求助：09年12月机经中的一题（习作请帮忙看看）

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Successful people take new things and take risks rather than the thing that they've done well.（这题是09年12月的机经中的一题）

能否帮忙看看，我觉得自己写的有点纠结···尤其是第三个观点加例子是不是有点偏题？
谢谢解答！！

Whether successful people should take new things and take risks or take the things that they have done well？Some people hold the view that successful people should take the things that they have done well. From my perception, people ought to have the courage to take new things and take risks in that doing that could mould the personality of people and could bring people about the new experiences and attainments.

It can be noted that taking new things and risks is beneficial for people to mould their characters. In other words, compared with the old things which people have done very well, the novel things are more likely to temper people’s perseverance and other virtues. For instance, Chinese parents prefer to require their children to choose a sort of music instrument or other art to practice their determinations. Through studying the instrument or the art, children will start to learn how to solve the problems on their instrument and how to adjust themselves’ mood and to stick to the new tasks.
What’s more, there are more experiences and gains from new things and risks. If some one who stick to the musical instrument or other art will accumulate the experiences about life or acquire the spirit of perseverance and of facing problems. The unique profit will make a great difference on his future life.



Additionally, it is inevitable to be sluggish or to lag behind from others that some one who always do the well-done things identically are accustomed to the satisfaction. Let us take one student who is a college student now in the MIT for example. He was always practicing his math to get a good score but ignoring the English. When the college entrance exam was near the corner and his English lagged behind from others in the class, he recognized the importance of catching up with others’ English in the class. And for 60 nights, he stayed up till 2:00AM to study English, finally achieved his goal.




In summary, taking into accounts all this effects of taking the things that they have done well, we may safely draw the conclusion that take new things and risks is advantageous to the successful man.






What’s more, there are more experiences and gains from new things and risks. If some one who stick to the musical instrument or other art will accumulate the experiences about life or acquire the spirit of perseverance and of facing problems. The unique profit will make a great difference on his future life.



Additionally, it is inevitable to be sluggish or to lag behind from others that some one who always do the well-done things identically are accustomed to the satisfaction. Let us take one student who is a college student now in the MIT for example. He was always practicing his math to get a good score but ignoring the English. When the college entrance exam was near the corner and his English lagged behind from others in the class, he recognized the importance of catching up with others’ English in the class. And for 60 nights, he stayed up till 2:00AM to study English, finally achieved his goal.




In summary, taking into accounts all this effects of taking the things that they have done well, we may safely draw the conclusion that take new things and risks is advantageous to the successful man.







It can be noted that taking new things and risks is beneficial for people to mould their characters. In other words, compared with the old things which people have done very well, the novel things are more likely to temper people’s perseverance and other virtues. For instance, Chinese parents prefer to require their children to choose a sort of music instrument or other art to practice their determinations. Through studying the instrument or the art, children will start to learn how to solve the problems on their instrument and how to adjust themselves’ mood and to stick to the new tasks.
What’s more, there are more experiences and gains from new things and risks. If some one who stick to the musical instrument or other art will accumulate the experiences about life or acquire the spirit of perseverance and of facing problems. The unique profit will make a great difference on his future life.



Additionally, it is inevitable to be sluggish or to lag behind from others that some one who always do the well-done things identically are accustomed to the satisfaction. Let us take one student who is a college student now in the MIT for example. He was always practicing his math to get a good score but ignoring the English. When the college entrance exam was near the corner and his English lagged behind from others in the class, he recognized the importance of catching up with others’ English in the class. And for 60 nights, he stayed up till 2:00AM to study English, finally achieved his goal.




In summary, taking into accounts all this effects of taking the things that they have done well, we may safely draw the conclusion that take new things and risks is advantageous to the successful man.






What’s more, there are more experiences and gains from new things and risks. If some one who stick to the musical instrument or other art will accumulate the experiences about life or acquire the spirit of perseverance and of facing problems. The unique profit will make a great difference on his future life.



Additionally, it is inevitable to be sluggish or to lag behind from others that some one who always do the well-done things identically are accustomed to the satisfaction. Let us take one student who is a college student now in the MIT for example. He was always practicing his math to get a good score but ignoring the English. When the college entrance exam was near the corner and his English lagged behind from others in the class, he recognized the importance of catching up with others’ English in the class. And for 60 nights, he stayed up till 2:00AM to study English, finally achieved his goal.




In summary, taking into accounts all this effects of taking the things that they have done well, we may safely draw the conclusion that take new things and risks is advantageous to the successful man.