31日迎战，求过来人评分

jackdream

偶用 ETS 样题上的题目写了两篇，欢迎大家打分和评论:

1.  Integrated writing:
The speaker talks about a research on Altruism behavior that one sacrifices oneself to benefit others. The speaker refutes the opinion in the passage that meerkat is a good example of Altrusim.

The speaker asserts that the guard in a group of meerkat is not sacrificing itsefl. The guard usually already has a full stamach while doing the guard job. In addition, the guard is usually the first one to see the predator and has better chance to run into the burrow. Those in a group usually attract more attention from the predator, and are doing dangrous hunting job. This directly contradicts with what the passage mentions.

Further more, the speaker also believes that human kidney donator is not doing this for nothing. The donator usually receives appreciation from the kidney receiver and the society. Different from the animal, human has lots of non-material needs. By donating the kidney, the donator feels great self worth, which is important spiritual satisfaction. This obviously rejects the passage which believes one sacrifices solely to benefit others and get no return.

To sum up, the speaker refers to new research result to refute the examples mentioned in the passage. The speaker believes that the meerkat guard and human kidney donator both benefit from the behavior and this contradicts with the definition of Altruism.

2. Independently writing:
A common question for young adults is when to live separately from parents. Although some strongly prefer to live with parents for longer time, in my opinion it's a better choice for young adults to live separately as soon as possible. My opinion involves several reasons to be introduced below.

Living separately will greatly increase the ability to be independent and the sense of responsibility. After living separately from parents, a young adult will need take care life independently. Many benefits do  not exist any longer. For instance, a young adult has to prepare breakfast, take care of laundry, pay utility bill, take care of own health independently. These are small things but import for someone to live independently. Once young adults start own new family, those with experience of living separately have much better ability to deal with these problems in life. In addition, by taking care of these life issues independently, young adults will have better sense of responsibility. This is essential for future development in career as well.

Further more, the living separately will give young adults better chance to meet new friends and develop new ideas on life and career. When living separately, a young adult does not need to worry that coming back late disturbs parents. Young adults can stay longer time to meet new friends and exchange ideas. In my own case, my parents always wish me go home early when we are living together. Although it's important to spend time with family, overdoing this made me feel unfreshed. Later on when I live separately, I use some of the evenings after work to meet classmates, colleagues and their friends. Then I developed network which helped me a lot when I changed my career path.

In one nutshell, living separately is a better choice for young adults. Although young adults have to take care of basic life issues by themselves, living separately will help develop better sense of responsibility and meet new friends. This will have great benefit on future life and career.