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[求助]麻烦大家继续来看TWE新增第185_按照185的顺序128/146/175/185

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11#
发表于 2004-7-15 11:38:00 | 只看该作者
总的来说不错。应该有自信。5++
12#
发表于 2004-7-15 13:03:00 | 只看该作者

仔细看了, 没什么大问题啦.  思路很清晰, 潜词造句也很准确. 实在挑不出虾米东东来了, 除了一些语法小问题.


比如"in several aspect" MM到时候留5分钟检查就可以了.


BTW, enjoy 为什么不能多用第一人称? 我认为T考点很多都是personal choice呀. "Would you prefer to be outside or would you prefer to be inside for your leisure activities? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your choice. "


不用第一人称好像很难呀.


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 楼主| 发表于 2004-7-16 04:38:00 | 只看该作者

175. Some students like classes where teachers lecture (do all of the talking) in class. Other students prefer classes where the students do some of the talking. Which type of class do you prefer? Give specific reasons and details to support your choice.

今天写的满多. 接近470. 还请大家继续挑骨头.

基本没怎么用第一人称we. 就用了I来说明自己的观点.

bryonyGG教的foster每次都可以用

哈哈

When confronted with various choices, different people make their own decision. The analysis of these questions will improve the ability to make better judgements during the daily life. Some students prefer classes where teacher talk most of the time. However, in my opinion, classes in which students do some of the talking will help students to learn more, provide better envirionment, and develop different interpersonal skills.

To begin with, students can receive more knowledge in a class where they express themselves. It is obvious that teachers are the those with more experience and better educated. They guide students in every discipline. Nevertheless, learning is a two-way process. If teachers are speaking all the time and students can not express their confusion and questions, students will not be very interested in the lecturing. When students ask questions, discuss difficult problems and put forward their understanding difficulties, they feel more involved in the class so they can grasp more knowledge. Otherwise, students are depressed and their minds may escape from the text.

Next, people are more confortable in a harmoneous environment when they can freely talk about their own thinking. There is an old Chinese saying that when three people walk together, there is one who can be my teacher. Admittedly, it is not that the teachers' lecturing is not essential. It is significant that students feel respected by their teachers. The voice of students need to be heard in class, ensuring multi-ways of communication. Among the students, they can also discover sparkling points from peers when they argue about academic problems. Mutural respect and adoration will be established.

In addition, the basic objective for schools is not only fill students with knowledge or technique. There are much more for the students to be trained. One principal aspect is how to deal with complex relations and prepare to work with different people in the future. Since the world is globalizing and people from all areas of the world begin to communicate more and more, the interpersonal skill sometimes outweighes the pure knowledge. Talking in class can foster this skill and improve the competency of the students.

Someone may object me immediately that students talking in the class will delay the process of teaching and may "waste time". However, I can not agree with this point of view. Good teachers need to control the class both giving students opportunity to extend their thinking and leaving all the students to follow the curriculum. This is a necessary requirement for  teachers.

As discussed above, students need to be allowed to talk in class for some time. Learning in school will be further enriched through discussion and talking. Sharing opinions in class will offer students wise suggestions from their teacher and their peers. After all, students will take their future career with more capability and confidence after the satisfactory training in school.

晚上在继续写2篇. 嘻嘻

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发表于 2004-7-16 04:51:00 | 只看该作者

请问:一篇作文一定要写满500字吗?不是300字呀?

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 楼主| 发表于 2004-7-16 04:55:00 | 只看该作者

请问:一篇作文一定要写满500字吗?不是300字呀?

enjoylifeGG说过的, 350-400. 一般就可以了.

偶AWA考的不好, TWE一定要考到5.5-6.0. 所以自己要求比较严格.

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发表于 2004-7-16 07:42:00 | 只看该作者

pumpkin大侠,

偶希望你把以后写的都post出来,好让我能吸收下“养料”

真是打字神手~~

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 楼主| 发表于 2004-7-16 08:16:00 | 只看该作者
以下是引用JJ2003在2004-7-16 7:42:00的发言:

pumpkin大侠,


偶希望你把以后写的都post出来,好让我能吸收下“养料”


真是打字神手~~




TO JJ2003:


1. 千万别叫偶"大侠", 偶晕.


就称为"南瓜JJ/MM","pumpkinJJ/MM", .........


拜托.....


2. 偶还有10天, 一定继续写的. 写好了就贴来让大家挑骨头. 估计偶写的比155的范文还规范些.


3. 打字没窍门, 练习. 多打.


呵呵呵


18#
发表于 2004-7-16 09:14:00 | 只看该作者

pumpkin MM写作功底很厉害的说!向满分进军!

同意enjoylife517 GG所说的“写作中尽量少用第一人称”。我原来上过1期ESL,老师跟我们说写作中最忌讳用第一人称了,她说用第一人称来表达自己思想的文章是处于一种很低级的写作水平,如果通篇很多“I”,作文分数一定高不了!一开始我也觉得挺不习惯的,但后来就觉得好多了!

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发表于 2004-7-16 10:08:00 | 只看该作者
以下是引用pumpkin在2004-7-16 4:38:00的发言:

Next, people are more confortable in a harmoneous environment when they can freely talk about their own thinking. There is an old Chinese saying that when three people walk together, there is one who can be my teacher. Admittedly, it is not that the teachers' lecturing is not essential. It is significant that students feel respected by their teachers. The voice of students need to be heard in class, ensuring multi-ways of communication. Among the students, they can also discover sparkling points from peers when they argue about academic problems. Mutural respect and adoration will be established.


这段的阐述似乎有点不顺畅.  比如说第二段第一句话说和谐的环境更舒服. 下文的论述中, 似乎并没有紧扣这个思路来.  讲到三人行, 学生未必不如师的道理, 然后才说mutual repsect, 稍微有点remote 的感觉.


这种思路在中国人看来是有联系的. 不过大多少老外行文比较直接, 所以文章读起来论述更清晰.


晚上在继续写2篇. 嘻嘻



比范文好, 同意同意.  很多范文不知道写了些虾米东东.

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发表于 2004-7-16 10:17:00 | 只看该作者
以下是引用JJ2003在2004-7-16 7:42:00的发言:

偶希望你把以后写的都post出来,好让我能吸收下“养料”



严重同意!


实在是佩服南瓜MM的打字速度!

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