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162. Some famous athletes and entertainers earn millions of dollars every year. Do you think these people deserve such high salaries? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Here's one voice that some famous celebrities such as athletes and movie stars as well as singers should not be granted so much fortune. On the other hand, there are other opponents who importantly value these celebrities who deserve such high salaries. As far as I am concerned, I would like to side with the latter side which supports justifiable assignation of wealth to those celebrities based on the following reasons.
First of all, these athletes and entertainers have made hard efforts behind the spotlight and media in order to acquire what they have fulfilled as we see now. For athletes, they have to spend much time and energy exercising hard in field or swimming pool wherever we can suppose even if under extremely harsh conditions because their professions do not permit them to take several breaks during intensive exercising sessions but keep scientifically lasting stimulus on muscle improvement in order to reinforce what they have accumulated previously, otherwise all efforts they have paid before could be probably washed out. Similarly, the same rule also applies to these entertainers since we do not know how much efforts they have to pay behind the screen either in form of struggling for one role in a movie or film or bearing pains and discomfort in process of filming. Hence, I think those hard preparations that they have translated into visible successes but probably the public has not been aware should be importantly valued by the society.
Moreover, these people also have made great contribution to the enjoyment the public are comfortably experiencing. Supposedly, how can we associate with those excitingly ever-changing world records in swimming pool or field and touching or funny movies that we watch with our family for fun during sweet holidays provided that they have not involved. Just because of their presence in appropriate situations, we can feel what we have never experienced, entertaining ourselves and relaxing stress probably derived from heavy workload and tension between family members. Without them, I do not think there is a better way to acquire such entertainment. And arguably, great incentives should be responsible for these performances in their corresponding stages. Therefore, letting them go on the road could accommodate our colorful life because they deserve it.
To wrap up, athletes and entertainers are eligible for being granted such wealth based on their hard efforts overlooked by the media and those contributions to public entertainment that helps to relieve stress in life and work.
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