢了~

越人歌

亲~我昨天把4日的综合发上去了，求拍砖哦~
另外，我看了你的文章，高手啊~~~佩服得五体投地了~~求问这么流畅的语言是肿么练出来的呢？感觉不是偶这种生套模板的人能弄出来的呀，求经验~呜~
呃，还有，最后一个建议如果我没听错的话应该是讲树木的抗病毒性是需要基因多样性为基础的，这样才有足够大的可能产生抗病基因，要是大家的基因都差不多的话一个病毒出来就全都死光了，而实验室里的树基因应该都是差不多的。恩恩，高中生物老师讲过所以记得比较清楚，要不然也真心听不懂O(∩_∩)O