救命啊托福综合写作……

valerialam

本人5月8号考托。
伤心的是做了2套新东方送的TPO，综合都只得了3分。
大家帮我分析分析是怎么回事。
下面这个是我120的综合作文10，TPO的复制不下来。。。
大家帮我看看，哪里要改进？
不胜感激。。。
In the listening material, the speaker believes that the vertical stripes cannot serve as a protection for zebras. While the author of the reading material insists that the black and white stripes can help zebras get rid of their predators. The listening part, unquestionably, casts doubt on the reading part.


In the first place, admitting that the vertical stripes illusion the predators, the speaker contends that such illusion is useless. Claiming that the major predators of zebras, such as lions, usually are not dependent on their first sight of their prey, the speaker tries to convince us that the stripes are meaningless. On the contrary, the author of the reading part holds that the stripes, causing predators fail to measure the distance, are helpful in preventing zebras from being eaten.


In the second place, the speaker asserts that the predators, rather than depend on their eyes, usually use smell when preying. Therefore, whether the zebras appear to be a large striped mass does not make any sense. However, this assertion is contradicted by what is shown in the reading material. The author argues that the since predators cannot pick out and individual zebra, they are unlikely to make any attack.


In the third place, citing that zebras usually prefer stand in an open ground than stay in tall grass, the speaker argues that the stripes cannot keep the zebras away from lions or other predators. Conversely, the reading section believes that due to the vertical stripes, the zebras are invisible in tall grass, thus enabling them to get rid of potential risks.


In conclusion, the listening material jeopardizes the reading material. The speaker and the author fail to draw a consensus over this issue.

ak2019

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svblaca

我说说我的意见吧, 我的综合写作业不好,没有像样的格式.
但是, 独立写作, 我可以多少说点(5'). 关键就是多写,多练, 多看文章. 我就是这样练过来的. 独立作文你分类好, 然后没事就多想想这些题目你可以说点什么, 没事就想想. 然后就是多练, 每天就写一篇. 慢慢地,你会感觉到进步.
再就是看文章, 美国的各个大网站的文章,好的句子记下来,或者背下来. 可以的话,在写作的时候就把这些句子用上!
要得分, 你就要有好的结构, 好句式, 以及你观点的深刻度(我个人认为这点重要). 所以没事就多想想什么观点有深度.

切忌, 没有什么万能的作文格式. 中国学生就是一通狂抄, 你抄我, 我抄他的. 没有一个像样子的格式. 我可以说,所有作文得高分的人,90% 的都是有自己独立的风格和格式, 不要迷恋万能的东西.

我也失败过, 所以大家继续努力!!