请教职业规划

evangelineyang

先自我介绍一下好了，我本科是学的国际贸易，现在申请商科金融研究生。写essay的时候很多学校要求写职业规划么，下面的是我写在essay里的。说实话，我其实对金融行业了解的不多，自己也觉得这个职业规划可能写的很不靠谱。想请对金融服务业比较了解，有工作经验的牛人们给我讲讲相关的知识。
这个就是我写的职业规划啦，知道写的不靠谱，请大家多提意见。。。
A successful career in investment field is what I pursue. Among my plans for graduate school are passing CFA Level One exam and an internship in local fund management companies. With a distinguished MS degree, I wish I could start from an equity analyst position in asset management companies like Fidelity Investment Group. In the next two years, I would utilize every available resource to improve my professional skills and become a Chartered Financial Analyst. In long term, I hope to go on contributing the business and move to a senior position with more responsibility in five years’ time after graduation. A mutual fund manager is the kind of job I want to do in my thirties.

forrestwie

同道中人

colinyang

也是相同的问题，不知道前辈现在工作如何了~~