关于独立作文，怎样才算高分的？

ivymm0301

如题，我看到185上面的那些5分作文，写得也不是很难啊，句式，单词，例子什么的用的都很平易近人。。。。而且字数更平易近人，就300上下，不过不得不承认很流畅，看起来那是相当的舒服。但看了下寄托上的作文小组那写牛牛们写的作文，被吓出一身冷汗。。。。。。个个都是长篇大论的，而且例子个个举的那叫一个专业。。。。。。。我就犯糊涂了，到底怎样才算高分作文啊，或者说T想考个满意的作文分到底要写成什么程度啊。。。。。。希望考过的，有经验的各位大大们帮忙解答下
下面贴两个例子：
185上的5分作文

People study in college or university for many different reasons. I think the most important reason
is to gain more knowledge and learn more skills. Of course, there are also many other reasons that
people study in college such as to get more friends, and increase one's self-confidence.

People study in college or university for many different reasons. I think the most important reason
is to gain more knowledge and learn more skills. Of course, there are also many other reasons that
people study in college such as to get more friends, and increase one's self-confidence.

These days, most jobs require people who are educated and have good job skills. Therefore, the
people who want a good job have to study hard and at least graduate with a high education.
Furthermore, as technology advances all over the world, more and more education is required of Some people who study in college or university want to make more friends and increase their
interpersonal skills. They enjoy their lives in university or college and tend to socialize a lot. They
can meet more people who have the similar interests with themselves. They can go to uni ball
after school and make more friends who they trust.

The people who graduate from college seem more confident in our community. These people are

more respected by society. Many people want to be respected and to be important by family,

friends, their bosses, and others in their lives. They find that most of them can confidently talk and

do their jobs as they are more educated. Therefore, most people want to get the confidence

through the university or college study.

In today's society, people need more knowledge and skills to be adapted. The university and

college study is a good way to achieve this.

怎么样，是不是很平易近人，看得人很安心

再来看个寄托上的作文

 Technology cause children show less creative than they were in past
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With the development of the technology and science, a revolution has covered all the aspects of our life. The most direct change among us is that the Toefl test has become the internet-based test instead of the paper-based or computer-based, which makes it more convenient. Meanwhile, the rapid progresses in technology also have deep influences on the growing-up of children. I still remembered that when I was young, I went out to play with my friends more often, while my younger cousin chats on the internet with his friends more frequently today. Thus, quite a lot of socialists doubt that whether the technology will cause children show less creative than they were in past. In my opinion, this kind of view is quite unreasonable.+ K9 y& e) f" ^5 ^2 Z" l( Y
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To begin with, more convenient ways never equal as less creative ways. Children nowadays are often blamed as lazier ones than before. It is a major reason that some people regard them nowadays as less creative ones, since various things can be done more directly without too much thinking and consideration now. For instance, when I was young, I had to make all kinds of skirts or other gadgets such as bed, bread for my doll by myself, while children today can easily buy all these things which are made by designers and special machines in the stores. We should not blame children less creative for that. Otherwise, we all should be blamed as a kind of lazy creature in this world, since we human beings are always developing into less creative aspects. After all, our life is more and more convenient than before so that we need not do many things by ourselves.Thus, what to blame is neither the children nor the technology.
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$ O+ ~5 l6 T; }Besides, the ways to show creative never have a single standard. In the past, children might show creative through making the models by mud or sticks, cutting beautiful flowers by scissors and paper, and so forth. To making some certain things which have gorgeous shapes by their hands was one kind of standard to evaluate children's creativities in the past. However, we should change it with the age which has changed from the industrial age, to the knowledge and information age nowadays. We should not ignore that despite fewer children can make wonderful models by mud or sticks, they can make more wonderful ones through the computer procedures. To judge children in the modern times as the less creative ones still just by the old standard is too unfair for them.& h) M& l9 @% S0 X+ o  c' P; Z8 S
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In a conclusion, the development of the technology is not an excuse to blame children less creative. It also develops and creates some aspects which children have never met in the past.

这篇作文看得我一阵心寒，如果真要写成这样才能得高分，那我铁定尸骨无存了。。。。。。。。。。

ivymm0301

不好意思，编辑得很乱，大家将就看了吧。。。。。。

redim

内容不用很深奥的，ets不会按内容打分，因为年龄有差距内容深度自然有差距

个人认为三条  语言流畅，错误少，逻辑性强 就可以高分

ivymm0301

谢谢解答