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4.15 独立 The most important characteristic for politics is to accept responsibility for mistake. The activities of politics, which are one of the indispensible public issues, influence the heart beats of many fields in our society. Some people strongly opined that to accept responsibility for mistake is undoubtedly the most significant characteristic for politics. As far as I'm concerned, it's hard for me to have a definite attitude towards the most imporatnat characteristic for politics, since politics is a broad concept and has many other essential responsibilities. To begin with, it's undisputed that politics should attach high importance to take up the responsibility for mistake. There are a lot of problems that distract the right track of society every day. If politics do not accept their responsibilities of such problems, no one except for the victims involved in these issues will be concerned about them and solve all the problems. Politics should try its best to act as the protective layer for the safety and development of a society. Thus, when problems and mistakes of the society aroused, politics should take actions. For instance, in many fields, such as public infrastrures, social welfare, traffic operation and emergency, the governments should extablish an outstanding plan to defend itself from making detrimental public image. However, politics should not just remedy the mistakes, but more importantly, need to prevent problems from happening and protect the society. Politics should not watch with folded arms on some issues when problems have already existed and wait until mistakes become difficult to bear and control. The reason why so many citizens hold a negative attitude towards politics is that they just remedy mistakes but never try any precautions against problems. The 2008 Sichuan Earthquake in China is a heartbreaking lesson. If the Sichuan government was aware of the problems houses that had been constructed in low quality might bring, it could have conducted higher standards for houses which can make them more resistant to disasters, and consequently many victims who sufferred from the weakness of houses could have been alive. Thus, we should take note that the primary task for the polics is not taking up responsibility for mistake, but preventing social problems from happening. To sum up, when social problems come to exitence, politics have responsibility to accept them and solve them. But politics should also take actions to lower govermental and public mistakes that may do harm to citizens. -- by 会员 daisyの小夢想 (2012/4/16 23:02:03)
蓝色-词汇句子 红色-语言逻辑 Good The activityiesof politics, which is are one of the indispensible public issues, influencesthe heart beats of many fields in our society. Some people strongly opined that to accept responsibility for mistake is undoubtedlythe most significant characteristic for politics. As far as I'm am(最好别缩写)concerned, it's ishard for me to have adefinite attitude towards the most important imporatnatcharacteristic for politics, since politics is a broad concept and has manyother essential responsibilities. To begin with, it's isundisputed that politics should attach high importance to take up theresponsibility for mistake. There are a lot of problems that distract the righttrack of society every day. If politics do not accept their responsibilities ofsuch problems, no one except for the victims involved in these issues will beconcerned about them and solve all the problems. Politics should try their its best to act as the protective layer for thesafety and development of a society. Thus, when problems and mistakes of thesociety aroused, politics should take actions. For instance, in manyfields, such as public infrastructures infrastrures, social welfare, traffic operation and emergency, thegovernments should establish extablishan outstanding plan to defend itself from making detrimental public image. However, politics should not just remedy themistakes, but more importantly, need to prevent problems from happeningand protect the society. Politics should not watch(/standby) with folded arms on some issues when problems have alreadyexisted and wait until mistakes become difficult to bear and control. Thereason why so many citizens hold a negative attitude towards politics is thatthey just remedy mistakes but never try any precautions against problems. The 2008 SichuanEarthquake in China is a heartbreaking lesson. If the Sichuan government wasaware of the problems (houses that had been constructed in low quality) that poor-quality houses might bring, it could have constructed conducted (conduct为实施引导之意,亲你是要表达建造的意思吧) higher-quality standards for houses which can makethem more resistant to disasters, and consequently many victims who sufferred hurt/harm from the weakness of houses(逻辑上应该是遭受house weakness带来的伤害)could have been alive. Thus, we should take note that the primary task for thepolics is not taking up responsibility for mistake, but preventing socialproblems from happening. To sum up, when social problems come to existence exitence, politics have responsibilityto accept them and solve them. But politics should also take actions to reduce even prevent lower govermental and public mistakesthat may do harm to citizens. Suggestions: 1/有很多小词用的很好,值得学习啦,有一点就是不要缩写啊 2/句子读起来流畅性较佳,但需要克服一些中式英语的表达,像质量差、防范错误等 3/关于politics,daisy在作文里一直使用了politics而不是politician,这个好像不是很恰当啊。Politics的具体含义是“政治事务”,Politics (见维基)(from Greek politikos "of, for, or relating to citizens") asa term is generally applied to the art or science of running governmental orstate affairs, including behavior within civil governments, but also applies to institutions, fields, andspecial interest groups such as the corporate, academic, and religious segments of society. It consists of "socialrelations involving authority or power" and to the methods and tactics used toformulate and apply policy。 我没有对作文中的politics做修改。 |
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