新g Argu 60 求拍~

ykhjy

60) The following appeared in a letter from a firm providing investment advice for a client.
Most homes in the northeastern United States, where winters are typically cold, have traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating. Last heating season that region experienced 90 days with below-normal temperatures, and climate forecasters predict that this weather pattern will continue for several more years. Furthermore, many new homes are being built in the region in response to recent population growth. Because of these trends, we predict an increased demand for heating oil and recommend investment in Consolidated Industries, one of whose major business operations is the retail sale of home heating oil.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

In this letter, the writer recommends to invest in Consolidated Industries for retailing home heating oil based on the assumption that home heating oil would be needy since most homes in the northeastern United States where are typically cold and the weather pattern would continue for several more years based on the climate forecasters, have used oil as their major fuel for heating. Furthermore, the writer seems to assume that many new homes' being built in that region means the market would be larger. Though it seems reasonable at first glance, it is in fact ill-conceived and reasons are as follows.

In the first place, the writer seems to assume that even last heating season the region experienced 90 days with below-normal temperatures, so oil as their major fuel for heating would be demanding, thus investing in Consolidated Industries would be wise. However, there's no information about the weather situation of recent years. It is possible that the region experienced 120 days with below-normal temperatures before last season, thus last season would be a really heating season that the demand for oil would be lower than fore years. And if the weather pattern which would continue for several years would be less and less cold, the future demand for oil would be lower and lower. Therefore it is unnecessarily reasonable to say that based on the weather pattern the fuel of oil would be necessarily demanding, thus investing in Consolidated Industries would not be necessarily wise.  

In the second place, the writer seems to assume that many new homes' being built in the region shows the population there would grow thus more people need oil for heating and the investment advice is reasonable. However, many homes' built there doesn't mean that people would necessarily move into these homes. It is possible that the rent of these houses is so expensive that people cannot afford it, and maybe there always have traffic jams... All these may stop people living in these homes, thus even the weather would be colder and colder, the demand for home heating oil would be unnecessarily higher, and therefore the investment advice may be unwise.    

Finally, the writer seems to assume that based on the trends of home heating oil's increasingly demanded and larger market, investing in Consolidated Industries to retail home heating oil would be profitable. However, even if the trends are likely to become the truth, it is unnecessary to be profitable to invest in Consolidated Industries. Since it is possible that most communities there would demand for this home heating oil by contracting with some large companies, and Consolidated Industries one of whose major business operations is the retail sale of home heating oil may cannot compete with those large companies, thus investing in Consolidated Industries may be not profitable.

In conclusion, the ill-conceived assumptions that demanding for home heating oil would be higher and higher and the home heating oil's market would be larger and larger lead the writer's recommendation to invest in Consolidated Industries to an unconvincingly reasonable one.  

jz20000cn

用了太多的seems.作者的英文基础很好，可是范文背少了。。可以多用一些句式，但记住用句式的目的是让文章更流畅。

dingda6

模板还是很清楚的，语句也很好
只是needy是 贫困的 的意思，没有 需要的 的意思
还有对这一段话不是很理解， It is possible that the region experienced 120 days with below-normal temperatures before last season, thus last season would be a really heating season that the demand for oil would be lower than fore years.
题目里是last heating season，也就是上一个供暖的季节。我不知道你是不是把heating season 理解成了hot season 所以得出对oil的需求就比前些年要少了的结论。

ykhjy

thx~

yuandefeiyi

It is possible that the region experienced 120 days with below-normal temperatures before last season, thus last season would be a really heating season that the demand for oil would be lower than fore year。

不明白这句话的意思。。last season 在文中 已经列出是经过了90天的低温 。它是一个事实论据。你不能把一个事实改了吧。

lukebrehm

In this letter, the writer recommends on investing in Consolidated Industries for retailing home heating oil based on the assumption that home heating oil will be much needed since most homes in the northeastern United States where it is typically cold in the winters and as weather forecasters predict it will be this way for several more years, have used oil as their major fuel for heating (here you have very long sentence that is hard to read so you should try to split it up some). Furthermore, the writer seems to assume that many new homes' being built in that region means the market will grow. Though it seems reasonable at first glance, it is in fact ill-conceived and the reasons are as follows.

In the first place, since last heating season the region experienced 90 days with below-normal temperatures the writer seems to assume that that oil being their main fuel for heating will be in high demand, thus investing in Consolidated Industries would be wise. However, there's no information about the weather situation of recent years. It is possible that the region experienced 120 days with below-normal temperatures before last season, thus last season would be considered a warm season that the demand for oil would be lower than fore years. And if the weather pattern which would continue for several years would be less and less cold, the future demand for oil would be lower and lower. Therefore it is unreasonable to say that based on the weather pattern that oil for fuel will be in high demand, thus investing in Consolidated Industries may not be necessarily wise.  

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In conclusion, the ill-conceived assumptions that demanding for home heating oil would be higher and higher and the home heating oil's market would be larger and larger lead the writer's recommendation to invest in Consolidated Industries to an unconvincingly reasonable one.  ???  --You can't write that.... its either convincing or unconvincing, reasonable or unreasonable


Overall it was a decent argument but not very well written. You got this man! You can do it! Good luck