发第一篇上来,童年是人生最美好的时光,想捱点批,帮忙看看吧

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自我评价: 用笔写了很久,结果写了500多词,再在电脑上改了很久缩成现在这样.所以完全没实战的代表性,按时间写一定会更简陋

突出的问题是词汇贫乏,句型不注意多变.自己觉得观点展开得还可以,但缺乏例子!!不知道是否符合rater的标准.还有不知道3大点理由会不会太长...

第一次在CD发贴......各大小方面的批评...希望各为路过时献上...

题目在某口语机经上找到的:你认为童年是人生中最美好的时光吗?

我的正文:

To enjoy a complete life, which is made up of different stages and periods, most of us may experience childhood, adolescence, middle age and later years. It is true that every stage of our life, with its unique merit, is enjoyable and treasurable. However, childhood, as far as I am concerned, is among them the most beautiful and precious time in life.

 

Above all, life in the childhood is carefree. Most of us are taken care of meticulously by parents. They try to satisfy our need as much as possible, and protect us from harms and dangers in the outside world. In this way, we probably have little thing to worry about. Also, not knowing much, we actually have no idea what to worry about, while, on the contrary, with our knowledge increase when we grow up, we are often made anxious by this theory or that fact, creating added ennui. In a word, childhood is a time when we are more insouciant than any other period of life.

 

What is more, children are easier to satisfy than adults. A simple and little thing may fill a child’s heart with happiness and joy for a whole day, for example, a small new toy. Try to search in your memory: were you once profoundly moved by some little things happened in your childhood, like that a flower you planted bloomed? It may be difficult to have once more such feeling; because you have already too much to concern and your ceaselessly growing desire has flooded your mind. Only in childhood can we get so much happiness with limited possession.

 

Further more, childhood has more influence to us than any other period of life. This is a time when we develop our personality and knowledge. Things and people we meet may change greatly our future without our knowing it. In addition, children learn faster than when they become adults. The better education we receive at this time, the more capable to realize our own value we will be. Hence childhood should be treasured, as it is more likely to help us make a difference.

 

With the discussion we can safely draw the conclusion that childhood is the most beautiful and treasurable time in human life. Tough we have become adults now, we still hold the precious childhood memory and we should always try to keep a heart of child.