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fashionyuan

Do you agree or disagree with following statement? People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

 

The question of whether people should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing depend on situation. In many cases, people always choose to do anything in term of their interests in order to showing their personalities. But sometimes people have to do things they do not like to do. Some specific reasons will be illustrated as follows:

 

For one thing, in a society that is becoming more complex and cruel, people sometimes have forced to do many things they do not want to do when their subsistence, the basic right of human being, has been threaten. For example, because of enviromental deterioration and wheather variation, food production of farmer is decreasing, and their land has lost its orginal function. Thus extra farmers decide to go to big cities to find a job for subsistence. Most of them have never accepted high education, often engage in low-salary jobs such as baby sitter, worker, cleaner. All of these jobs can provide them a constantly economical supporting. Whether they like or do not like, they have to do. 

 

Another reason why people sometimes do things they do not enjoy doing is that it is defenitely to satisfy the requirement of individual development. For instance, in campus, lots of students have little interested in mathematics which contains many complex theroies and quotations. But they have to learn it. If a student study maths very well, they have also done well in many other subjects—economics, physics,chemistry, and so on. because it can help him cultivate a good logical thinking which is quite important in future career in society and make their work much more conveniently and efficiently.

 

In some special cases, people have to do things they do not like to do. For example, when your friend has been caught a cancer, you can not tell him the truth in order to release psychological pressure.

 

In summary, due to the above mentioned reasons, which sometimes correlate with each other to form an organic whole, consequently I completely agree with that people sometimes should do things they have to do.

LFGT

The question that whether people should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing (多餘) depends on different situations. In many cases, people always choose to do things that they like to show their personalities, but sometimes do things they do not like as well. Some specific reasons will be illustrated as follows:

For one thing, in a society that is becoming more complex and cruel, people sometimes have been forced to do things they do not want to do when they need to satisfy their subsistence, which is the basic desire of human being. For example, because of environmental deterioration and weather variation, food production has decreased, and land has lost its value, thus forcing farmers decide to go to urban region to make a living. Most of them are not well-educated, and therefore often engage in low-salary jobs such as baby sitter, worker and cleaner. All of these jobs can provide them with a constant economic support. They have to do these jobs regardless their interests.

Another reason why people sometimes do things they do not enjoy doing (多餘) is that they do it to meet the requirement of individual development. For instance, in campus, lots of students have little interests in mathematics that contains many complex theories and quotations, but they have to learn it. If a student study math very well and have also done(完成時和現在時並列不是太好) well in many other subjects—economics, physics, chemistry (不用逗號) and so on
  (整個句子只有一個IF從句, 沒有主句), he/she will be more eligible for future competition, since it can help him cultivate a good logical thinking that is quite important in future career in society (多餘) and make their work much more conveniently and efficiently.
   (前面是him, 後面是their, 改爲make them work more conveniently and efficiently)

What’s more, (遞進) in some special cases, people have to do things they are unwilling to do to protect people around them. For example, when one of your friends has been（去掉，不能用被動啊，cancer不會被caught）
  caught cancer, you cannot tell him the truth directly since the truth may crash him and make situation even worse.

In summary, due to the reasons mentioned above, which sometimes correlate with each other to form an organic whole(怎麽理解的這句話?), consequently I completely agree with(多餘) that people sometimes should do things they have to do.

沒很仔細看(忙, 要細改的話很多結構要重寫),覺得行文邏輯不是太清晰,用詞太簡單,句型沒變化(不要怪我太直,背點句型吧,時間緊張的話,不緊張就多看點國外的文章), 基本的東西還需要加強.我改的不贊成的話可以改回來.

[此贴子已经被作者于2008-11-3 23:20:23编辑过]

fashionyuan

非常感谢 我看了改过后的文章 真是好很多

谢谢 谢谢

LFGT

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