关于PS我彻底糊涂了，大家来看看！

猪之哥

今天PS传给一个加拿大的AP帮忙看看，结果返回来面目全非。我觉得也许是亮点的地方全部被删了，全部改成那种很平实的语言，但是读起来又还有点点味道。她是我在AOM的mentor，对我一直很nice.她觉得我PS有些地方似乎有点arrogant,还有的表达很dramatic:
I realize this is usual for students in China, but in Canada it is very unusual and it sounds very dramatic. I don't advise using these grand statements. It is important to seem knowledgeable, confident, but also humble.

在此提醒一下大家撰写PS的时候稍微注意一下这一点。PS太难写了，呼唤PS专家指点一二。

过了2小时我收到另一教授的回复，因为我之前给她发了之前的第一个版本，那个AP说很arrogant & dramatic 之后，我赶紧按照她给我改的弄了一个新的版本又发给这个教授。教授看完CV及PS之后回复如下：
Hi **，
I didn’t at all get the sense that you were being arrogant or dramatic. This is definitely one of those cultural differences we struggle with but in your case, I didn’t feel it, to be honest. I think the context sort of requires you to be direct about your strengths and you’ve done that. At least IMHO.

I think it is very well written. And it provides a lot of the details we need, especially your research experience which is very valuable to your admissions.

One tiny thing is some of your pagaraphs became unformatted like the others (most of the document is right and left justified, which looks very nice, but for a few paragraphs the right justification disappeared). Perhaps trivial but I thought I’d mention.

I wish I had more things to change, because it sounds like I’m not doing my job but I read it closely and thought it was perfectly fine.

所以我彻底糊涂了，同一个国家的两个教授，互相认识，还都是OB的，见解咋就这么不同呢？

看来申请博士就像相亲一样，关键是要对上眼。

rainbow146

楼主就是专家

猪之哥

沙发请上MSN,刚才情绪变化太大了。

楼主就是专家

-- by 会员 rainbow146 (2010/12/10 2:48:00)

benxu

Post a few sentences so we can tell whether they read humble enough.

猪之哥

Thank you!
Now I have revised my PS according to the comments from that AP and I am pretty sure that it is humble enough now.

Post a few sentences so we can tell whether they read humble enough.

-- by 会员 benxu (2010/12/10 7:52:58)

leepee

Thank you!
Now I have revised my PS according to the comments from that AP and I am pretty sure that it is humble enough now.

Post a few sentences so we can tell whether they read humble enough.

-- by 会员 benxu (2010/12/10 7:52:58)

-- by 会员 猪之哥 (2010/12/10 7:56:33)

你还在这里纠结呀。。。

lu05721025

所有的人都在“表扬”搂住的纠结