AA狗狗自己写的，求指教

chris5105077

号要考了，本月狗狗里的高频AA自己练了一篇，希望NN帮我改一改，谢谢了。

The followingappeared in a realtor’s brochure in a large city:

“Now is theperfect time to buy a house in our city. Over the past five years, average homeprices in our region have nearly doubled. But average stock prices in thenational stock market have actually declined over the same period. Sohomeowners have seen an increase in value for their housing investment duringthe last five years that far exceeds what they could have made by investing inthe stock market. Our city’s residents can surely achieve a similar profit overthe next five years. Furthermore, if residents invest in a home, they can enjoythe use of the home while its value increases, whereas money invested in stockswould not contribute to their quality of life in the same way that owning ahome would. Therefore, all the residents of our city should invest their moneyin a home

正文：
In hisbrochure the realtor reaches the conclusion that all the residents of the cityshould invest their money in home. His conclusion is based on the fact thataverage home prices in the region have nearly double while average stock pricesin the national stock market have actually declined over the same period. Theexample that the homeowners have seen an increase in valuefor their housing investing during that period that far exceeds what that couldhave made by investing in the stock market is set up to support theconclusion. Then further assumption that residents can surely achieve a similarprofit over next five years if they invest in a home was made to reach the conclusion.At first glance, the argument seems to be valid, but after careful checking, wecan see the argument is unconvincing for many reasons.
At thefirst place, the argument makes a gratuitous assumption. The situation thataverage homes prices in the region have increase while stock prices havedeclined over the past five years doesn’t mean the same situation will happenover next five years. It’s a commonsense that homes prices will decline after along time increasing and the stock price will rebound after a long time decline.Five years are long enough. So the evidence may take opposite effect.
In thesecond place, the example that the homeowners have seen an increase in valuefor their housing investing during that period that far exceeds what that couldhave made by investing in the stock market is an insufficient sample. It cannotillustrate that invest in home is the best thing. Although stock pricesdeclined while the house prices creased, we can still invest in other thingssuch as futures, businesses and factories. May be people can gain more profitin these investment.
In sum,the brochure is unconvincing and doubtful. It fails to illustrate why thesituation will be copied over the next five years. Also it should give more information of other industry to prove that investment in the house is the bestchoice. Then the argument canreach its conclusion.

bennywang2usa

有点短吧？

chris5105077

写不出那么多啊，怎么办哇。

bennywang2usa

编模板吧~按错误编，每个错误写个长长滴模板，然后套